Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid tense inconsistency (use past when describing past events) and unnecessary repetition. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I started using the internet about 15 years ago when I was 22. At that time I got my first smartphone, so I mainly used the internet for email and social media to keep in touch with friends.

Sugerencia: Good structure and reasons. Make it slightly more specific by giving exact frequency or time windows and use a clear linking word to show consequence. Keep it within four sentences.

Ejemplo: I try not to go online very often because I worry it reduces my productivity. Therefore, I usually check my phone twice a day — once in the morning and once in the evening — to read messages and handle quick tasks.

Sugerencia: Answer is descriptive but too long and has run-on sentences. Start with a topic sentence, then add one specific detail and one short result. Use linking words like 'because' and 'as a result' correctly and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was 10 I couldn't go online because our village had no phone or internet service. As a result, I often felt left out and spent more time meeting friends in person.

Sugerencia: Very clear and specific. To improve further, add a brief linking phrase to emphasize reasons and avoid minor redundancy. You could mention approximate minutes to be more concrete.

Ejemplo: No, I don't. I don't use social media and I only check my email once a day, usually for 10–15 minutes in the morning or evening to read messages and pay bills.

Sugerencia: Good idea but watch grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'friends who spend') and word choice ('meet ups' -> 'meet-ups' or 'meetings'). Start with a clear topic sentence and include one concrete plan. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: I don't think my life would change much because I don't rely heavily on the internet. However, I would miss friends who spend a lot of time online, so I would arrange regular meet-ups and plan weekly social activities to stay connected.

× It was a long time ago. I started using the Internet about 15 years ago when I was 22 and I got my first smartphone and I mainly use it at the time for e-mail and social media to keep in touch with friends.

✓ It was a long time ago. I started using the Internet about 15 years ago when I was 22 and I got my first smartphone, and I mainly used it at the time for e-mail and social media to keep in touch with friends.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'started' and 'got' are past, but 'use' is present. Because the events happened in the past, the verb should be in past tense ('used'). Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when describing past events.

× So I set specific times for checking my phones.

✓ So I set specific times for checking my phone.

The speaker refers to a single device possession in context; 'phones' is plural and conflicts with earlier singular references. This is primarily a noun number issue but affects present-tense habitual action. Use 'phone' to match intended singular possession. Suggestion: ensure number consistency for objects when describing habitual actions.

× Yes. When I was 10 I didn't have a phone, computer or Internet access at home, so I couldn't go online because the phone network and the Internet were linked where I lived, it was impossible to make calls or browse the web, so I often felt left out and had to meet friends in person instead.

✓ Yes. When I was 10 I didn't have a phone, computer, or Internet access at home, so I couldn't go online because the phone network and the Internet were linked where I lived. It was impossible to make calls or browse the web, so I often felt left out and had to meet friends in person instead.

Run-on sentence with comma splices and tense is past, which is correct. The main issue is sentence structure (comma splice). Breaking into two sentences improves clarity and maintains past tense. Suggestion: avoid comma splices by using periods or conjunctions to join independent clauses.

× No, I don't spend too much time online because I don't use any social media and only check my e-mail once a day.

✓ No, I don't spend too much time online because I don't use any social media and I only check my e-mail once a day.

Missing subject 'I' before 'only check' makes the coordination slightly awkward. Adding 'I' clarifies the subject and keeps present simple tense consistent for habitual actions. Suggestion: include the subject in coordinated clauses for clarity.

× Usually I go online for a short time in the morning or evening to read messages and pay bills so it doesn't feel like a waste of time.

✓ Usually I go online for a short time in the morning or evening to read messages and pay bills, so it doesn't feel like a waste of time.

This sentence needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' joining independent clauses. The verbs 'read' and 'pay' are correct infinitive forms after 'to'. The issue is punctuation affecting clarity rather than verb form. Suggestion: use proper punctuation to separate independent clauses.

× I wouldn't change much because I don't rely heavily on the Internet.

✓ I wouldn't change much because I don't rely heavily on the Internet.

Sentence is grammatically correct; included for completeness. 'Wouldn't' correctly expresses hypothetical situation and 'don't' expresses current fact. No change needed.

× However, I would miss friends who spends a lot of time online, so I would make an effort to see them in person more often and plan regular meets up.

✓ However, I would miss friends who spend a lot of time online, so I would make an effort to see them in person more often and plan regular meet-ups.

'Who' refers to 'friends' (plural), so the verb should be 'spend' not 'spends'. Also 'meets up' is incorrect; use the noun 'meet-ups' or the verb phrase 'meet up'. Hyphenating 'meet-ups' is standard for the noun. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural antecedent and use correct noun form 'meet-ups' or phrase 'meet up'.