Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Good direct response and clear examples. To improve, correct minor word choice ("ties" likely meant "toys"), avoid redundancy, and tighten sentences. Use one topic sentence then a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Pronoun consistency and small grammar fixes will help.

Ejemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to take turns with toys and food so everyone could enjoy playing together.

Sugerencia: Answer is brief and relevant but too short and repetitive. Expand with a topic sentence and a specific detail, using a linking word to connect ideas. Fix the phrasing "sharing like" to "sharing things like."

Ejemplo: I usually share things like food and toys. For instance, I often bring snacks to parties and lend toys to younger cousins so they can have fun.

Sugerencia: Strong, specific content and good example. Improve slightly by fixing small grammar errors ("them permission" -> "their permission") and using a linking word to connect the reason and example.

Ejemplo: Personal or sensitive information, such as bank details or medical records, should not be shared because it can cause identity theft or embarrassment. For example, I would never post someone’s private messages or photos online without their permission.

Sugerencia: Clear answer but slightly awkward phrasing and redundancy ("interest, interesting"). Improve by giving a brief reason with a linking word and one specific example of being busy. Keep it concise and natural.

Ejemplo: No, not really. Recently I’ve been busy with a big project at work, so I haven’t had any news or updates to share with friends.

Sugerencia: Good structure: direct answer plus reasons and consequence. Improve by combining into a single polished topic sentence and using a linking word to connect reason and consequence. Also avoid comma splice.

Ejemplo: My best friend Sarah. I tell her first because we’re very close, and since she’s so supportive she usually celebrates with me and helps me plan what to do next.

Sugerencia: The idea is good but the answer has grammar and clarity problems and repetition ("when when", "visually hired" unclear). Make the topic sentence clear (e.g. positive personal news), then give a specific example with correct verb tense and linking words. Avoid confusing phrases.

Ejemplo: I mainly share positive personal news with my friends. For example, when I was recently hired at my company, I told them about the role and why I was excited because they care about my career progress.

× They taught me to share things like food and ties when I was a child, and my parents often encouraged me to take turns so everyone could enjoy playing together.

✓ They taught me to share things like food and toys when I was a child, and my parents often encouraged me to take turns so everyone could enjoy playing together.

The sentence uses past tense correctly, but contains a word choice error: 'ties' is likely a typo for 'toys'. This is not a tense issue but fixing it preserves the past-tense narrative. Suggestion: replace 'ties' with 'toys' to match the intended meaning.

× I like sharing like food and toys.

✓ I like sharing food and toys.

The phrase repeats 'like' unnecessarily. The structure 'I like sharing X and Y' is correct; remove the extra 'like' to correct redundancy. Suggestion: use 'I like sharing food and toys.'

× For example, I wouldn't post someone's private message or photos online without them permission.

✓ For example, I wouldn't post someone's private messages or photos online without their permission.

Possessive pronoun 'their' is required before 'permission'. Also 'message' should be plural 'messages' to match 'photos' parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'their permission' and make nouns parallel.

× No, I don't have anything to share. Recently I've been quite busy with work so I haven't had any interest, interesting news or updates to tell anyone.

✓ No, I don't have anything to share. Recently I've been quite busy with work, so I haven't had any interesting news or updates to tell anyone.

The phrase 'any interest, interesting news or updates' is awkward and redundant. Use 'any interesting news or updates' to convey lack of things to share. Comma needed before 'so' to connect clauses. Tenses (present perfect continuous and present perfect) are appropriate.

× My best friend Sarah, I usually tell her first because we're very close and she's always excited and supportive.

✓ My best friend Sarah; I usually tell her first because we're very close and she's always excited and supportive.

This is punctuation rather than pronoun error, but sentence fragment structure is improved by adding a connector. Alternatively combine: 'I usually tell my best friend Sarah first...' Also original is acceptable in speech; suggestion: 'I usually tell my best friend Sarah first because we're very close and she's always excited and supportive.'

× I usually share positive personal views with my friends. For example, when when I was visually hired at my company, I tell them about the job role and why I'm excited because they are supportive and interested in my career progress.

✓ I usually share positive personal news with my friends. For example, when I was recently hired at my company, I told them about the job role and why I was excited because they are supportive and interested in my career progress.

Multiple issues: 'views' is an odd collocation—'news' fits better. Duplicate 'when' removed. 'visually hired' is incorrect; likely 'recently hired'. Tense consistency: the hiring event is past, so use past simple 'was hired' and 'told' and 'was excited'. The clause 'because they are supportive' can remain present since their supportive nature is ongoing. Suggestion: use accurate word choice and keep past tense for past events.