Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and unclear phrases (e.g., “recognition ceremony”, “until I get”). Also correct tense and article use (a red bicycle, my mom bought me).

Ejemplo: Yes. I had a red bicycle when I was about eight. My mother bought it for me as a prize after a school ceremony, and I rode it almost every day. As a result, I once sprained my wrist because I cycled too much.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid filler phrases like “that's all thank you.” Correct repetition and small grammar errors (are are → are).

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, when I was in high school a lot of students biked to school to save money and time. In addition, bikes are eco-friendly and help reduce traffic congestion.

× When I was a kid, probably around 8 to 9 years old, I used to have a red bicycle that my mom bought me as a gift for our recognition ceremony and I utilized it almost every day and to the point that I had a sprain since I was cycling all day until I get.

✓ When I was a kid, probably around eight or nine years old, I had a red bicycle that my mom bought me as a gift for a recognition ceremony, and I used it almost every day until I sprained my wrist from cycling so much.

The original sentence mixes tenses and uses inappropriate verb forms: 'used to have' is accepted but 'utilized' is formal and awkward; 'to the point that I had a sprain since I was cycling all day until I get' is ungrammatical and mixes past and present. Use simple past ('had', 'bought', 'used', 'sprained') to describe past events. Replace 'utilized' with 'used' and rephrase the injury clause to 'until I sprained my wrist from cycling so much' for clarity and correct tense. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when narrating childhood events, use natural verbs (use instead of utilize), and specify the injured body part if possible.

× Yes I think bikes are are almost used even when I was in high school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes were commonly used even when I was in high school.

The sentence contains a pronoun/verb mismatch and redundancy ('are are') and wrong tense. Because the speaker refers to a past time ('when I was in high school') the verb should be past plural 'were' not present 'are'. Also 'almost used' is awkward; 'commonly used' or 'widely used' is clearer. Remove the duplicated word and match tense to the time reference. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time adverbials and use clear adverbs like 'commonly' or 'widely'.

× Many people use it for everyday transport and I believe bikes are useful and eco friendly so why not use more bikes?

✓ Many people use them for everyday transport, and I believe bikes are useful and eco-friendly, so why not use bikes more?

There is a pronoun agreement error: 'Many people' is plural so referent should be 'them' not 'it'. Also punctuation and word order improvements: add comma, hyphenate 'eco-friendly', and move 'more' after 'bikes' or use 'use bikes more' for natural word order. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and maintain natural word order for emphasis.

× That's all thank you.

✓ That's all. Thank you.

The original combines two clauses without proper punctuation. Add a period to separate the closing statement and the expression of thanks. This improves readability and conforms to standard sentence structure. Suggestion: Use appropriate punctuation to separate independent clauses and polite closings.