Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Correct tense and possessive forms, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words if you add more than one detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for my 11th birthday, and I enjoyed riding it around the neighborhood every weekend.

Sugerencia: Avoid fillers and repetition; answer directly with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct vocabulary and sentence endings. For example, say whether bikes are popular overall or in your city, and provide concrete observations or comparisons.

Ejemplo: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my city. For example, I rarely see people cycling on the streets, and most residents prefer cars or public transport because the roads are busy and there are few bike lanes.

× That bike was bought by my dad as my 11 years old birthday present and I like it very much.

✓ That bike was bought by my dad as my 11-year-old birthday present, and I liked it very much.

The sentence mixes past and present inappropriately. The bike was bought in the past, so the speaker's enjoyment at that time should also be in the past: use 'liked' (past tense). Also use the correct adjectival form '11-year-old' with hyphens when it modifies 'birthday present.' Finally, add a comma before 'and' to join the two independent clauses.

× That bike was bought by my dad as my 11 years old birthday present and I like it very much.

✓ That bike was bought by my dad as my 11-year-old birthday present, and I liked it very much.

Use 'as' is acceptable but the phrase '11 years old birthday' is incorrect. The correct prepositional/adjectival form is '11-year-old' (hyphenated) before a noun. This fixes the modifier structure.

× Umm, I don't think so 'cause umm, I, I, I seldom see bites at people, uh, using bikes in my city and there are less bikes in the.

✓ Umm, I don't think so because I seldom see people using bikes in my city, and there are fewer bikes than before.

Multiple problems: 'cause' is informal but acceptable; replaced with 'because' for clarity. 'bites at people' is incorrect word order and word choice; correct is 'see people using bikes.' 'There are less bikes' is wrong: use 'fewer bikes' for countable nouns. Also the sentence fragment 'in the.' is incomplete; I replaced with 'than before' to complete the comparison. Ensure tense matches present general statement, so present simple 'seldom see' and 'are' are correct.

× Umm, I don't think so 'cause umm, I, I, I seldom see bites at people, uh, using bikes in my city and there are less bikes in the.

✓ Umm, I don't think so because I seldom see people using bikes in my city, and there are fewer bikes than before.

The original has disfluent pronoun repetition 'I, I, I' which is spoken hesitation; remove repetition for written clarity. 'people' is the correct pronoun/noun to refer to individuals; original word order 'bites at people' is incorrect. Use 'people using bikes'.

× Umm, I don't think so 'cause umm, I, I, I seldom see bites at people, uh, using bikes in my city and there are less bikes in the.

✓ Umm, I don't think so because I seldom see people using bikes in my city, and there are fewer bikes than before.

'There are less bikes' incorrectly uses 'less' with countable noun 'bikes.' Use 'fewer bikes.' Also 'bites' is likely a mispronunciation of 'bikes' or wrong word; ensure 'bikes' is used consistently as plural.