Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar (remove extra articles and redundancy). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific brief reasons using linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., upbeat, cheerful) and avoid repeating the same phrase.

Ejemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me start the day positively. For example, in the morning I play upbeat songs to wake up and feel motivated; in the evening cheerful music helps me unwind after a stressful day.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and word forms). Give one clear main idea and one or two supporting points with linking words (e.g., additionally, for example). Use varied vocabulary for ‘relaxed’ and ‘excited’.

Ejemplo: Yes. Primarily it boosts my energy and improves my mood; for example, upbeat songs get me motivated in the morning, and lively rhythms make social events more enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Good concise response with a reason. Improve grammar (use past tense consistently and correct noun forms) and smoother linking. Replace vague phrases with precise ones.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't taken formal music classes. When I was a child I wanted to take voice lessons because my cousins were taking them, but my family couldn’t afford the fees at that time.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, fix word order and redundancy (e.g., 'focus fixated' is redundant). Use one linking phrase to explain why and give a brief example of tasks. Mention specific benefits of classical music.

Ejemplo: Yes. At work I often use earphones and listen to classical music because it helps me concentrate; for example, I play soft piano pieces when writing reports or analysing data to reduce distractions.

× In the morning when I am preparing to go to work, I usually put on a happy music to help me prepare for the day and to make me feel relaxed.

✓ In the morning when I am preparing to go to work, I usually put on happy music to help me prepare for the day and to make me feel relaxed.

The noun 'music' is uncountable and should not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' before 'happy music'. Suggestion: treat 'music' as uncountable (no article) or use a countable phrase such as 'a happy song' if referring to a single track.

× And when going home after a long stressful day, I also put on happy music in order for me to forget the trivialities that happened.

✓ And when I am going home after a long stressful day, I also put on happy music in order to forget the trivialities that happened.

The phrase 'in order for me to' is wordy and unidiomatic here; 'in order to' followed by a verb is correct. Also 'when going home' is acceptable but adding 'I am' makes the sentence clearer. Suggestion: use 'in order to forget' or simply 'to forget'.

× Happy music makes me more relaxed and prepared for the day.

✓ Happy music makes me feel more relaxed and prepared for the day.

The original is not ungrammatical but adding 'feel' clarifies the effect and matches collocation 'makes me feel relaxed'. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' when describing emotional states caused by something.

× It boosts my mood, uplift my spirits, and help me prepare for the trivialities of the day.

✓ It boosts my mood, uplifts my spirits, and helps me prepare for the trivialities of the day.

The subject 'It' requires singular third-person verbs. 'Uplift' and 'help' must be in third-person singular form ('uplifts', 'helps') to agree with 'It'. Suggestion: ensure all verbs in a coordinated list agree with the subject.

× I did not, but when I was a child I actually wanted to join a voice lesson since my cousins during that time are joining one.

✓ I did not, but when I was a child I actually wanted to join a voice lesson since my cousins at that time were joining one.

The time frame is in the past, so 'are joining' should be past progressive 'were joining' to match tense. Also 'during that time' is better as 'at that time'. Suggestion: keep all time references consistent in past narrative.

× However, due to lack of finances, I was not able to join such class.

✓ However, due to a lack of finances, I was not able to join such a class.

Countable noun 'class' needs the article 'a class'. The phrase 'lack of finances' is usually preceded by 'a' ('a lack of'). Suggestion: use 'a lack of finances' and 'such a class' or rephrase 'such classes' if plural.

× Yes, at work when I need to focus, I put on my earphones and listen to classical music to help me more focus fixated on the task at hand.

✓ Yes, at work when I need to focus, I put on my earphones and listen to classical music to help me focus on the task at hand.

The phrase 'help me more focus fixated' is ungrammatical. Use 'help me focus' or 'help me stay focused'. 'Focus' is the correct verb; 'fixated' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'help me focus' or 'help me stay focused' for clarity.