Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and finish the idea with a specific reason. Use one or two supporting details linked with a simple connector (because, so, for example).

Ejemplo: It depends on my mood. For example, after a breakup I prefer sad songs because their lyrics feel relatable and help me process my emotions.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, reduce repetition and fillers, and structure your response with a reason and a short example. Replace vague phrases with precise descriptions of how the music affects you.

Ejemplo: Yes. Happy music lifts my mood and energises me. For instance, when I dance with friends I play upbeat pop songs that make us feel more lively and enthusiastic.

Sugerencia: Use correct verb tenses and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct statement about past study, then give concise details about what you learned. Avoid filler words and correct subject-verb agreement.

Ejemplo: Yes, I took music classes in high school but I haven't had any professional training since graduating. In high school we studied music history and classical compositions, which helped me understand different styles and composers.

Sugerencia: Be concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to connect the general statement and the example, and correct minor grammatical mistakes (e.g., 'help me keep going' instead of 'help me to continue and not giving up').

Ejemplo: Yes, it depends on the activity. For example, when I jog in the park I listen to uplifting, upbeat music because it motivates me and helps me keep going.

× If I for example, have a break up with my girlfriend, I would uh, prefer to listen to sad music instead of having music because it will be more relatable to my situation and.

✓ For example, if I broke up with my girlfriend, I would prefer to listen to sad music because it would be more relatable to my situation.

Error type: mix of tenses and sentence structure. The original uses 'have a break up' with present tense while the conditional 'I would' requires a past tense in the if-clause (second conditional) for an unreal or hypothetical situation. 'Having music' is unnatural; use 'listen to sad music.' Remove trailing conjunction 'and.' Suggestion: use 'If I broke up' + 'I would prefer' for correct conditional structure and clearer phrasing.

× Yes, uh, I do think, uh, it helps to umm, help my mood to get better when I listen to happy music, when I'm happy, for example, uh, I was dancing with my friend and I always tune uh, the music to uh, some happy music, uh, so I can live up to.

✓ Yes, I think it helps improve my mood when I listen to happy music. For example, when I'm happy I dance with my friend and I always choose upbeat music to cheer me up.

Errors: redundant words ('helps to help'), awkward phrase 'get better', tense inconsistency and unclear ending 'live up to.' Use simple present for habitual or general truths: 'it helps improve my mood.' Replace 'tune the music to some happy music' with 'choose upbeat music' and 'cheer me up' for natural English.

× I do talk music classes during high school, but I didn't talk, uh, professional music classes after I graduated.

✓ I took music classes in high school, but I didn't take any professional music classes after I graduated.

Errors: wrong verb form 'do talk' and 'didn't talk.' Use simple past 'took' for completed actions in the past. Add 'any' for negative with plural 'classes.' Also prefer 'in high school' rather than 'during high school.'

× Umm, during the umm, music school in high school I we learn about, uh, the history of music and the classical music, uh, produced by music.

✓ During music classes in high school, we learned about the history of music and classical music that composers produced.

Errors: extraneous pronouns 'I we', wrong tense 'learn' should be past 'learned' for past events, awkward phrase 'the classical music produced by music.' Clarify by saying 'classical music that composers produced' or simply 'classical music.' Place time expression at sentence start for clarity.

× Is a good question.

✓ That's a good question.

Error: missing subject or auxiliary verb. Starting with 'Is' makes it a question form; to state agreement use 'That's a good question' (that is). This supplies the subject and correct verb form.

× It depends on what kind of things that I'm doing.

✓ It depends on what kind of things I'm doing.

Error: unnecessary relative pronoun 'that' after 'things' in this clause. In informal speech 'what kind of things I'm doing' is correct; removing 'that' yields natural word order.

× For example, if I'm doing exercises like jogging around the park, I will listen to uplifting music which could help me to continue and not giving up and running.

✓ For example, if I'm exercising, like jogging around the park, I will listen to uplifting music which helps me keep going and not give up.

Errors: 'doing exercises' is wordy; use 'exercising.' Wrong verb forms: 'could help me to continue and not giving up and running' mixes infinitive and -ing forms and is ungrammatical. Use 'helps me keep going and not give up.' Match tense/modal: 'will listen' with general result 'helps' is acceptable; simpler is present tense 'helps' for habitual effect.