Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., 'religion happy'), and give one or two specific examples of situations when you choose each type of music. Use linking words like 'when' or 'because' to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I like both happy and sad music, depending on my mood. For example, when I'm celebrating or working out I choose upbeat, happy songs because they energize me, but when I'm feeling reflective or upset I listen to slow, sad ballads to calm down.

Sugerencia: Give a concise, personal answer first, then support it with a specific reason or brief example. Avoid vague or sweeping claims about 'everyone' and reduce fillers. Use clearer vocabulary like 'uplifted' or 'energized' and one linking phrase such as 'because' or 'for example.'

Ejemplo: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and cheerful lyrics lift my mood. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs before going out to feel more energetic.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and correct tense/use of negatives. Say clearly whether you have taken classes, then give concise supporting details about singing competitions and achievements. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler words.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't taken formal music classes since childhood. However, I have competed in several singing competitions and won trophies and medals, which helped me develop my vocal skills.

Sugerencia: Respond directly, replace awkward words ('delicious music') with appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'upbeat' or 'relaxing'), and provide one clear specific example of an activity and why you listen to music then. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks, especially when I'm cooking. I usually play upbeat songs because they make the chores more enjoyable and keep me company.

× Actually I prefer both type of music happy and sad because it depends according to my mood.

✓ Actually I prefer both types of music, happy and sad, because it depends on my mood.

'Both' requires a plural noun, so 'type' should be 'types'. Also 'depends according to my mood' is incorrect collocation; use 'depends on my mood'. Add commas for clarity.

× If I am ecstatic in a moment then I prefer religion happy and if I am devastated then I prefer to listen the sad one.

✓ If I am ecstatic at the moment, then I prefer happy music, and if I am devastated, I prefer to listen to sad music.

Use 'at the moment' for the current time. 'Religion happy' is meaningless here; replace with 'happy music'. 'Prefer to listen the sad one' needs 'listen to' and 'sad music' rather than 'the sad one' for natural phrasing.

× Exactly, happy music make me feel more excited, not even only to me in this world, every people gets more happier when uh they get to listen the happy music.

✓ Exactly, happy music makes me feel more excited. Not only me in this world; everyone becomes happier when they listen to happy music.

Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music' is singular so use 'makes'. 'Every people' is incorrect; use 'everyone'. 'Gets more happier' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'becomes happier' or 'gets happier'. Use 'listen to' for the verb phrase.

× Happy music means something that created a positive vibes vibing in in those vibes of happy music.

✓ Happy music creates positive vibes and makes people feel upbeat.

Original mixes tenses and redundant words. Use present simple 'creates' for a general truth. 'Vibes' is plural so avoid 'a positive vibes'. Remove duplication like 'vibing in in those vibes' and rephrase concisely.

× Well, I have won't take on any music classes since the childhood till now.

✓ Well, I haven't taken any music classes since childhood.

'Have won't' is incorrect; use 'haven't' (have not) plus past participle 'taken'. Use 'since childhood' rather than 'since the childhood till now' for natural English.

× But then uh, I have won many uh, singing competitions without any classes.

✓ But I have won many singing competitions without any classes.

Keep present perfect 'have won' which is correct here for past experiences relevant to now; remove extra filler 'then uh' and extra commas. Structure is otherwise fine.

× I have won many trophies, medals that's why I have got many achievement through the music sectors.

✓ I have won many trophies and medals; that's why I have achieved a lot in the music field.

'Have got many achievement' is ungrammatical: use 'have achieved a lot' or 'have many achievements'. 'Music sectors' is awkward; use 'the music field'. Add conjunctions and punctuation for clarity.

× Exactly. I listen to music while doing, uh, many things, but especially and mostly I prefer delicious music while I'm cooking because during the cooking period, I used to have no one, uh, to have conversations with.

✓ Exactly. I listen to music while doing many things, but especially I prefer relaxing music while I'm cooking because during cooking I usually have no one to talk to.

'Prefer delicious music' is wrong collocation; 'relaxing' or 'uplifting' fits better. 'During the cooking period' is unnatural; use 'during cooking'. 'I used to have no one' implies past habit; use 'I usually have no one' for present habitual situation. 'To have conversations with' is wordy; 'to talk to' is more natural.

× That's why I prefer to listen music more, uh.

✓ That's why I prefer to listen to music more.

Include the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. Remove filler 'uh' and place adverb 'more' appropriately if needed; sentence is now structurally correct.