Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 간결하고 자연스러운 문장 구조를 연습하세요. 주제문을 먼저 말한 뒤 연결어(and, because, for example 등)를 적절히 사용해 구체적 이유와 예를 덧붙이세요. 문법(관사, 동사의 형태)과 어순 오류를 줄이고 중복 표현(‘happy music’ 반복)을 피하세요. 예문 길이는 최대 4–5문장으로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, when I study I usually play upbeat pop or acoustic songs, which keep me motivated without distracting me.

Sugerencia: 짧고 명확한 주제문으로 답한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 상황을 설명하세요. 동사 형태와 어순(예: 'when I listen to')을 정확히 하며 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요. 구체적인 시간(‘in the morning’, ‘during exercise’)과 감정 변화를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, it does. When I listen to happy music in the morning I feel more energetic and ready for the day. I also play upbeat tracks while exercising because they increase my motivation and pace.

Sugerencia: 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하세요(예: 'when I was a teenager'). 간단한 주제문 다음에 구체적 디테일(언제, 얼마나 오래 배웠는지, 어떤 점이 기억에 남는지)을 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a teenager I took lessons to learn the bass and the violin for about two years. I remember enjoying the violin because it felt challenging but rewarding.

Sugerencia: 응답은 직접적이고 문법적으로 정확해야 합니다. 'while you're doing' 같은 표현은 부적절하니 'while I am'으로 수정하세요. 활동을 나열할 때는 연결어를 사용하고 예시는 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 'walking to school', 'studying in the library').

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. I often listen to music while I walk or study. For example, I usually play hip hop when I'm walking down the street and instrumental tracks when I'm studying to avoid distractions.

× I prefer more happy music because I feel happy and cheerful when I listen happy music and for example when I study I usually listen to happy music.

✓ I prefer happier music because I feel happy and cheerful when I listen to happy music, and for example when I study I usually listen to happy music.

The sentence has a preposition omission and word choice issues. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object ('listen to music'). Use the comparative form 'happier' rather than 'more happy' for natural adjective comparison. Also add a comma and conjunction to join clauses smoothly. Suggestion: use 'listen to' and prefer comparative adjective forms (happier).

× Yes, of course, when I usually happy music in the morning, I can start more cheerful day and when I whenever I exercise.

✓ Yes, of course. When I usually listen to happy music in the morning, I can start a more cheerful day, and also when I exercise.

Missing verb and preposition: 'listen to' is required. The phrase 'more cheerful day' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Remove redundant words ('when' and 'whenever') to fix sentence structure. Also separate into clearer clauses. Suggestion: include required verbs and articles and avoid redundant conjunctions.

× Yes, when I was teenager I had the class to learn how to play the bass and violin.

✓ Yes, when I was a teenager I took classes to learn how to play the bass and the violin.

Use of past tense verbs and articles: 'was teenager' requires the article 'a'. Instead of 'had the class', native use is 'took classes' or 'had lessons'. Add 'the' before 'violin' for clarity or omit both 'the' depending on style. Suggestion: use 'was a teenager' and 'took classes/lessons'.

× Yes, definitely. I listen to music while you're doing.

✓ Yes, definitely. I listen to music while I'm doing other things.

Incorrect pronoun and verb agreement: 'you're doing' (you are doing) refers to the examiner, not the speaker. The student should use first person 'I'm' to refer to themselves. Also complete the phrase 'doing other things' for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent first person pronouns when speaking about oneself.

× Every day if for example I when I walking on the street and study, I usually listen to music, for example hip hop.

✓ Every day, for example, when I'm walking on the street or studying, I usually listen to music, for example hip hop.

Redundant and misplaced words and missing auxiliary: remove duplicated conjunctions ('if' and 'when'), add the auxiliary 'am' for present continuous ('I'm walking'), and use 'or' to connect activities. Place 'for example' appropriately and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: simplify clause structure and include required auxiliary verbs.