Teachers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition ("on top of it, on top of the list", "actually" used many times) and reduce fillers ("like"). Add a linking phrase before the detail (e.g., "because" or "which is why").

Ejemplo: I do have a favourite teacher: my cousin, who tutored me in preschool. She was extremely passionate about teaching, which inspired me to enjoy learning and later pursue education as a career.

Sugerencia: Good direct answer and clear point. Improve fluency by removing repetitions ("I I"), tighten sentences and add a brief reason to strengthen the response. Use a linking word to connect your profession to your preference (e.g., "because").

Ejemplo: I’m already an early childhood teacher, and if I had to choose again I’d pick the same career because I enjoy helping young children learn and grow.

Sugerencia: Avoid casual fillers ("Yeah", "actually") and remove redundancy ("remember a lot of the of my teachers"). Begin with a clear topic sentence and give one specific example or reason why they are memorable, using a linking word (e.g., "because", "for example").

Ejemplo: Yes, I remember several teachers from my past because each of them had a unique teaching style that influenced me. For example, one teacher used storytelling to make lessons memorable, which stuck with me.

Sugerencia: This answer is unclear and repetitive. Give a succinct, coherent response: state the current situation, use linking words to clarify contrast (e.g., "but", "however"), and provide one specific detail about how you interact now. Avoid vague phrases ("we do conversations like before") and repetition.

Ejemplo: I’m Facebook friends with some primary school teachers, but we aren’t in close contact. Sometimes I like or comment on their posts, so I still keep up with their news online.

Sugerencia: Clear idea but improve sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example of how she helped (methods, encouragement, activities). Use a linking word like "by" or "through" to show how she influenced you.

Ejemplo: My favourite teacher was my cousin, who tutored me as a child and inspired my career choice. She encouraged me with patient explanations and creative activities, which made teaching feel rewarding and motivated me to become a teacher.

× I admire all of my teachers actually, and I have a number of favorites on my mind.

✓ I admire all of my teachers actually, and I have a number of favorites in my mind.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct collocation is 'in my mind' meaning 'I am thinking of'. Use 'in' for mental states or thoughts. Suggestion: say 'in my mind' or 'that come to mind'.

× But on top of it, on top of the list is actually my cousin who has been my tutor when I was like in preschool because I've seen how passionate she is of her work and she actually made me love teaching.

✓ But at the top of the list is actually my cousin, who was my tutor when I was in preschool, because I saw how passionate she is about her work and she actually made me love teaching.

Multiple preposition issues: use 'at the top of the list' not 'on top of the list'; say 'was my tutor' or 'had been' to match past context; remove filler 'like' and redundant 'has been' with clearer past tense. Use 'passionate about' rather than 'passionate of'. Also add commas for clarity.

× ...because I've seen how passionate she is of her work and she actually made me love teaching.

✓ ...because I've seen how passionate she is about her work, and she actually made me love teaching.

The verb 'is' is correct, but the preposition after 'passionate' should be 'about'. This affects meaning and collocational correctness. Keep third person singular 'is'.

× I am actually a teacher myself right now.

✓ I am actually a teacher right now.

Redundant pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary and awkward here. Use simple present 'I am' for current state. Removing 'myself' improves clarity.

× I I am an early childhood education teacher and I can say that if I am to choose another profession, I would still choose the same path.

✓ I am an early childhood education teacher, and I can say that if I were to choose another profession, I would still choose the same path.

Duplicate 'I' is a typo. Use the subjunctive 'if I were to choose' for hypothetical situations; 'if I am to choose' is incorrect for unreal condition. Add comma before conjunction for clarity.

× I actually remember a lot of the of my teachers from the past because they are all very unique and they all left a mark in me that makes me remember them.

✓ I actually remember many of my teachers from the past because they were all very unique and they all left a mark on me that makes me remember them.

Remove duplicate 'of the of'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of the' for fluency. Use past 'were' to match past reference. Use 'left a mark on me' (correct preposition is 'on').

× I am actually friends with them in Facebook, but if you're asking me if we're still in touch, I wouldn't say that we're still in touch in a way that we do.

✓ I am actually friends with them on Facebook, but if you're asking me if we're still in touch, I wouldn't say that we are in contact the way we used to be.

Use 'on Facebook' not 'in Facebook'. 'In touch' repetition is awkward; replace second part with 'in contact the way we used to be' and use past 'used to be' for comparison.

× We do conversations like before, but yeah, I am still. I can still see them from my Facebook feed though.

✓ We don't have conversations like before, but I can still see them on my Facebook feed.

Original is unclear; likely intended negative. Use 'don't have conversations like before' to convey decreased contact. 'On my Facebook feed' is correct preposition. Remove fragment 'I am still.'

× My favorite teacher whom I mentioned earlier is my cousin teacher who used to tutor me when I was a child, helped me a lot specifically in making me passionate about teaching and getting it as my profession.

✓ My favorite teacher I mentioned earlier is my cousin, who used to tutor me when I was a child and helped me become passionate about teaching and choose it as my profession.

Use 'who' clause correctly and add commas. 'Cousin teacher' is incorrect—say 'my cousin'. Use 'helped me become passionate' rather than 'helped me ... in making me passionate'. Use 'choose it as my profession' for natural phrasing. Ensure past tense 'helped' matches context.