Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변은 자연스럽고 이해하기 쉬우나 몇 가지 개선점이 있습니다. 첫째, 주제문은 명확하지만 문장이 다소 길고 중복되는 표현(‘tidy’, ‘clean and organize’)이 반복되어 다이내믹함이 떨어집니다. 둘째, 연결어 사용을 조금 더 다양하게 하여 문장 간 흐름을 명확히 하면 좋습니다(예: 'however' 대신 'but'이나 'so'를 적절히 배치). 셋째, 구체적인 예시(어떤 물건을 정리하는지, 얼마나 자주 청소하는지)를 추가하면 점수가 올라갑니다. 연습 팁: 답변을 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하고, 하나의 구체적 예시와 한 개의 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like to keep my room and desk tidy. For example, I put books on the shelf and stationery in a drawer right after I use them, so my workspace doesn’t get cluttered. As a result, I can focus better when I study.

Sugerencia: 답변은 개인적인 경험을 잘 언급했으나 몇 가지 문제점이 있습니다. 먼저 반복되는 단어('I think' 두 번, 'if if')와 문법 실수가 있어 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 둘째, 문장 구조가 다소 어수선하니 주제문 후에 구체적 세부사항(포켓머니 금액, 기간 등)을 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 마지막으로 과거 습관을 말할 때는 과거 시제와 표현을 정확히 사용하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I started tidying my room when I was in kindergarten because my mother gave me a small allowance whenever I cleaned. That reward made me enjoy keeping my room neat.

Sugerencia: 답변에 문법 오류와 발화 중 중복(‘I I’)이 있어 흐름이 끊깁니다. 대명사 일치와 시제 사용에 주의하세요('space' 단수이면 'it' 사용). 또한 구체적인 방법(예: 정리하는 물건, 정리 빈도, 사용한 보관 도구)을 하나 추가하면 답변이 더 구체적이고 설득력 있어집니다. 연습 팁: 주제문 → 구체적 방법 → 결과 순으로 2문장 안에 말해 보세요.

Ejemplo: I clean and organize my desk regularly. After I finish studying, I always put my books back on the shelf and store pens in a pen holder, so my workspace stays organized.

Sugerencia: 의도는 분명하지만 문법과 어휘 선택에서 오류가 있습니다('being necessary'는 부자연스럽고 'while I studying'에서 동명사 앞에 조동사 없이 어색함). 또한 연결어와 이유 제시를 더 명확히 하면 좋습니다. 제안하는 구조는 주제문(의견) → 이유(구체적 예) → 결과로 간결하게 말하기입니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is important because a clear desk helps me focus. For instance, when my workspace is organized I finish tasks faster and feel less stressed.

× Well I can remember exactly, but I think I started cleaning my room when I was in kindergarten.

✓ Well I can't remember exactly, but I think I started cleaning my room when I was in kindergarten.

The student used 'can' but meant inability to recall a precise memory, so the past-tense context requires 'could' or the present modal 'can't' to indicate inability now. Best is 'I can't remember exactly' to express current lack of precise recollection. Suggestion: Use 'I can't remember exactly' or 'I couldn't remember exactly' depending on whether you refer to current inability or past inability.

× My mom used to give me some pocket money if if I cleaned my rooms, so I was always happy to do it.

✓ My mom used to give me some pocket money if I cleaned my room, so I was always happy to do it.

The phrase 'my rooms' is incorrect because the student is referring to a single room. Use singular 'room' to match 'my'. Also there is a duplicated 'if'. Suggestion: Use singular nouns for one room and remove duplicate words: 'if I cleaned my room'.

× Well, I try to clean and organize them regularly. It after I use them I I usually put it back in their own place.

✓ Well, I try to clean and organize them regularly. After I use them I usually put them back in their proper places.

Multiple issues: misplaced word order 'It after', duplicated 'I', incorrect pronoun agreement 'it' with plural antecedent 'them', and 'their own place' is awkward; 'their proper places' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep logical word order (start with 'After I use them'), ensure pronouns agree in number ('them' and 'places'), and remove duplicate words.

× Sure, I think being necessary is very important because I can concentrate more when I'm in a tidy space while I studying or working.

✓ Sure, I think being tidy is very important because I can concentrate more when I'm in a tidy space while I'm studying or working.

'Being necessary' is incorrect meaning; likely intended 'being tidy'. Also 'while I studying' misses auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous: use 'while I'm studying'. Suggestion: Use the correct adjective 'tidy' and include auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'while I'm studying'.