Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “as of now”, “messed up with”) and unnecessary repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I make my bed and put things back after using them, so my desk and bookshelf stay organized. For example, every evening I spend ten minutes putting books back on the shelf and sorting papers into folders.

Sugerencia: Clarify the meaning and use correct tense and vocabulary. Begin with a direct topic sentence about past habits, then explain reasons with linking words. Correct phrases like "used to", "didn't keep", and avoid confusing expressions like "strict untidiness" or "tightness."

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t. I used to be quite messy as a child because my parents focused most of their attention on my schoolwork rather than my room. As a result, tidiness was not a priority at home.

Sugerencia: Give a slightly fuller, organized answer with linking words and specific routines. Combine similar items and avoid fillers like "well." Use a topic sentence and then a clear list of practices with time reference.

Ejemplo: I keep my study space tidy by following a simple routine. For instance, I always return books to the shelf after studying, put stationery in a pencil case, and tidy my desk every evening so it’s ready for the next day.

Sugerencia: Avoid overgeneralization and awkward sentence structure. Start with a clear opinion and support it with logical reasons using linking words. Use natural comparisons and simpler expressions (e.g., ‘whether at home or in public’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it creates a good impression and makes daily life more efficient. For example, when your space is organized you can find things quickly, and people are likely to view you as responsible and professional.

× Yes, as of now I always keep things tidy.

✓ Yes, at the moment I always keep things tidy.

The phrase 'as of now' is awkward in this context; 'at the moment' or 'right now' fits present-tense habitual meaning better. Use consistent present tense adverbials for clarity.

× For example, I never messed up with my bed, desks, bookshelves, or even the carpet.

✓ For example, I never mess up my bed, desks, bookshelves, or even the carpet.

The sentence mixes past tense 'messed' with present habitual context. The student earlier says they always keep things tidy (present); therefore use present simple 'mess up'. Also preposition 'with' is unnecessary after 'mess up'.

× To be honest, when I was a kid things were exactly the opposite.

✓ To be honest, when I was a kid things were exactly the opposite.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; no grammatical correction needed. Included here to indicate no change required.

× I never keep my things tidy as a child because my parents want to put strict untidiness.

✓ I didn't keep my things tidy as a child because my parents didn't emphasize tidiness.

The original uses present simple 'keep' for a past situation and contains the incorrect phrase 'put strict untidiness.' Change to past simple 'didn't keep' and rephrase 'didn't emphasize tidiness' for clarity and correct meaning.

× They just want me to have the desired academic performance, so tightness was not a priority.

✓ They just wanted me to achieve the desired academic performance, so tidiness was not a priority.

Mixes present 'want' with past context; use past 'wanted'. 'Tightness' is the wrong word; use 'tidiness'. Also 'have the desired academic performance' is better expressed as 'achieve the desired academic performance.'

× It's actually very simple. I always put my books on the bookshelves.

✓ It's actually very simple. I always put my books on the bookshelf.

Plural 'bookshelves' is acceptable if there are multiple shelves, but 'bookshelf' (singular) is more natural when referring to one unit. No tense change needed. If multiple shelves are intended, the original is acceptable.

× Well, I keep my pins and pencils and pencil cases.

✓ I keep my pins, pencils, and pencil cases organized.

The original is a list lacking parallel structure and a clear verb complement. Adding 'organized' clarifies the purpose and improves sentence flow; commas add proper list punctuation.

× No matter are you home or you're in a public area, people will not be necessarily impressed if your driving expensive car, but people will certainly be impressed if you are extremely tidy and neat.

✓ Whether you are at home or in a public place, people will not necessarily be impressed if you are driving an expensive car, but they will certainly be impressed if you are extremely tidy and neat.

Several issues: 'No matter are you' is incorrect word order—use 'Whether you are'. 'Public area' is better as 'public place'. 'People will not be necessarily impressed if your driving expensive car' has pronoun and verb errors: use 'if you are driving an expensive car.' Replace repeated 'people' with 'they' to avoid redundancy. Remove unnecessary adverb placement ('not necessarily' rather than 'not be necessarily').