Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 간결하고 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다. 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 하나나 두 개의 구체적 이유만 제시하세요. 중복 표현(예: "I don't like cleaning"와 "it is so bothersome")과 불필요한 수식어("for me")를 줄이고, 연결어를 사용하여 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 또한 문장 길이가 길어질 경우 쉼표나 연결어로 나눠 말하면 더 명확해집니다.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like to keep things tidy. I'm generally quite lazy, so I avoid cleaning, and I find household chores boring. As a result, I usually only tidy when something becomes really messy.

Sugerencia: 문법과 문장 연결에 유의하세요. 과거 습관을 말할 때는 'used to'나 'would'를 자연스럽게 사용하고, 동사의 시제를 일관되게 유지하세요. 또한 문장을 하나로 묶을 때 불필요한 중복(예: "When I when I was a child")을 피하고 구체적인 상황을 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't use to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I spent most of my time studying or playing on my phone, so I didn't feel I had time to clean up regularly.

Sugerencia: 응답을 더 자연스럽고 조직적으로 만드세요. 짧은 문장과 연결사를 사용해 이유와 빈도를 명확히 표현하고, 'tissues' 대신 더 적절한 표현(eg. 'wipes' 또는 'a cloth')을 고려하세요. 빈도를 나타낼 때는 'most of the time' 같은 표현의 위치를 자연스럽게 배치하세요.

Ejemplo: Most of the time I don't keep my study space very tidy. However, if it gets really dirty I wipe the surface with a cloth and throw away any trash.

Sugerencia: 의견 제시는 좋지만 이유가 약합니다. 'necessary'에 대한 더 균형 잡힌 대답을 위해 장점과 단점을 비교하거나 조건을 제시하세요. 또한 논리적 연결어('because', 'however', 'but')를 문장 요소와 함께 정확히 사용하세요. 건강 관련 증거를 제시하려면 구체적인 예나 상황을 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: I don't think being extremely tidy is necessary for everyone. For me, a messy environment hasn't caused health problems, but I can see that being tidy helps some people stay organized and reduce stress.

× For me it is hard to keep things clean because I'm very idle and I don't like cleaning at all because it is so bothersome.

✓ For me it is hard to keep things clean because I'm very lazy and I don't like cleaning at all because it is so bothersome.

'Idle' describes not working or inactive in a general sense and is not the natural adjective to describe someone who avoids household chores; 'lazy' is the correct adjective to describe a person unwilling to work or make effort. Use 'lazy' here to convey the intended meaning.

× When I when I was a child, I always studied or play with my phone.

✓ When I was a child, I always studied or played with my phone.

The sentence refers to repeated actions in the past, so both verbs should be in the simple past tense. 'Play' must be changed to 'played' to match 'studied' and maintain tense consistency.

× When I was home.

✓ When I was at home.

The fragment 'When I was home.' lacks a complete clause or clear verb phrase in context and uses an awkward preposition. Correcting the preposition to 'at home' makes it a proper adverbial phrase; however, it should be attached to a main clause (e.g., 'When I was at home, I thought I didn't have time to keep my room clean.') to form a complete sentence.

× I thought I didn't have time to keep my room clean.

✓ I thought I didn't have time to keep my room clean.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in past tense and matches the context. No change needed; included here to note tense consistency with surrounding clauses.

× Actually. Most of the times I don't keep my work or study space tidy, but. I clean my space with my tissues when it gets so dirty.

✓ Actually, most of the time I don't keep my work or study space tidy, but I clean my space with tissues when it gets very dirty.

Use 'most of the time' (not 'most of the times') for frequency expressions. Punctuation should not fragment the sentence; combine clauses with commas or conjunctions. 'My tissues' is unnatural; 'tissues' without a possessive is better. 'So dirty' is informal; 'very dirty' is more natural. Also remove unnecessary periods that break the sentence.

× No, I don't think so, because. I don't make my things tidy most of the time and I don't get any health problems.

✓ No, I don't think so because I don't tidy my things most of the time and I don't have any health problems.

Remove the incorrect period after 'because' to join the clauses. Use 'tidy my things' instead of 'make my things tidy' for natural phrasing. Use 'have any health problems' rather than 'get any health problems' to describe current state; both are understandable but 'have' is more idiomatic here.