Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and concise: state your position clearly, avoid odd or incorrect phrases (e.g., "tiny person"), and add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and correct grammar (tense consistency, subject-verb agreement).

Ejemplo: No, I don't like to keep things tidy. Because I work long hours, I usually feel too tired to clean when I get home, so I often leave clothes and shoes on the floor. However, I try to tidy up briefly on weekends.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases ("recruitment idea"). Use past tense correctly and provide clear reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences and correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "roommates" → "shared a room").

Ejemplo: No, I didn't keep my room tidy as a child because I shared a room with my sisters and our family hired cleaners. As a result, I never learned to clean properly and I still sometimes hire cleaning services.

Sugerencia: Be specific and accurate: avoid contradictory statements ("keeping the wires tangled") and grammatical errors. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also") and give 2–3 concrete actions you do regularly. Keep sentences concise and clear.

Ejemplo: I try to keep my workspace tidy by organizing my notebooks and placing my laptop on a stand. For example, I use cable ties to keep wires neat and I clean the keyboard and desk with a vacuum or cloth once a week.

Sugerencia: Express your opinion clearly and support it with logical reasons and an example. Avoid vague references and fillers (e.g., "this Ika guy"). Use linking phrases ("because", "for example", "therefore") and keep to 2–4 well-formed sentences with correct vocabulary ("minimalist" rather than "minimalistic life").

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe being tidy is necessary because a clean environment helps me concentrate and reduces stress. For example, when my room is organized, I feel calmer and more productive, so I try to declutter regularly.

× I do not consider myself as a tiny person because I tend to work a lot and when I get home I'm already tired so I used to just throw my clothes on the floor and massively put my shoes somewhere.

✓ I do not consider myself a tidy person because I tend to work a lot, and when I get home I'm already tired, so I usually just throw my clothes on the floor and often put my shoes somewhere carelessly.

The original has 'tiny' which is incorrect word choice and misuse of 'myself as a tiny person' is awkward; this is a lexical/pronoun phrasing issue. Also 'used to' was incorrectly used to describe a habitual present action; replace with 'usually' to match present habit. Suggestions: use 'tidy person', remove 'as' after 'consider myself', and use 'usually' or 'often' for current habitual actions.

× No, I did not keep my recruitment idea.

✓ No, I did not keep that in mind.

The phrase 'keep my recruitment idea' is ungrammatical and unclear — likely a wrong lexical choice leading to sentence structure error. Replace with a clear expression that fits context, e.g., 'did not keep that in mind' or 'I did not maintain tidiness.' Suggestion: choose vocabulary that matches intended meaning and keep subject-verb-object structure.

× As a child I was roommates with my sisters and we have household cleaners who would tidy the rooms for for us.

✓ As a child I was a roommate with my sisters, and we had household cleaners who would tidy the rooms for us.

'Was roommates' is incorrect number agreement; use 'was a roommate' (singular). Also tense should be past ('had' instead of 'have') to match 'As a child'. Remove duplicate 'for'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun/number agreement between subject and noun and keep past tense for past situations.

× So I never really learned how to clean and until now I would hire services for my group to be cleaned.

✓ So I never really learned how to clean, and until now I have hired services to clean for my household.

Mixing 'never learned' (past) with 'until now I would hire' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'have hired' to express actions continuing to the present. Also 'services for my group to be cleaned' is awkward; rephrase to 'services to clean for my household.' Suggestion: use consistent tense and clearer object wording.

× I like to keep my workspace tidy by organizing my notebooks and my laptops and keeping the wires tangled.

✓ I like to keep my workspace tidy by organizing my notebooks and my laptop and keeping the wires untangled.

'My laptops' may be incorrect if the student has one laptop; use singular 'laptop' if one. The main grammar error is the wrong adjective 'tangled' when intent is likely 'untangled' to indicate tidiness. Also parallel structure: 'organizing my notebooks and my laptop' keeps items parallel. Suggestion: ensure correct article/number and use antonym that matches intended meaning.

× And I would vacuum my workplace the keyboard every now and then, but that's it.

✓ I would vacuum my workplace and the keyboard every now and then, but that's it.

Original misses conjunction 'and' between objects, causing sentence structure error: 'vacuum my workplace the keyboard' is ungrammatical. Insert 'and' to list objects. Suggestion: use correct coordination when listing multiple objects.

× I think it is necessary to be tidy because having a clean environment will give you a clean mind.

✓ I think it is necessary to be tidy because having a clean environment gives you a clear mind.

'Give you a clean mind' is odd phrasing; 'gives you a clear mind' is more natural. Grammar-wise it's acceptable, but word choice affects clarity. Suggestion: prefer 'clear mind' for intended meaning.

× There is, as this Ika guy, a Japanese umm, saying where if you're minimalistic life is much, it's gonna be much easier.

✓ There is a Japanese saying, as this Ika guy mentioned, that if you live minimally, life will be much easier.

Original has multiple structure and word choice errors: misplaced clause 'as this Ika guy', 'saying where', and informal 'gonna'. Reorder to 'There is a Japanese saying, as this Ika guy mentioned, that if you live minimally, life will be much easier.' Suggestion: use relative clause 'that' for sayings, use 'live minimally' instead of 'you're minimalistic', and use 'will be' instead of 'gonna'.

× So to be honest, yes, when my room is tidy, I am calmer.

✓ So to be honest, yes, when my room is tidy, I feel calmer.

Original 'I am calmer' is grammatically correct but 'I feel calmer' is more natural collocation. This is a present-state description; prefer 'feel' to express internal state. Suggestion: choose verbs that collocate naturally with emotional states.