Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 答えは率直で内容もあるが、口語表現がやや砕けすぎ、文法ミスや冗長な部分がある。短く明瞭なトピック文の後に、理由や具体例を論理的につなげる練習をするとよい。例えば“I'm lazy”の代わりに“I tend to be lazy”のような自然な表現を使い、頻度や結果を一文ずつ整理して述べると高得点につながる。

Ejemplo: I try to keep things tidy, but I tend to be quite lazy. For example, I plan to clean my room every weekend, yet I usually manage to do it only once a month, so my room often becomes cluttered.

Sugerencia: 内容は適切だが、文法ミスや語彙選択の誤り（例: "if I feel one of them"）が意味を不明瞭にしている。過去習慣を示す表現（used to）を使い、理由と結果を明確に分けて話す練習をするとよい。また、語順や冠詞の使い方を確認して自然な英文を目指すべき。

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because it was one of the chores required to get pocket money from my mother. If I failed to do any of the tasks, I wouldn't receive the money, so I took the duties seriously.

Sugerencia: 考えは論理的で具体的だが、表現が繰り返しでやや冗長。冠詞や単数・複数の扱いを整え、接続詞を使って文を簡潔にまとめるとより効果的。語彙の幅を少し広げ、例を加えると説得力が増す。

Ejemplo: I keep my workspace tidy by limiting the number of items on my desk. If many stationery items and devices are out, the desk becomes messy and it's hard to focus, so I only keep essential supplies like a laptop, a notebook and a pen.

Sugerencia: 理由は妥当だが、同じ語（think, messy）を繰り返しているため表現が単調になる。理由を一つに絞ってより具体的な結果や例を付け加え、接続詞で文をつなぐ練習をすると良い。意見→理由→具体例の順に整理して話すと自然。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is important because a cluttered space makes it easy to lose things and causes distraction. For example, when my desk is messy I waste time looking for my notes and can't concentrate on studying.

× I know that I have to keep things tidy, but to be honest, I'm a lazy person basically.

✓ I know that I have to keep things tidy, but to be honest, I'm basically a lazy person.

'Basically' is an adverb that should modify 'a lazy person' by placing it before 'a lazy person' or before 'lazy'. The original order 'a lazy person basically' is awkward. Move 'basically' before the noun phrase for natural word order. Suggestion: Place adverbs close to the words they modify: 'I'm basically a lazy person.'

× Therefore I'm not gonna keep things tidy.

✓ Therefore I'm not going to keep things tidy.

'Gonna' is an informal contraction of 'going to' and is inappropriate in formal writing/speaking. Replace with 'going to' to maintain correct future tense form. Also ensure 'am not going to' expresses the planned future negative. Suggestion: Use 'I'm not going to' instead of 'I'm not gonna'.

× For example, I always try to clean my room every weekend, but as a result I just do it only once a month.

✓ For example, I always try to clean my room every weekend, but in fact I only do it once a month.

'As a result' is used to show consequence and is not appropriate here; 'in fact' or 'actually' fits better to correct the contrast. 'Just do it only' is redundant: use either 'just' or 'only'. Place 'only' before the verb phrase for clarity: 'I only do it once a month.' Suggestion: Use clear contrast words and avoid redundant modifiers.

× Yes, I kept my room nice and tidy when I was a child because cleaning my room was one of my duties to get pocket money from my mom.

✓ Yes, I kept my room nice and tidy when I was a child because cleaning my room was one of my duties to get pocket money from my mom.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable in past tense; no change needed. (No error from the provided problem list.)

× I had several tasks to do to have pocket money every month and if I feel one of them I couldn't get any of the money therefore doing the tasks was a serious.

✓ I had several tasks to do to get pocket money every month, and if I failed to do one of them I couldn't get any money; therefore, doing the tasks was serious.

Multiple errors: 'feel' is incorrect verb—should be 'failed' (past tense of 'fail') to indicate not completing a task. 'To have pocket money' is unnatural; use 'to get pocket money'. 'Any of the money' is awkward—'any money' is idiomatic. The clause 'doing the tasks was a serious' lacks a noun; 'serious' needs a noun like 'matter' or simply 'important'. Here 'serious' used predicatively needs completion; better 'was serious' amended to 'was important' or 'was taken seriously'. Suggestion: Use 'failed to do' for not completing tasks, use 'get pocket money', use 'any money', and complete adjectives with nouns or choose 'important'.

× I keep my workspace tidy by limiting the number of the things on my desk.

✓ I keep my workspace tidy by limiting the number of things on my desk.

'The things' is incorrect here; when speaking generally, omit 'the' and say 'things'. Use 'the number of things' to express quantity. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary definite article: 'the number of things'.

× If there's a lot of stationery and devices on my desk, it'll get messy easily and I need quite a lot of energy to put them in order.

✓ If there are a lot of stationery items and devices on my desk, it'll get messy easily and I need quite a lot of energy to put them in order.

Subject 'a lot of stationery and devices' is plural, so use 'there are' rather than 'there's' (contraction of 'there is'). Also 'stationery' is an uncountable noun; to list with 'devices' better use 'stationery items' or 'pieces of stationery'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural subjects and adjust 'stationery' to countable form when listing with countable nouns.

× So in order to avoid that, I just put a limited number of things.

✓ So in order to avoid that, I just put a limited number of things on it.

Sentence is slightly incomplete—'a limited number of things' needs clarification of location (on my desk). Adding 'on it' or 'on my desk' completes the idea. Tense is acceptable but sentence structure needs object. Suggestion: Specify where you put the limited number: '...a limited number of things on my desk.'

× I think it's necessary to be tidy because if it's messy, I think you will lose things easily and also the messy environment will distract you and you won't be able to concentrate on one thing for a long time.

✓ I think it's necessary to be tidy because if it's messy, you can lose things easily, and a messy environment will distract you so you won't be able to concentrate on one thing for long.

Redundant 'I think' repeated; pronoun shift from 'I' to 'you' is acceptable but better to keep consistent. 'You will lose things easily' is slightly awkward—'you can lose things easily' is more natural. 'For a long time' can be shortened to 'for long'. Remove redundant 'also' and streamline conjunctions. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent and avoid repetitive phrases: '...you can lose things easily, and a messy environment will distract you, so you won't be able to concentrate for long.'