Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and informal phrasing (‘quite mad’), and explain reasons with a linking word. Use one or two specific supporting details and a smoother final comment. Also correct grammar (e.g. ‘it made me’ → ‘it makes me’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my room tidy because clutter makes me feel stressed, so I clean and organize my things every weekend. For example, I sort clothes into drawers and put books on a shelf, which helps me relax and concentrate.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence about the past, use correct tense and smoother linking to present. Avoid fillers (‘umm’) and vague phrases. Provide a specific past reason and explain briefly how your habits changed, using linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because I hadn't learned how to organize my things. However, I learned simple routines like putting toys back in boxes and making my bed, so now I try to tidy my room every day.

× I really, really like to keep my room tidy because if I saw my room quite mad, it made me really upset.

✓ I really, really like to keep my room tidy because when I saw my room messy, it made me really upset.

The original contains awkward structure and wrong word choice: 'if I saw' should be 'when I saw' to indicate habitual past reaction, and 'quite mad' is incorrect for describing a room — use 'messy'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: use time clauses correctly (when/if) and choose appropriate adjectives for context.

× And then depressions.

✓ And then I felt depressed.

Fragment lacking verb and incorrect noun form: 'depressions' is a plural noun but speaker means the emotional state. This should be past tense 'felt depressed' to match previous past context. This is a past tense issue (ID 5). Suggestion: include a subject and verb and use correct adjective 'depressed' to describe feelings.

× Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?

✓ Did you use to keep your room tidy when you were a child?

Question is understandable but 'as a child' is acceptable; better to clarify with 'when you were a child'. This is a past tense/context issue (ID 5). Suggestion: use 'when you were a child' for clearer past-time reference.

× When I was child, umm, I didn't keep my room tidy because I don't know how to organize, but now I know how to do it.

✓ When I was a child, umm, I didn't keep my room tidy because I didn't know how to organize, but now I know how to do it.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and tense inconsistency: main clause is past ('didn't keep') so the reason should also be past ('didn't know') not present. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/article and tense mix (ID 12 and ID 5) — primary error categorized here as incorrect use of pronouns/article and past tense. Suggestion: include the article 'a' and keep past tense consistent.

× So this day I'm trying to keep my room tidy.

✓ So nowadays I'm trying to keep my room tidy.

'This day' is unidiomatic; use 'these days' or 'nowadays' for current habitual action. Also 'I'm trying' is present continuous and acceptable; adjust time expression to match. This is a present tense/time expression issue (ID 6). Suggestion: use 'nowadays' or 'these days' to describe current habits.