Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Correct grammar (past tense) and avoid unclear phrases like “various” and “minorities.” Use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also”) to connect ideas. Keep to 3–4 sentences total.

Ejemplo: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, Lakeland Park and Hazira Park were near my house, and I often went there with my friends to play on the swings. I also enjoyed walking among the flowers and trees because it felt refreshing.

Sugerencia: Be concise and grammatically consistent: use present simple for current habits and past simple for past actions. Avoid repetition and filler words. Provide one clear reason and a linking phrase (e.g., “because” or “so”). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Not much. I rarely go to parks now because I am busy with work and study, and I associate parks with childhood memories that make me feel nostalgic. Therefore I visit them only on special occasions.

Sugerencia: Be balanced and specific: clearly state your opinion and give 1–2 concrete reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid filler words and repetitions. Use precise vocabulary like “improve public health” or “increase green space.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Although the city has several parks, the government should create more green spaces because they improve public health and enhance urban infrastructure. For example, new parks could provide areas for exercise and reduce air pollution.

Sugerencia: Organize the reply: begin with a clear topic sentence naming the park or the city, then give 1–2 vivid, specific details. Use correct tense and avoid trailing off. Replace fillers with clear linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes — I would like to visit the parks in Melbourne when I go there for my studies. For example, I read about a large park filled with trees, soft grass and many types of flowers, which sounded very peaceful and relaxing, so I hope to visit it soon.

× Yes, I love to go to parks.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood (past), so the student should use past tense. Use 'loved' and the gerund 'going' for habitual past actions.

× When I was a child, there are a lot of various.

✓ When I was a child, there were a lot of different parks.

Use past tense 'were' for existence in the past (there be issue). 'Various' needs a noun to modify; 'different parks' makes the meaning clear.

× There are a lot of parks near my house, Lakeland Park and Hazira Park.

✓ There were a lot of parks near my house, such as Lakeland Park and Hazira Park.

Past context requires 'were'. Also adding 'such as' clarifies examples. This fixes article/wording to fit past narrative.

× I used to go with them.

✓ I used to go to them.

Pronoun 'them' is acceptable but 'go with them' suggests accompanying those parks; better is 'go to them' meaning visit those parks.

× My family sometimes and mostly with my friends, we used to go there and play on swings.

✓ Sometimes I went with my family, but mostly I went with my friends; we used to go there and play on the swings.

Sentence was disordered. Reordering clarifies subject and time expressions; keep past tense 'went' or 'used to' for habitual past. Include article 'the' before 'swings'.

× We used to go and you know, look at the flowers and the trees.

✓ We used to go and, you know, look at the flowers and the trees.

Mainly punctuation and minor style; grammar is acceptable. Added commas for clarity and kept verb form 'look' after 'used to'.

× That really used to make me rejuvenate from all the minorities.

✓ That really used to make me feel refreshed from all the minor worries.

'Rejuvenate' is usually transitive or reflexive and 'from all the minorities' is incorrect meaning; likely intended 'minor worries' or 'minorities' is wrong. Replaced with natural expression 'feel refreshed from minor worries'.

× Not that much.

✓ Not much now.

Short answer acceptable but 'Not much now' fits present preference question better. Maintains present tense.

× I don't usually go to parks nowadays because, uh, when I was a child I used to go there with my friends and whenever I passed through those parks today, it makes me feel so nostalgic and all the memories come in front of my eyes.

✓ I don't usually go to parks nowadays because when I was a child I used to go there with my friends, and whenever I pass by those parks now, it makes me feel nostalgic and all the memories come back to me.

Mix of tenses: use present 'pass by' or 'pass' for current habitual action; 'come back to me' is natural. Kept 'used to' for past habit.

× And uh, now we are all grown up and we have our own priorities and all working with all, we are working with our own difficulties.

✓ Now we are all grown up and have our own priorities; we are all dealing with our own difficulties.

Removed redundant words and adjusted verb phrase 'dealing with' to express managing difficulties in present. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocation.

× So I don't usually go to parks. We are busy now.

✓ So I don't usually go to parks; we're busy now.

Combine sentences for concision. Grammar correct; contraction is optional.

× I think there are enough parks, but I would still want our like the government to create, to build, construct new parks in our uh, city as it will enhance the infrastructure and also the greenery.

✓ I think there are enough parks, but I would still like the government to build new parks in our city, as they would enhance infrastructure and increase greenery.

Replace 'would still want our like the government' with 'would still like the government' (natural modal use). Use plural 'they' referring to parks and conditional 'would' for result. Removed filler words.

× It's good for the, the all the people's health too.

✓ It's good for everyone's health too.

Original uses redundant articles. Use 'everyone's health' as natural possessive. Fixed article misuse.

× Yeah, I don't remember the name of the park, but once I was searching as I'm planning to move up, uh, for higher studies to Australia and, and specifically in Melbourne.

✓ I don't remember the name of the park, but once I was searching because I'm planning to move to Australia for higher studies, specifically to Melbourne.

Clarified purpose clause and corrected preposition order: 'move to Australia' and 'for higher studies'. Removed filler and fixed pronoun use.

× So I was searching about the city and it's, uh, a very pretty park there.

✓ So I was searching about the city and found a very pretty park there.

'Searching about the city' is awkward; 'searching about' can be 'searching for information about' but simpler 'found a very pretty park' is clear. Also use past tense.

× Uh, so yeah, it, it was like full of trees and it was so comforting while soft grass and different types of flowers.

✓ It was full of trees, had soft grass, and different types of flowers; it felt very comforting.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly. Use parallel structure 'was full of trees, had soft grass, and had different types of flowers' or condensed as above. 'While soft grass' is incorrect; use 'had soft grass'.

× So yeah, I think that is the.

✓ So yeah, I think that is the one.

Sentence was incomplete. Adding 'one' completes the noun phrase referring to the park.