Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like, umm, it's like), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, after/then) to make the sequence clear.

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child. After school I would relax there for about an hour: I had lunch, played on the swings and finished my homework. Because it was near my home, it became part of my daily routine.

Sugerencia: Good clear idea but slightly wordy. Make the contrast clearer with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific example and a linking word (however, for example) for clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but nowadays I prefer hiking trails. However, if a park is next to a hiking route, I often stop there to rest and enjoy the scenery for 20–30 minutes.

Sugerencia: Be direct: answer the question clearly (yes/no and why). Avoid hesitations and vague phrases. Provide one specific reason why more parks would be desirable or why you are satisfied with current ones.

Ejemplo: Not really — I have visited most parks in my city, so I prefer to explore parks in other cities when I travel. However, adding a few more small green spaces in densely populated neighborhoods would be helpful for residents.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer naming specific parks or countries, and add a reason. Keep it within three sentences and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words (for example, because) to explain why you want to visit them.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to visit parks in Japan and South Korea, for example Tokyo’s Shinjuku Gyoen and Seoul’s Bukhansan National Park, because they combine beautiful gardens with cultural sites. I think exploring those parks would offer a unique experience of nature and tradition.

× I used to do it actually on daily basis.

✓ I used to do it actually on a daily basis.

Missing article before 'daily basis'. Use 'a daily basis' when referring to a habitual frequency. Suggestion: include the article 'a' before 'daily basis'.

× Every time, every day is like after coming back from the school, I use like to have some time to relax and then have lunch and then do my homework.

✓ Every day, after coming back from school, I used to take some time to relax, have lunch, and then do my homework.

Tense and wording inconsistent for past habitual action. The student asked about childhood, so use past habitual 'used to'. Remove filler 'like' and unnecessary article 'the' before 'school'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for habitual past and simplify phrasing.

× And afterward I would spend absolutely some time.

✓ And afterward I would spend some time there.

Awkward adverb placement and word order. 'Absolutely some time' is ungrammatical; place adverb appropriately or remove. Suggestion: use 'spend some time' and specify location 'there'.

× It's like at the park it's like.

✓ It was at the park.

Redundant filler 'it's like' and tense mismatch; describing childhood so use past tense 'was'. Suggestion: remove fillers and state clearly.

× I do really enjoy going to parks and right now I do hikes rather than going to public parks, but for example if there is a public park connected to a hiking area then I would definitely sit there and enjoy some rest and have a good time.

✓ I really enjoy going to parks, and right now I go hiking rather than visiting public parks, but if there is a public park connected to a hiking area I would definitely sit there, rest, and have a good time.

Awkward verb forms 'do hikes' and redundant 'do' used for emphasis; use 'go hiking'. Tense and modality mostly fine; simplify and correct collocations: 'go hiking', 'visit public parks', 'rest' as verb. Suggestion: replace 'do hikes' with 'go hiking' and streamline clauses.

× I think I have seen almost every single park in my own city umm till now.

✓ I think I have seen almost every park in my city so far.

Awkward phrasing 'own city' and 'till now'; 'so far' is more natural with present perfect. 'Every single park' is acceptable but can be simplified. Suggestion: use 'so far' and 'my city'.

× So umm. I'm really trying to expand my options and see uh different parks in different areas, places and even cities while I'm traveling.

✓ So I'm really trying to expand my options and see different parks in various areas and cities while I travel.

Unnecessary filler words and repetitive 'different/places'. Use 'while I travel' rather than 'while I'm traveling' to match habitual future travel plans; both are acceptable, but streamline. Suggestion: remove fillers and reduce redundancy.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to visit in the future?

Verb collocation: use 'visit' rather than 'go to' for parks in this context. 'Go to' is not wrong but 'visit' is more natural. Suggestion: use stronger collocation 'visit'.

× Well, I'll give a general idea about which kind of parks I would really like to visit.

✓ Well, I'll give a general idea of which kinds of parks I would really like to visit.

Preposition and number agreement: use 'idea of' not 'about', and 'kinds' plural when referring to multiple types. Suggestion: use 'idea of' and plural 'kinds'.

× I think I've never been there and it sounds like a thrilling idea to explore the.

✓ I think I've never been there, and it sounds like a thrilling idea to explore them.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'the' and lacks object. If referring to 'parks in Asia' use plural pronoun 'them'. Also 'I've never been there' is fine; add comma and complete the thought. Suggestion: finish the sentence with the correct pronoun or noun.