Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 시제 오류를 고치고 문장을 간결하게 만들어야 합니다. 또한 중복 표현(예: 'near near')과 불필요한 단어(예: 'so it was')를 제거하고, 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 구체적 세부사항(예: 공원의 활동, 기억에 남는 순간)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(예: 'because', 'however')를 올바르게 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because there was a large fountain where I loved playing. However, there were no parks very close to my home, so I only visited occasionally with my family.

Sugerencia: 자주 사용하는 말버릇(umm, uh)과 어순 오류를 줄이세요. 주제문을 먼저 제시한 뒤 이유를 간결히 설명하고 구체적인 묘사(예: 산책 거리, 기분 변화)를 포함하세요. 'spend time on digest' 같은 표현은 자연스럽지 않으니 'help digest my food'로 수정하세요. 연결어('so', 'because')를 적절히 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After meals I often take a short walk there because it helps me digest my food, and walking in the fresh air makes me feel more relaxed.

Sugerencia: 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 어순을 고치고, 불확실 표현('I think')을 더 명확하게 표현하세요. 이유를 구체적으로 설명(예: 도시 개발, 인구 밀도)하고 자신의 감정이나 대안(예: 작은 정원, 옥상 공원)을 덧붙이면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 문장 길이는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, but I understand there is limited space because of dense development. I would appreciate smaller green areas or rooftop gardens as alternatives near my neighborhood.

Sugerencia: 명확한 표현과 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 'very numerous size of parks' 같은 부적절한 표현 대신 'very large'나 'huge'를 사용하세요. 이유(예: 조깅 코스, 경치)와 구체적 계획(언제, 누구와)를 한두 문장으로 추가하면 자연스럽고 설득력 있어집니다.

Ejemplo: I would like to visit Central Park in New York in the future because it is very large and has great running paths. I hope to go there for a morning run and to enjoy the scenery when I visit the city.

× Yes, I like to going to parks as a child because in the park there was a fountain so I love to enjoy the water in the park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because there was a fountain in the park, so I loved to enjoy the water.

The speaker is referring to a past habit, so the verb tense should be past (liked, loved). 'Like to going' is ungrammatical: use 'liked going' or 'liked to go'. Word order of 'there was a fountain in the park' is more natural. Suggestion: use simple past for past routines and change 'like to going' to 'liked going' or 'liked to go'.

× But near near my home there was no park so it was.

✓ But near my home there was no park.

The sentence is redundant and ends with an extra 'so it was' fragment, causing sentence structure error. Remove the repetition and unfinished clause. Suggestion: keep one 'near' and remove 'so it was' or complete the clause (e.g., 'so it was inconvenient').

× Yes, I like still going, liked going to parks because, umm, after having dinner or lunch, I have to uh, spend time on digest for my food.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because after lunch or dinner I need to spend some time digesting my food.

Mixing present and past verbs ('like still going, liked going') is inconsistent. Use present simple 'I still like'. 'Have to spend time on digest' is incorrect: use 'need to spend time digesting' or 'allow time to digest'. Also 'after having dinner or lunch' is more naturally 'after lunch or dinner'. Suggestion: maintain present tense and use gerund 'digesting'.

× So I walk along the park.

✓ So I walk through the park.

'Walk along the park' is awkward; 'walk along the park' could imply walking beside it. More natural preposition is 'through' or 'in': 'walk through the park' or 'walk in the park'. Suggestion: choose 'through' to indicate walking across the park.

× It feels more.

✓ It feels better.

'It feels more' is incomplete and unclear. Likely intended comparative 'better'. Suggestion: use an adjective or adverb to complete the idea, e.g., 'It feels better' or 'It feels more relaxing'.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in city but there's I think there are no space to build parks so I just satisfies with this parks near my home.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city, but I think there is no space to build them, so I am satisfied with the parks near my home.

Errors: missing article 'the city' (Article errors), incorrect modal/phrase 'like to see' better as 'would like to see' but constrained to list types—main issues fixed: 'there's I think there are no space' is ungrammatical and has number agreement; use 'I think there is no space'. 'satisfies with this parks' wrong verb form and plural agreement: 'am satisfied with the parks'. Suggestions: use 'the city', 'there is no space', 'satisfied with the parks'.

× Well, I want to go the Central Park in New York in the future.

✓ Well, I want to go to Central Park in New York in the future.

Do not use definite article 'the' before 'Central Park' when naming the park; use 'go to Central Park'. Missing preposition 'to' before destination. Suggestion: use 'go to Central Park'.

× I heard Central Park is very numerous size of parks, so I want to go there for running.

✓ I heard Central Park is very large, so I want to go there to run.

'Numerous size of parks' is ungrammatical and incorrect adjective choice. Use 'very large' or 'very big'. 'For running' is not wrong but 'to run' is more natural for intention. Suggestion: replace phrase with 'very large' and use infinitive 'to run'.