Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.") then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "and"). Avoid repetition and use past tense for childhood activities.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I could run around and play games with my friends. Also, the playgrounds and open space made me feel happy and free.

Sugerencia: Clarify your idea and use clearer linking words. Give a direct topic sentence, then explain the reason with specific details. Use present tense and avoid filler phrases. For example, say why walking helps (e.g., to clear your mind or to solve problems).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because walking there helps me clear my mind. When I’m stuck on a problem, a quiet walk in the park often helps me think more clearly and come up with solutions.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion and support it with a specific reason and an example. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repetition. Mention how more parks would help residents (e.g., recreation, health, community).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few now. More parks would give people better places to exercise, relax, and meet neighbors, which would improve local health and community life.

Sugerencia: Be decisive and reduce hesitations (avoid "umm" and "uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence and then give a specific example of a park or country and explain why you want to visit it (e.g., design, size, features).

Ejemplo: I haven’t planned a specific park, but I would like to visit famous parks overseas, such as Central Park in New York, to compare them with parks in Korea. I’m curious about the different layouts, facilities, and how people use the space.

× Yes, I like it because I always like run around or run around or meet my meet my friend and enjoy enjoy something is always be happy to me.

✓ Yes, I liked it because I always liked running around, meeting my friends, and enjoying things; it always made me happy.

Multiple present tense verbs and repetition are incorrect for a past habitual action. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense 'liked' and past habitual 'liked' or 'used to'. Use gerund forms 'running' and 'meeting' after 'liked'. Remove duplicate words and correct 'friend' to plural 'friends'. 'Enjoy something is always be happy to me' is ungrammatical; change to 'enjoying things; it always made me happy.' Suggestions: use past tense consistently for childhood descriptions and use gerunds for activities after verbs like 'liked' or 'enjoyed'.

× Yes. I still like it because when I need to something of sort of my idea, I really like to go to park and walk around around and think continuously. It is very hard.

✓ Yes. I still like it because when I need to think something through, I really like to go to the park, walk around, and think. It helps me, even though it can be difficult.

The original mixes present simple with incorrect verb and phrase usage. Use 'think something through' for clarifying ideas. Use article 'the' before 'park'. Remove repeated words. 'Think continuously' is awkward; 'think' or 'reflect' is more natural. 'It is very hard' is unclear; clarify to 'it can be difficult' or explain why. Suggestions: use correct verb phrases, include proper articles, and avoid repetition.

× Yes, I hope so because currently I live in there, there is not many parks in there so when I I want to go parks I need to works such.

✓ Yes, I hope so because currently I live there and there are not many parks, so when I want to go to parks I need to travel far.

Incorrect and redundant use of 'in there' and 'there is not many' (subject-verb agreement and article issues). Use 'I live there' (no preposition). 'There are not many parks' uses plural agreement. 'Go parks' needs 'go to parks'. 'I need to works such' is ungrammatical; likely meaning 'I need to travel far' or 'I need to work for that' — chosen 'travel far' as a plausible correction. Suggestions: use 'there' correctly, ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are', include 'to' with 'go', and use a clear verb phrase.

× MMM I've never thought about this before but umm, when I choose one to go, I wish to go uh, overseas parks and compare with UMM in Korea.

✓ I've never thought about this before, but if I choose one to visit, I would like to go to parks overseas and compare them with parks in Korea.

Mixed tenses and modal usage: 'when I choose one to go' should be conditional 'if I choose one to visit'. 'I wish to go' is acceptable but 'I would like to go' fits conditional tone. Add 'to' after 'go' and pluralize 'parks' and specify 'parks in Korea'. Also remove filler interjections. Suggestions: use conditional 'if' for hypothetical future choices, use 'would like' for polite desire, include prepositions like 'to visit', and compare similar nouns ('parks' with 'parks').