Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar (past tense), remove filler words, and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like "and" or "sometimes" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends to play cricket and sometimes rode our bikes on the weekend, and my parents also took us for picnics.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and filler phrases, correct grammar ("like to go to parks" and "busy schedule"), and combine ideas into one or two sentences with linking words like "however" or "so". Be concise and natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but due to a busy work schedule I cannot visit regularly; however, I try to go on weekends to relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Good content and clear reasons. Improve natural phrasing ("there are currently few green spaces") and tighten sentences. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" appropriately and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would, because there are currently few green spaces in the city, so people have limited places to relax or exercise. For example, new parks could offer playgrounds for children and safe walking paths for elderly residents.

Sugerencia: Fix vocabulary and grammar ("park" not "part", "broken trails" sounds negative—use "winding" or "meandering" if positive), avoid run-on sentences, and be specific about timing. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to explain reasons concisely.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a large park in Delhi next year. It features winding trails, playgrounds and a beautiful botanical garden with many flowers, and I want to go because I enjoy nature and taking photos.

× Yes, when I was a child, I like to go parks with my friends to play cricket and for cycling on weekends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked to go to parks with my friends to play cricket and cycle on weekends.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'when I was a child' with present tense 'like' and awkward verb forms 'go parks' and 'for cycling'. Use past tense 'liked' for consistency. Also use the correct preposition 'to' with 'go' and parallel verb form 'cycle' rather than 'for cycling'. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent and use correct prepositions and parallel verbs.

× My parents also, uh, took me into the parks for picnic.

✓ My parents also took me to the park for picnics.

The preposition 'into' is unnecessary; use 'to the park'. 'Park' should be singular in this context or 'parks' if plural; 'for picnic' is incorrect—use 'for picnics' or 'for a picnic'. Remove filler 'uh' in written form. Suggestion: Use 'took me to the park for a picnic' or 'took me to parks for picnics' depending on meaning.

× To be honest, to be honest, I like to go parks even now but due to busy schedule, I have no time to visit parks regularly.

✓ To be honest, I still like to go to parks, but due to a busy schedule, I do not have time to visit them regularly.

Reduce repetition 'to be honest, to be honest'. Use present tense 'still like' for current preference. Use correct preposition 'to' with 'go' and include the article 'a' in 'a busy schedule'. Use 'do not have' for negative present and refer back to 'parks' with 'them'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and ensure correct prepositions and articles.

× But on weekends, uh I go to parks to relax my mind.

✓ But on weekends, I go to the park to relax my mind.

Use 'the park' when speaking generally about the activity you do on weekends or 'go to parks' if you visit multiple parks. 'Relax my mind' is acceptable but more natural is 'relax' or 'clear my mind'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Choose singular/plural consistently and avoid filler words.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are currently very few green spaces, so people have limited space to relax or exercise.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are currently very few green spaces, so people have limited places to relax or exercise.

The clause 'they are currently very few green spaces' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' for existence (There be issue) and 'few' should modify 'green spaces' with correct word order. Also 'space' is better as 'places' or 'space' uncountable—'limited places' fits better. Suggestion: Use 'there are' to state existence and correct noun choice for clarity.

× For example, new parks could provide playgrounds for children and safe walking paths for elder residents.

✓ For example, new parks could provide playgrounds for children and safe walking paths for elderly residents.

Use the adjective 'elderly' rather than 'elder' when describing residents. 'Elder' is typically used as a comparative (older) or as a noun in some contexts. Suggestion: Use 'elderly residents' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, there is a large part in Delhi I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, there is a large park in Delhi I would like to visit.

'Part' is a wrong word choice; context requires 'park'. This is a lexical error rather than grammar, but it causes sentence to be incorrect. Also keep 'there is' which is fine for existence. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'park'.

× It has broken trails, playgrounds and a beautiful Botanical Garden with many different flowers and I would like to see if sometime next year because I enjoy nature and taking photos.

✓ It has broken trails, playgrounds, and a beautiful botanical garden with many different flowers, and I would like to visit it sometime next year because I enjoy nature and taking photos.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrase 'see if sometime next year'. Add 'visit it' to clarify the action. Use lowercase 'botanical garden' unless it's a proper name. Insert commas for clarity and reorder for natural flow. Suggestion: Break into clearer clauses and specify the verb for the intended action ('visit').