Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural: start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., "fond of going" → "fond of going to parks"), and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and remove unnecessary words.

Ejemplo: Yes. I was fond of going to parks as a child. For example, I often visited Vasundhara Park near my house with my pet because she loved the lakeside walk and the playground was beautiful.

Sugerencia: Reduce filler words and correct articles/plural forms ("going parks" → "going to parks"). Use a clear topic sentence and then one specific detail, linked smoothly, e.g., use 'because' or 'so'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. My pet Tommy loves the greenery and fresh air, so we walk in the park every evening, usually with my mother.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more precise and use plural/form corrections ("have parks" not "have park"). Remove fillers, use linking words (because, therefore), and give a specific reason or one example of benefit for different groups.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Cities need more parks because dense housing limits access to outdoor space; therefore, parks give children places to play and older people a peaceful area to walk and relax.

Sugerencia: Clarify intention and correct contradictions (student says 'not thought about it' then describes childhood park). Use clear tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'immersing' is incorrect). State a direct plan or preference and give one specific reason. Avoid saying 'I don't want' if you mean you would like to go.

Ejemplo: I haven't planned any specific visits, but I would like to return to Sundara Park, which I loved as a child for its waterfalls and slides. I would like to go there with a friend someday to enjoy the scenery again.

× Yes, I was very fond of going back since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have been very fond of going back since I was a child.

The original uses past simple 'was' with 'since', which requires a present perfect or present perfect continuous to show a state continuing from the past to now. Use 'have been' to indicate a continuing fondness from childhood to the present.

× There is a park called Vasundhara Park near my house and I always go there with my pet because she loves there and it's such a beautiful park near the lake.

✓ There is a park called Vasundhara Park near my house and I always go there with my pet because she loves it there, and it's such a beautiful park by the lake.

Use 'it' as the pronoun referring to the place ('she loves it there'). Use 'by the lake' rather than 'near the lake' or keep 'near' but avoid repetition; 'by the lake' is more natural here.

× Yes, I'm still fond of going parks.

✓ Yes, I'm still fond of going to parks.

After 'fond of' use the gerund phrase 'going to parks' with the preposition 'to'. The original omitted 'to', making the verb phrase ungrammatical.

× As I mentioned earlier, I have a pet named Tommy and she loves going to park because of the greenery and, and the fresh, uh, environment we get there.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I have a pet named Tommy and she loves going to the park because of the greenery and the fresh environment there.

Use the definite article 'the park' when referring to a specific park previously mentioned. Remove duplicate filler words and place 'there' after 'environment' for natural phrasing.

× So I tend to, uh, visit park every evening with my mother or with my pet.

✓ So I tend to visit the park every evening with my mother or with my pet.

Use the definite article 'the park' when speaking about a specific park; omit filler pauses for clarity.

× Yes. I think it's very important to have park in our city because umm, city is occupied by houses and we do not have uh, a place where we can go for refreshments.

✓ Yes. I think it's very important to have parks in our city because the city is occupied by houses and we do not have a place where we can go for recreation.

Use plural 'parks' or 'a park'. Use the definite article 'the city' when referring to the specific city. 'Refreshments' implies food and drink; 'recreation' or 'relaxation' fits better for places to relax.

× So park is very essential, uh, so that elderly and young people can spend their time, uh, and be close to nature.

✓ So parks are very essential so that elderly and young people can spend their time and be close to nature.

Use plural 'parks' to match previous sentence, and plural verb 'are'. Omit filler words and use natural phrasing 'elderly and young people' is acceptable; add 'the' if speaking of specific groups.

× We have not really thought about it, but when I was a child, my mother, uh, took me to a park called Sundara, which is located in immersing and, uh, I was very fond of that park because of the waterfalls and slides.

✓ We have not really thought about it, but when I was a child my mother took me to a park called Sundara, which is located in [place name], and I was very fond of that park because of the waterfalls and slides.

The original contains 'immersing' which is incorrect; likely a place name or mispronunciation. Remove fillers and ensure a correct place name is supplied. Keep past tense 'was' and 'took' for a past event. Maintain 'because of the waterfalls and slides'.

× So I don't want to visit there with my friend someday.

✓ So I would like to visit there with my friend someday.

The original 'I don't want to visit there' contradicts intended meaning; use 'I would like to' or 'I want to' to express future desire. Use 'visit there' is acceptable though 'visit it' or 'go there' is more natural; choose 'visit there' to retain structure.