Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and vary sentence structure. Give one or two specific details (what you did there or why you liked it) and avoid unnecessary filler words. Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. It was my favorite weekend activity because I could play games and climb trees with my brother. We often had picnics and fed the ducks, which made those visits really special.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Replace hesitations like 'Uh' and avoid awkward phrasing. Be specific about alternatives and frequency.

Ejemplo: Not really; I prefer walking along the city coast because I enjoy the sea views and fresh air. However, I sometimes take my nephew to parks because he enjoys the playground and it gives him a chance to run around.

Sugerencia: Use a concise topic sentence and avoid repeating 'but'. Explain briefly why parks are valuable with a clear linking phrase. Mention a specific benefit or location to strengthen your point.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. My city has many expensive shopping malls and cafes, so more parks would provide free, accessible green space for families. Parks would also improve air quality and offer places for community events.

Sugerencia: Give a clearer direct answer and organize supporting ideas with linking words. Avoid vague phrasing like 'not actually' and redundant sentences. Name a specific park or describe features you would like to visit.

Ejemplo: I haven't planned any specific visits yet, but I would love to see natural parks with dense woodland and wildlife. For example, I hope to visit Richmond Park in London because of its large green areas and chance to see deer.

× I usually was going to parks with my brother.

✓ I usually went to parks with my brother.

The original uses past continuous 'was going' with 'usually', which indicates a habitual past action and requires the simple past 'went'. Use simple past for repeated past actions; practice: 'usually' + past simple.

× Not actually. Uh, I like walking at the coastal of the city, so for walking I don't prefer to go to parks, but sometimes I'm going to parks for my nephew because he likes going to the parks.

✓ Not really. I like walking along the coast of the city, so I don't usually prefer to go to parks, but sometimes I go to parks for my nephew because he likes going to parks.

Multiple issues: 'Not actually' is unnatural—use 'Not really' (idiomatic). 'Walking at the coastal of the city' misuses preposition and noun form: use 'walking along the coast of the city'. 'For walking I don't prefer to go to parks' is awkward; 'I don't usually prefer to go to parks' fits present habitual meaning. 'I'm going to parks' wrongly uses present continuous for habitual action; use simple present 'I go'. Also drop the article before 'parks' in 'going to parks'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because in my city there are a lot of shopping malls and cafes, restaurants, but all of them are very expensive, but parks are free. So yes, I would like to see.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many shopping malls, cafes, and restaurants, but they are very expensive, while parks are free. So yes, I would like to see more parks.

Use 'many' for countable nouns (shopping malls, cafes, restaurants) instead of 'a lot of' which is acceptable but here 'many' reads better. Combine items with commas and 'and'. Avoid repeating 'in my city' and duplicate 'but'. End with a complete phrase 'I would like to see more parks.'

× Not actually, I haven't thought about it before, but if I find a park with more wood and different animals, yes.

✓ Not really, I haven't thought about it before, but if I find a park with more trees and different animals, I would go.

'Not actually' -> 'Not really' for idiomatic response. 'More wood' is incorrect; use 'more trees' or 'wooded areas'. The conditional needs a main clause: after 'if I find...' use 'I would go' or 'I'd visit' to complete the meaning. Maintain tense consistency.

× I would like to see most of the natural parks in London. So I would like to prefer to parks in London.

✓ I would like to visit most of the natural parks in London. So I would prefer parks in London.

'See' is acceptable but 'visit' is more natural for parks. The second sentence misuses 'prefer to parks'—'prefer' takes an object without 'to' or uses 'prefer to visit parks in London'. Also 'would like to prefer' is redundant; use 'I would prefer parks in London' or 'I would prefer to visit parks in London'. Correct verb and structure for clarity.