Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., 'childhood' repeated), correct awkward phrases ('merely remember' is wrong), and add one or two specific details connected with linking words. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the little stream with my friends, because it felt adventurous and free. Those afternoons with my mother are my fondest memories.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition, and add a reason or contrast using linking words (e.g., 'although', 'because') to make your answer more coherent and informative. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'as I had, as I was doing.' Keep within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because walking there helps me relax after work. Although I don't play as much as I did as a child, I appreciate the quiet paths and the chance to remember happy times.

Sugerencia: Respond directly and organize reasons with linking words. Avoid listing words awkwardly ('wedding' is out of place) and choose context-appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'picnics' or 'family gatherings'). Provide 2–3 specific benefits and one brief example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they offer space for exercise and family picnics. For example, a new neighborhood park could provide a jogging route and a playground where parents can relax while children play.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement answering the question, avoid mixing past memories with future plans in a single long sentence, and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace informal words like 'wanna' with 'want to' and be specific about when or why you plan to visit.

Ejemplo: Yes — I would like to visit Rose Garden in my hometown again. It has a long trail that is perfect for walking and exercising, and I want to go next summer so I can sit on my favorite bench with my mother and enjoy the view.

× I still merely remember those memories that I had from my childhood.

✓ I merely still remember the memories I had from my childhood.

The adverb 'merely' is misplaced; it should modify 'remember' and is more natural before 'still'. Also 'those memories that I had' is redundant; simplify to 'the memories I had'. Place adverbs close to the verb they modify to improve clarity.

× Going to the park, spending that time on different swings and having a walk with my mom.

✓ I used to go to the park, spend time on different swings, and take walks with my mom.

This fragment lacks a main verb and subject in the context of the sentence. Convert to a full coordinated clause with subject 'I' and parallel verb forms 'go', 'spend', 'take' to complete the sentence.

× Definitely, I love going to the park, even as a grown up and having a walk as I had, as I was doing when I was a child.

✓ Definitely, I love going to the park even as a grown-up and taking walks like I did when I was a child.

Mixing present continuous 'having a walk' with past 'I had, as I was doing' is awkward. Use consistent tense and parallel structure: present 'love' with gerund 'going' and 'taking walks', and simple past 'did' for the childhood comparison. Also use hyphen in 'grown-up'.

× I would love to see more parks in the city as parks are really good for exercising, walking, wedding and having a great time with the family.

✓ I would love to see more parks in the city because parks are really good for exercising, walking, weddings, and spending quality time with family.

Use 'because' to explain reason rather than 'as' which can be ambiguous. Use plural 'weddings' for the general activity and 'spending quality time with family' is the correct prepositional phrase; remove the definite article before 'family' for general meaning.

× Moreover, a person can relax their mind from a busy day and I think it's really useful.

✓ Moreover, a person can relax their mind after a busy day, and I think it is really useful.

Use 'after' rather than 'from' to indicate relief following a busy day. Also match pronoun form: 'it is' rather than contraction optional; 'their' is acceptable singular but 'one can relax one's mind' is more formal. Suggest using 'after' and consistent pronoun style.

× I vividly remember there was a park in my hometown named Rose Garden, and it was such a wonderful park with a long trail and it was so good for walking and exercising and I love to go there with my mom and I still wanna go again and I want to sit there again.

✓ I vividly remember a park in my hometown called Rose Garden; it was a wonderful park with a long trail, excellent for walking and exercising. I loved going there with my mom, and I still want to go and sit there again.

Mixing past and present informal forms causes tense inconsistency: use past tense 'loved' to match 'remember' and 'was'. Replace colloquial 'wanna' with 'want to'. Break the long run-on sentence into clearer sentences and use 'called' instead of 'named' for natural phrasing. Use parallel verb forms and appropriate past tense for past habits.