Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense (e.g., 'I loved'), and avoid repeating ideas. Keep supporting details concise and specific (mention age range, favourite game or memory). Use one linking word if adding detail.

Ejemplo: I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, between ages 7 and 12 I went with my friends every afternoon after school, and we usually played hide-and-seek or climbed trees, which made those hours feel exciting and freeing.

Sugerencia: Good content and personal detail, but watch for tense consistency and informal phrases ('chill'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Limit to three to four sentences and replace casual words with more natural vocabulary.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I live near a large park and I walk there for about 20 minutes every day because the fresh air and trees help me unwind. Also, since my neighbourhood lacks greenery, the park is my main place for light exercise and relaxation.

Sugerencia: Clear opinion and reasons, but fix grammar (article use, plural forms) and reduce repetition ('have have'). Use linking phrases ('because', 'for example', 'therefore') and provide one concrete example of benefit. Keep it concise and avoid long hypothetical clauses.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Green areas are essential in urban planning because many residents live in high-rise flats with small or no balconies. For example, parks offer space for jogging and children's play, so they improve public health and community well-being.

Sugerencia: Good personal motivation, but avoid fillers ('You know', 'I mean') and be careful with tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence, give specific reasons and perhaps mention an activity you'd do there. Keep it within four sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

Ejemplo: I'd like to visit Central Park in New York in the future. Since I'm a big fan of the show Friends and have seen the park in many films, I want to see the famous spots in person and take a long walk around the reservoir.

× 'Yeah, I'd loved it when I was a kid.'

✓ 'Yeah, I loved it when I was a kid.'

'I'd loved' uses had + past participle, which implies past perfect and needs a reference point; speaker intends simple past 'I loved'. Use 'I loved' to state a past habit or preference.'

× 'I always had a lot of homework to do after I finished my assignments.'

✓ 'I always had a lot of homework to do after I finished my classes.'

'Homework to do after I finished my assignments' is odd because 'homework' and 'assignments' overlap; also tense is past which is fine but wording is unnatural. If meaning was school days, use 'classes' or change to 'I always had a lot of homework after class.' Keep past tense for childhood recollection.'

× 'It was the best time of the day, you know?'

✓ 'It was the best time of the day, you know.'

'It was the best time of the day, you know?' ends with a question mark making it interrogative; original was a statement. Change punctuation to a full stop to match intended meaning. (This is punctuation rather than grammatical but affects sentence type.)'

× 'Actually, I live not far from a big park and I try to go there for at least 20 minutes every single day because walking around just makes me feel chill and relaxing.'

✓ 'Actually, I live not far from a big park and I try to go there for at least 20 minutes every single day because walking around just makes me feel chilled and relaxed.'

'makes me feel chill and relaxing' incorrectly uses 'chill' (adjective/colloquial) and 'relaxing' (present participle acting on walking). Use 'chilled and relaxed' (adjectives describing how the speaker feels) for correct adjective forms after 'feel'.'

× 'Besides, there wasn't much greenery around the area where I live, so I often go there to take a walk.'

✓ 'Besides, there wasn't much greenery around the area where I lived, so I often went there to take a walk.'

'There wasn't much greenery around the area where I live' mixes past 'wasn't' with present 'I live'. If referring to past period, keep past tense consistently: 'where I lived' and 'went'. If speaker means present, change to 'there isn't much greenery around the area where I live, so I often go there.' Maintain consistent tense.'

× 'most people live in high rise apartments with either a small balconies or no balconies at all.'

✓ 'most people live in high-rise apartments with either a small balcony or no balcony at all.'

'a small balconies' incorrectly combines singular article 'a' with plural 'balconies'. Make noun and article agree: 'a small balcony' or use plural 'small balconies' without 'a'. Also add hyphen in 'high-rise'.'

× 'So people really need those extra outdoor spaces near their homes, otherwise people have have nowhere to do some outdoor activities or get some exercise.'

✓ 'So people really need those extra outdoor spaces near their homes; otherwise they have nowhere to do outdoor activities or get exercise.'

'people have have' contains a duplicated verb; remove the extra 'have'. Also 'people' repeated is stylistically weak—use 'they' for cohesion. 'Do some outdoor activities' can be simplified to 'do outdoor activities' and 'get some exercise' to 'get exercise' for concise, natural phrasing.'

× 'To be honest, I would like to go to Central Park in New York.'

✓ 'To be honest, I'd like to visit Central Park in New York.'

'would like to go to' is not wrong but 'I'd like to visit' is more natural and concise. This is a stylistic adjustment to improve sentence structure and fluency while retaining meaning.'

× 'You know, I'm a huge fan of the TV show Friends and I have rewatched it twice.'

✓ 'You know, I'm a huge fan of the TV show Friends and I have watched it twice.'

'Rewatched' implies watching again relative to an earlier mention; 'have rewatched it twice' is acceptable but 'have watched it twice' is clearer unless emphasizing repeated viewings. If emphasizing repeated viewing, keep 'have rewatched it twice' but ensure context supports 're'.'

× 'It's just like a must visit destination.'

✓ 'It's just like a must-visit destination.'

'must visit' as two words is incorrect in this adjective use; use hyphenated compound 'must-visit' when modifying 'destination'. Also no article change needed. Hyphenation clarifies that the phrase functions as a compound adjective.'