Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar (verb tenses and articles), reduce hesitations, and organise into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words (for example, and, so) and specific examples (what games, who with). Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I visited the neighborhood park almost every day to play football with my friends and learn from an older mentor who taught us basic skills. Because the park was safe and close to home, it became our regular meeting place and a big part of my childhood.

Sugerencia: Correct repetition and article mistakes, avoid redundancy ("refreshes my mind" repeated), and finish the sentence. Use one topic sentence then 2 concise supporting reasons with linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., relax, clear my head, exercise).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks regularly. I go most days to exercise and meditate because the peaceful, clean environment helps me relax and clear my head. As a result, I often feel more energetic and less stressed after my visits.

Sugerencia: Be direct: answer the question clearly (yes/no + reason). Avoid vague phrases and hesitations, and give specific examples of parks or activities. Improve grammar (plural/singular, prepositions) and use linking words (for example, because).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because public green spaces improve residents' wellbeing. For example, my friends often recommend parks such as Angel Palm and Tarjan Funjoy, which offer playgrounds, walking trails and outdoor exercise equipment.

Sugerencia: Provide a full, grammatically correct sentence with a topic sentence and a brief reason or detail. Name the park and explain why you want to visit. Avoid sentence fragments and add linking words if giving reasons.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the national park in the future because I enjoy hiking and wildlife watching. I want to explore its trails and see native animals, and I hope to take photos of the scenery while learning more about local conservation efforts.

× Definitely when I was a child, I go daily to, uh, I was visited to the park on a daily basis.

✓ Definitely, when I was a child, I went to the park on a daily basis.

The speaker refers to a past habitual action so the verb should be in the simple past ('went'), not present tense ('go') or incorrect passive ('was visited to'). Use active voice: 'I went to the park on a daily basis.' This matches the past time reference 'when I was a child.'

× I have, uh, just play here and uh, meet my friends and we had to just play the footballs and with mentor etcetera in the park.

✓ I would just play there, meet my friends, and we would play football with a mentor in the park.

The original mixes tenses and forms ('have...play', 'meet', 'had to just play', 'footballs'). For past habitual actions, use 'would' or simple past: 'would play' or 'played.' Also 'there' is more natural than 'here' when describing past visits, and 'football' is uncountable in this context (use 'football' not 'footballs'). Remove unnecessary auxiliaries.

× Of course, on a daily basis I go to the park and I just refresh my mind and I do some exercise and some meditation in the park because the the environment of the park is very clean and calm, which refreshes my mind and boosts my confidence and boost my mood. So that's why I.

✓ Of course, I go to the park regularly to refresh my mind; I do some exercise and meditation there because the park's environment is very clean and calm, which refreshes my mind and boosts my confidence and mood.

The sentence had repetition ('the the'), awkward adverb placement ('on a daily basis' is okay but 'regularly' is smoother), and mixed verb forms ('boosts' and 'boost'). Ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel structure: use 'boosts my confidence and mood.' Also end with a complete clause instead of 'So that's why I.'

× Definitely, uh, when I get the chance, I would like to visit the parks in my city.

✓ Definitely. When I get the chance, I would like to visit more parks in my city.

The original is mostly correct but adding 'more' clarifies the meaning in context ('Would you like to see more parks?'). Also separate filler words for clarity. No article change needed, but adding 'more' matches the question.

× Well, I just, uh, know why from the my friends.

✓ Well, I just know this from my friends.

Remove the extra definite article 'the' before 'my friends' (incorrect use of articles). Also 'know why from' is unclear; use 'know this from my friends' to convey that information came from friends.

× There are lots of park in my city like Angel Palm of Tarjan Funjoy Parks are there uh, in which there are lots of activities.

✓ There are lots of parks in my city, such as Angel Palm, Tarjan, and Funjoy Park; they offer many activities.

Use plural 'parks' not singular 'park' after 'lots of.' Also improve list and article usage: capitalize or punctuate park names and use plural verbs to match plural subject. Rephrase for natural English.

× When I want to visit to the National Park.

✓ I would like to visit the National Park in the future.

The fragment 'When I want to visit to the National Park.' is ungrammatical and incomplete. Use a full future-intent construction that fits the question: 'I would like to visit the National Park in the future.' Remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'visit.'