Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases such as “I love” too many times and correct verb forms (e.g., “I loved” for past).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often visited with my family and cousins, where we played games and explored nature, which helped me learn new things and feel close to my relatives.

Sugerencia: Improve coherence and grammar: use correct tense and smoother linking words. Give one clear main idea about current habits, then add a specific example with logical connectors and correct verb forms. Avoid vague phrases like “we expanded the new things.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, but not very often. For example, last week my cousin and I visited a local park and we remembered many childhood moments while walking around, which made the visit enjoyable and nostalgic.

Sugerencia: Clarify and organize ideas: give a clear reason and support it with a specific detail. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “expensive to maintain” or “not accessible to everyone”) and avoid incorrect phrases such as “for the only reach.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer green space for relaxation and exercise. However, many parks are expensive to enter or poorly maintained, so I hope future parks will be affordable and accessible to everyone.

Sugerencia: Be specific about places and why you want to visit them. Use correct modal verbs and phrasing (e.g., “I would love to visit”). Explain one or two concrete reasons or features of those parks rather than vague expressions like “new things.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit parks in places like Dubai or the United States because they offer unique attractions, such as modern urban parks and large national parks, where I could try new activities like desert walks or hiking and learn about different landscapes.

× Yes, I love to go into parks as a child because I loved to spend a time with my family and hang out with my cousins.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I enjoyed spending time with my family and hanging out with my cousins.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I love' with past 'as a child' and 'loved'. Use past tense 'loved' to match childhood. Also use correct gerund forms 'going', 'spending', 'hanging out' and omit the unnecessary article 'a' before 'time'. Use 'enjoyed' rather than 'loved to spend a time'.

× I love to do some challenges I love to expand my knowledge to by knowing new things.

✓ I loved doing challenging activities because I wanted to expand my knowledge by learning new things.

For past habits use past tense 'loved'. Use gerund 'doing' after 'loved'. 'Challenges' is better as 'challenging activities'. The phrase 'expand my knowledge to by knowing new things' is ungrammatical; use 'expand my knowledge by learning new things'.

× I love it so much.

✓ I loved it so much.

Referencing childhood requires past tense. Change present 'love' to past 'loved' to maintain tense consistency.

× Yes, but sometimes.

✓ Yes, sometimes I do.

The fragment 'Yes, but sometimes.' is incomplete and awkward. Responding to 'Do you still like going to parks now?' requires a complete present-tense reply like 'Yes, sometimes I do.'

× For example, last week I went to the park with my cousin.

✓ For example, last week I went to the park with my cousin.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. It correctly uses past tense to describe a past event.

× We when we saw it, we recollect a lot of memories from our childhood.

✓ When we saw it, we recalled many memories from our childhood.

Remove the extra 'We' and use past tense 'recalled' (not 'recollect' in present) to match 'last week'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for conciseness; both are acceptable but 'many' is more formal.

× Also, we spend a good time with each other, We expanded the new things and that's it.

✓ Also, we spent a good time together; we explored new things, and that was it.

Use past tense 'spent' to match 'last week'. 'With each other' is better as 'together'. 'Expanded the new things' is incorrect; likely intended 'explored new things'. Capitalization after a comma should be corrected and sentence structure smoothed with a semicolon or separate sentences.

× Yes, I love to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

When expressing desire for the future or changes in the city, use 'would like' rather than present 'love to see'. 'Would like' fits the question 'Would you like to see more parks?'

× I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for relaxation and exercise.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces for relaxation and exercise.

Original is largely correct; change 'green space' to plural 'green spaces' to match 'more parks' offering multiple areas. Tense and structure are appropriate.

× Also, there are multiple parks in my city but it's so expensive.

✓ Also, there are several parks in my city, but maintaining them is expensive.

The clause 'it's so expensive' is vague and ungrammatical referring to parks. Specify what is expensive: maintaining or using parks. 'Multiple' can be changed to 'several'. Add comma before 'but'.

× Like it's not for everyone, it's for the only reach.

✓ They are not for everyone; they are only for the wealthy.

'The only reach' is ungrammatical. Use 'only for the wealthy' or 'only affordable for the rich'. Also change 'it' to 'they' to agree with 'parks'.

× Yes I crave so much to visit new places like Dubai or USA because they have a several parks with a new experience.

✓ Yes, I really crave visiting new places like Dubai or the USA because they have several parks with new experiences.

Use 'crave visiting' or 'really want to visit' instead of 'crave to visit'. Use article 'the USA'. Remove 'a' before 'several'. Use plural 'experiences' and 'new' as adjective is fine.

× Like I wish I can try it and so new things because I love challenges.

✓ I wish I could try them and experience new things because I love challenges.

After 'I wish' use a past modal 'could' to express unreal or desired ability. 'Try it and so new things' is unclear; use 'try them and experience new things'. Maintain plural agreement and clarity.