Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating filler words such as “uh.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to the park near my house when I was a child. I often went there with my father, who would buy me ice cream, and we would sit on a bench and enjoy the view of the pond.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, then provide 1–2 clear reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g. “far from far from”, “for to go”). Use present simple and natural collocations.

Ejemplo: Not really. My house is quite far from the nearest park, and my work schedule is very busy, so I rarely have time to visit. Also, parks are not very common in my area, which makes it harder to find one nearby.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Use consistent vocabulary (e.g. “parks are peaceful places” not “park is a peaceful place”) and correct grammar for intentions ("I would like" or "I want to"). Avoid fillers.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are peaceful places for children, adults and the elderly. I would try to visit once a week to relax and chat with my neighbors.

Sugerencia: Provide a clearer, more natural response: give a direct answer then explain with 1–2 concise reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid absolute negatives like “I don't want to waste time” without context; instead explain why visiting is difficult.

Ejemplo: Not at the moment. I don't have much free time due to my hectic schedule, and the closest parks are quite far from my home, so it's difficult for me to visit them.

× I usually uh, went to park where located near my house when I was a child and uh, I went with my, uh, father.

✓ I usually went to the park that was located near my house when I was a child, and I went with my father.

The original sentence omits the definite article before 'park' and uses a reduced relative clause 'where located' which is ungrammatical. Use the past participle in a passive relative clause 'that was located' or the active relative 'that was located' to describe the park. Also include the article 'the' before 'park' and simplify redundant pauses. Suggestion: use 'the park that was located near my house.'

× He usually uh, took me to the park and uh, bought me a nice ice cream and we took a look on a view of the park.

✓ He usually took me to the park and bought me a nice ice cream, and we looked at the view of the park.

The phrase 'took a look on a view' is incorrect. The correct verb-preposition combination is 'looked at' plus the noun 'the view.' Also 'ice cream' does not need 'a' if referring to a serving; both 'a nice ice cream' or 'a nice ice-cream cone' are possible. Keep past tense 'took' and 'bought' to match narration.

× Actually no, because uh, my house now is far from far from the park and because of hectic schedule so I don't have time for to go to the park and uh, the park now is not very popular in my country so.

✓ Actually no, because my house is now far from the park and because of my hectic schedule I don't have time to go to the park, and parks are not very popular in my country.

Errors include repetition 'far from far from', incorrect article and noun phrase 'hectic schedule' needs 'my', incorrect infinitive form 'for to go' (should be 'to go'), and awkward clause 'the park now is not very popular' which is better generalized to 'parks are not very popular.' Tense and aspect: use present simple to describe current facts. Remove filler words and reorder for clarity.

× Uh, maybe because I think park is a peaceful place for children and, uh, for adults, uh, and elderly to uh, and I wanna, I want to go to the park once out once a week to relax and, umm, talking with my neighbor.

✓ Maybe, because I think the park is a peaceful place for children, adults, and the elderly, and I want to go to the park once a week to relax and talk with my neighbor.

Missing definite article before 'park' ('the park'). 'Elderly' as a noun should take 'the elderly.' 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to.' 'Once out once a week' is incorrect; use 'once a week.' 'Talking with' should be parallel with 'to relax' — use the base form 'talk' or make both gerunds. Maintain present simple for general preferences.

× No because I don't have time. I don't want to waste time for the park and especially some parts is far from my house and my hectic schedule don't let me to do to go there.

✓ No, because I don't have time. I don't want to waste time going to the park, and especially some parts are far from my house, and my hectic schedule doesn't allow me to go there.

Several problems: use 'waste time going to' rather than 'waste time for the park.' Subject-verb agreement errors: 'some parts is' should be 'some parts are.' 'Don't let me to do to go' is ungrammatical; use 'doesn't allow me to go' or 'doesn't let me go.' Use present simple ('doesn't') to describe current situation. Remove redundancies and correct contractions.'