Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 응답은 자연스럽고 직접적이지만 문장이 조금 장황하고 반복이 있습니다. 핵심 문장(토픽 문장)을 더 분명히 하고 supporting detail을 하나 또는 두 개로 구체화하세요. 예를 들어 누가 함께 갔는지와 무엇을 했는지를 간결하게 연결어(with/and/because 등)로 묶어 말하면 더 명확합니다. 또한 불필요한 반복(예: 'enjoyed' 여러 번 사용)을 피하고 다양한 어휘(played, explored, climbed 등)를 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and friends, where we played games and ran around in the open space, which made me feel free and happy.

Sugerencia: 의미 전달은 되지만 문법 오류(정관사, 동사 형태, 어순)와 어색한 표현이 있어 점수가 낮습니다. 문장을 두 부분으로 나누고 연결어(although, but, however)를 사용해 빈도 변화와 이유를 명확히 하세요. 또한 작은 문법 실수(‘go the parks’ → ‘go to parks’, ‘the walk their dogs’ → ‘to walk their dogs’)를 고치세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I sometimes go there with friends to walk their dogs, but I don't visit parks as often as I did when I was younger because I'm busier now.

Sugerencia: 응답이 단편적이고 문장이 잘못 끊겨 있어 의미가 불분명합니다. 이유를 말할 때 문장을 완성하고 연결어(because, since, as)로 설명을 명확히 하세요. 또한 구체적인 이유(예: 건강, 휴식 공간, 환경 개선)를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide places for exercise and relaxation. For example, new parks could encourage people to jog, cycle, and spend time outdoors, improving public health.

Sugerencia: 아이디어는 좋지만 문법(관사, 시제)과 어색한 표현('been one of my bucket list', 'on movies', 문장 미완성)이 있습니다. 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸고 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요(어떤 활동을 하고 싶은지, 어떤 장면을 보고 인상받았는지 등).

Ejemplo: Yes, visiting Central Park has been on my bucket list for a long time. I've only seen it on social media and in films, so I'm excited to walk its paths, see the famous scenery, and maybe have a picnic there.

× I sometimes go the parks with my friends the walk their dogs, but I cannot go to parks as frequently as when I was.

✓ I sometimes go to the parks with my friends to walk their dogs, but I cannot go to parks as frequently as I did when I was a child.

The sentence misuses prepositions and omits necessary words. 'Go the parks' should be 'go to the parks' (preposition 'to' required). 'The walk their dogs' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to walk' to express purpose. The clause comparing frequency needs a complete past reference: 'as frequently as I did when I was a child.' Improve by adding 'to' before places and using 'to' + verb for purpose; complete the comparative clause with an appropriate past verb. Suggestion: Break into smaller phrases and ensure prepositions precede places ('go to'), use 'to' + base verb for purpose ('to walk'), and include a past auxiliary or verb ('did') in comparisons referring to past habits.

× Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because. Parks are. Good for exercising.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are good for exercising.

The original response is fragmented and contains sentence breaks that interrupt meaning. 'Because.' and 'Parks are.' are sentence fragments. Combine them into a single coherent sentence: 'because parks are good for exercising.' Ensure clauses introduced by 'because' are followed by a complete clause, not left as a fragment. Suggestion: Avoid unnecessary sentence breaks; write complete clauses after conjunctions like 'because'.

× Yes, visiting the Central Park has been one of my bucket list.

✓ Yes, visiting Central Park has been on my bucket list.

The phrase 'one of my bucket list' is incorrect; 'bucket list' is a noun phrase that takes 'on' to indicate inclusion. Use 'has been on my bucket list.' Also 'the Central Park' is usually 'Central Park' without 'the' when referring to the famous park. Use the present perfect 'has been' correctly with 'on my bucket list.' Suggestion: Use 'on my bucket list' to indicate items included in the list and omit the definite article before proper names like 'Central Park'.

× I've seen the place only on the social media or on movies, so I'm really excited to.

✓ I've only seen the place on social media or in movies, so I'm really excited to visit it.

Multiple issues: 'the social media' should be 'social media' (no article), and 'on movies' should be 'in movies.' The phrasal verb 'excited to' requires an object or infinitive (e.g., 'excited to visit it'). Also 'only' is better placed before 'seen' for emphasis: 'I've only seen.' Improve by placing adverbs correctly, choosing correct prepositions ('on' vs 'in'), and completing 'excited to' with an action. Suggestion: Use 'in movies' for appearances inside films, 'on social media' can be 'on' but commonly 'on social media' or 'on the social media' is incorrect; prefer 'on social media.' Always follow 'excited to' with a verb or object like 'visit it.'