Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., Yes, I loved going to parks as a child), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid grammar errors and redundant words. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural (e.g., ‘there was a big park near my house’, ‘I usually went there with my family’). Keep your answer within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ appropriately.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. There was a large park near my house, and I often went there with my family to play sports or get some fresh air. Because the space was safe and green, it was our favorite place to spend an afternoon.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid filler phrases (‘you know’, repeated words). Use correct vocabulary and clear reasons. Begin with a short topic sentence (Yes, I still enjoy going to parks.) then add a specific reason and an example. Use linking words such as ‘because’, ‘so’ or ‘which’ to connect ideas and watch grammar (e.g., ‘parks are a great place to relax’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I find parks peaceful and refreshing because the greenery helps me relax after a busy week, so I often take walks there to clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Be precise and avoid hesitation sounds (‘um’, ‘uh’). Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary (e.g., ‘green spaces’ instead of unclear phrases). Start with a clear opinion sentence and follow with two specific benefits, linked logically. Use correct grammar for plural/singular and verbs (e.g., ‘parks make the city more vibrant’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. More green spaces would make the city more vibrant and provide residents with easy opportunities to connect with nature and exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a clear and relevant answer with one or two concrete reasons. Name the park and say why you want to visit using coherent reasons (e.g., scenery, reputation, activities). Avoid irrelevant or confusing references. Keep sentences grammatically correct and limit to 2–3 sentences with linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Highgate Park in London in the future because I’ve heard it has beautiful walking paths and historic gardens. I’d love to try walking there and seeing the scenery for myself.

× To be honest, that would be definitely a yes.

✓ To be honest, that would definitely be a yes.

Placement of the adverb 'definitely' is incorrect; 'would be definitely a yes' sounds awkward. Move 'definitely' before 'be' or after 'would' to form a natural phrase. Suggestion: 'would definitely be'.

× It is because they were once a huge bar near my house and we I usually travel there with my families as a part of the day in in order for me to just doing some sport, just go for work or just catch some fresh air.

✓ It is because there was a huge park near my house and I usually went there with my family as part of the day to do some sport, work, or just get some fresh air.

Multiple issues: 'they were once a huge bar' has wrong pronoun and noun ('they' and 'bar'); likely meant 'there was a huge park' (there be issue and word choice). 'we I usually travel' mixes pronouns and tense; use 'I usually went' for past habit (past tense). 'my families' should be 'my family' (singular collective). 'in in order for me to just doing' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'to do'. Also 'just go for work' -> 'work' or 'go to work' and 'just catch some fresh air' -> 'get some fresh air'.

× Personally I would say it it is a yes because you know like park is away is a huge place for people to just go go going for work.

✓ Personally, I would say it is a yes because parks are a great place for people to go and relax or exercise.

Redundant words and incorrect form: double 'it it' and 'park is away is' are incorrect. Use plural 'parks are' for general statement (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'go go going for work' is repetitive and unclear; replace with 'go and relax or exercise' to fit context.

× This means that when you travel to a park you can just find yourself in a new era as well as a way to relaxed.

✓ This means that when you go to a park you can find yourself in a new mood and it is a way to relax.

'travel to a park' is acceptable but 'find yourself in a new era' is wrong word choice; 'era' should be 'mood' or 'state'. 'a way to relaxed' mixes infinitive and past participle; correct form is 'a way to relax'.

× Umm, in my opinion, park is uh, I would say it is yes, because like parks is one of is not at the Green Bay of the city, so it's mean at the ones there was more park.

✓ In my opinion, I would say yes, because parks are an important part of the city's green spaces, so having more parks would make the city better.

Missing articles and incorrect noun forms: 'park is' should be 'parks are' for general statement (plural and agreement). Phrase 'is not at the Green Bay of the city' is unclear; clarify to 'part of the city's green spaces'. 'it's mean at the ones there was more park' has wrong tense and structure; use 'so having more parks would'.

× It will makes the city more vibrant as well as to is a chance for citizen to become closer to the nature.

✓ It would make the city more vibrant and give citizens a chance to become closer to nature.

Verb form errors: 'will makes' mixes future modal and incorrect verb form; use 'would make' or 'will make' with 'make'. 'to is a chance' is ungrammatical; use 'and give'. 'citizen' should be plural 'citizens'. 'the nature' should be 'nature' (no article).

× Well, to be honest, there would be the High Park in London like I do wanna travel there because it is not at the place that sell homes in Washington usually came there for work.

✓ Well, to be honest, I would like to visit High Park in London because it is not a typical tourist area and people who live in Washington usually come there to work.

'There would be the High Park' is an awkward modal use; use 'I would like to visit'. 'do wanna' is informal; use 'want to' or 'would like to'. 'it is not at the place that sell homes in Washington' is unclear and ungrammatical; rephrase to convey intended meaning. 'usually came there for work' mixes past/present; use 'usually come' or 'usually come there to work'.

× Of course is this is is this a detail in fiction, but I do want to experience how they feel when walking that.

✓ Of course, this may be a small fictional detail, but I would like to experience how it feels to walk there.

Awkward and repetitive phrasing: 'is this is is this' is redundant. 'detail in fiction' should be 'fictional detail' or 'a small fictional detail'. 'how they feel when walking that' incorrectly uses 'they' and 'that'; use 'how it feels to walk there'.