Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more accurate and natural: avoid wrong words and filler sounds, use a clear tense and concise sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace 'abuse' with 'scenery' or 'views', use present tense 'I like', and remove repeated fillers like 'uh'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, when I have free time I often scroll through my phone gallery to look at photos of landscapes I’ve taken, which reminds me of visits to special places.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and provide one specific reason with an example. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly, and be specific about what you enjoy (e.g., quiet, fresh air, scenery).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer quiet, unspoilt scenery and fresh air. For example, I often visit my village in the countryside to walk in the hills and take photos of the fields and forests, which I find very relaxing.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your preference clearly, give one precise reason, and support it with a brief example or explanation. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'natural landscapes' instead of 'natural resources') and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove duplicate words).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse natural landscapes, such as hills and mountains. For instance, many tourists visit popular national parks here to hike and enjoy the scenery, and I feel proud showing these places to friends.

× Yes, I liked taking pictures of different abuse to make memories.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different places to make memories.

The student used past tense 'liked' though speaking about a current habitual preference; present simple 'like' is correct. Also 'abuse' is a wrong word choice; 'places' fits the meaning. Suggestion: use present simple for habits (I like), and check word choice for appropriate nouns.

× Uh, for instance, whenever I'm free, I usually scroll my phones and if there is no Internet, I would, uh, go to the gallery and, uh, recall my memories.

✓ Uh, for instance, whenever I'm free, I usually scroll my phone and if there is no Internet, I go to the gallery and recall my memories.

Mixes modal 'would' with habitual present; use present simple 'go' for habitual actions. Also 'phones' should be singular 'phone' when referring to one's device. Remove unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: use present simple for repeated actions and ensure noun number matches context.

× I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas because rural areas are rich in natural resources, mountains, hills, etcetera.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than in urban areas because rural areas have rich natural scenery such as mountains and hills.

Use parallel prepositional structure 'in rural areas' and 'in urban areas' for clarity. 'Rich in natural resources' is grammatically okay but unnatural when describing scenery; 'have rich natural scenery' or 'are rich in natural beauty' is better. Also listing should match meaning; replace 'etcetera' with specific examples or 'and so on.'

× For instance, my con. My village also is in countryside, so I often go there for some kind of.

✓ For instance, my village is in the countryside, so I often go there sometimes.

Original contains fragmented words ('my con.') and incorrect phrase 'is in countryside' which needs the definite article 'the countryside.' 'for some kind of' is incomplete; replace with 'sometimes' or a complete purpose phrase like 'to relax.' Suggestion: avoid fragments and complete the thought; use 'the countryside' with article.

× I prefer views in my own country rather than in other countries because our country is full of full of natural resources.

✓ I prefer views in my own country rather than in other countries because our country is full of natural resources.

Repeats 'full of' twice — a redundancy error. Keep present simple 'prefer' is correct. Suggestion: remove duplication and maintain concise phrasing.

× Therefore large number of tourists came to came to our country for their to explore and enjoy the nature of the nature of the hills, mountains.

✓ Therefore a large number of tourists come to our country to explore and enjoy the nature of the hills and mountains.

The student used past tense 'came' but is making a general statement about tourists; use present simple 'come.' Also repeated phrases 'came to came to' and 'the nature of the nature of' are errors — remove duplicates. Add the article 'a' before 'large number.' Fix infinitive structure 'to explore.' Suggestion: use present simple for general facts, avoid repetition, and ensure correct article use.