Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, so). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention what kinds of views you like and a brief reason or example to make your answer concrete.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel I often capture city skylines and coastal landscapes because they show contrasting colors at sunrise. As a result, I have a small collection of photos that remind me of each trip.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence comparing the two, then add a specific reason with one concrete example. Remove hesitations and avoid repeating similar adjectives. Use a linking word (for example, because) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views rather than rural ones because I live in an inner city and enjoy modern architecture. For example, I often photograph newly built glass buildings and busy streets at dusk because their lights create dramatic contrasts.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific detail or example. Avoid repeating phrases and hesitations. If you mention not travelling abroad, link that to your preference and give a vivid detail about the local scenery.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't travelled abroad and there are many places I still want to explore. For instance, our mountain ranges offer dramatic ridges and misty valleys that I love photographing at sunrise because they feel comforting and unique to me.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views around me uh, personally, I am big on traveling.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views around me. Personally, I am big on traveling.

The original sentence runs two independent clauses together with fillers and lacks proper sentence separation. This is a sentence structure issue and affects fluency. Split into two sentences and remove filler 'uh' to improve clarity and flow.

× So whenever I am out, I try to get a different perspective of my mind using my lens.

✓ So whenever I am out, I try to capture a different perspective with my lens.

The phrase 'perspective of my mind' is awkward and not idiomatic. Use 'capture' for photographing and 'with my lens' or 'using my lens' is acceptable; 'with my lens' is more concise. This corrects wording and structure while keeping present tense.

× So I just uh, so that I when I go home.

✓ So I just do that when I go home.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and incomplete. It contains filler words and misordered elements. Rewriting as a complete sentence 'So I just do that when I go home.' makes the meaning clear and grammatical.

× Uh, so I prefer urban areas than the countryside because I also live in this, uh, inner city.

✓ Uh, so I prefer urban areas to the countryside because I also live in an inner city.

When comparing preferences use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A than B'. Also use 'an inner city' instead of 'this, inner city' for natural phrasing; remove filler 'uh'.

× And what I love about the, uh, cities is that I get to see interesting architectural modern buildings all around me.

✓ What I love about the cities is that I get to see interesting modern architectural buildings all around me.

Word order for multiple adjectives should place opinion adjectives (interesting) before descriptive adjectives (modern) and noun 'architectural' usually follows 'modern' or can be rephrased as 'modern architectural buildings'. Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas.

× So it's just so lively and energetic and I just love it.

✓ They are lively and energetic, and I really love them.

Pronoun reference and repetition are awkward. Use 'they' to refer to 'cities' and avoid repeating 'just'. 'Really' is a better adverb here. This improves clarity and style.

× I prefer views in my own country, uh, specifically because I've never travelled abroad and there is still a lot of places that I have not explored in my own country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country specifically because I've never travelled abroad and there are still a lot of places I have not explored in my country.

Subject-verb agreement: 'there is' should be 'there are' to match plural 'places'. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary repetition 'in my own country' at the end. Keeps present perfect 'I've never travelled' consistent.

× I love the mountain range that my country offers me and I would I love exploring those and it's just more comforting and interesting to me.

✓ I love the mountain ranges that my country offers, and I would love exploring them; it's more comforting and interesting to me.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'mountain range' vs 'those' is inconsistent. Use plural 'mountain ranges' and refer with 'them'. Remove duplicated 'I would I love' and join clauses properly. This corrects pronoun reference and sentence structure.