Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 응답은 질문에 대체로 답하고 있으나 문법적 오류, 불명확한 어휘 사용, 중복 표현, 그리고 자주 하는 맺음음(umm, uh)이 점수를 낮추고 있습니다. 구체적으로 주제문을 명확히 하고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이며 과거 사례를 말할 때는 간결한 문장으로 정리하세요. 또한 연결어(for example, especially, when)들을 자연스럽게 사용해 문장의 흐름을 개선하면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Photography is one of my main hobbies, and I often photograph landscapes and city scenes when I travel. For example, on a recent trip I visited several parks and took photos of sunsets and rivers to capture the atmosphere.

Sugerencia: 좋은 시작입니다 — 직접적으로 선호를 밝히고 이유도 제시했습니다. 개선할 점은 도시 이름 발음이나 불명확한 단어(예: UMM, Rizon)를 정리하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하는 것입니다. 또한 연결어(for example, because, because of)를 사용해 이유와 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in urban areas because cities often combine impressive architecture with pockets of nature. For example, Tokyo and Sydney have large parks and waterfronts where you can enjoy greenery alongside modern buildings, which makes the scenery more varied and interesting.

Sugerencia: 의도를 잘 전달했지만 문법과 어휘 사용에서 흠이 있습니다. 'Unfortunately'는 약간 부정적 뉘앙스여서 더 중립적인 표현으로 바꾸고, 이유를 더 명확하고 간결하게 설명하세요. 불필요한 맺음음은 제거하고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연결어(since, because, as a result)를 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: I generally prefer views in other countries because foreign scenery feels fresh and different from my everyday surroundings. Since I'm used to the landscapes at home, traveling abroad allows me to see new architecture, natural features, and cultural sights that I find more exciting.

× Yes, that is one of my hobbies, like main hobbies.

✓ Yes, that is one of my main hobbies.

The article 'my' should directly modify 'main hobbies' as 'my main hobbies'. The original word order is incorrect. Rearranging to 'my main hobbies' places the possessive before the noun phrase; also use 'one of my main hobbies' to indicate a single item in a group. Suggestion: Place possessive adjectives before the noun phrase: 'one of my main hobbies'.

× I usually take pictures of everything, especially when I'm in traveling.

✓ I usually take pictures of everything, especially when I'm traveling.

Use the gerund/verbal adjective 'traveling' without the preposition 'in' after 'when'. The correct expression is 'when I'm traveling' to indicate action in progress. Suggestion: Use 'when I'm traveling' instead of 'when I'm in traveling'.

× Umm, when I went to like protocol, I said uh them of pictures and I collected the sceneries umm, according to.

✓ When I went to places for events, I took many pictures and collected scenes.

The original sentence has unclear word choices and structure: 'protocol' is likely incorrect, 'said uh them of pictures' is ungrammatical, and 'according to' is dangling. Simplify to clear verbs: 'went to places for events' and 'took many pictures' convey the intended meaning. 'Collected scenes' or 'collected photos of scenery' is clearer. Suggestion: Use clear nouns and verbs and avoid dangling prepositions. e.g., 'When I went to events, I took many pictures of the scenery.'.

× Uh, I absolutely prefer views in urban areas.

✓ I absolutely prefer views in urban areas.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed except removing filler 'Uh'. The original only contained a filler word. Suggestion: Omit fillers like 'Uh' in formal responses to sound clearer.

× My favorite cities are UMM, Rizon, Tokyo, and Sydney. There are all big cities.

✓ My favorite cities are UMM, Rizon, Tokyo, and Sydney. They are all big cities.

Use the pronoun 'they' to refer back to the plural noun 'cities' rather than 'There'. 'There are all big cities' is incorrect because 'there are' introduces existence, not description. 'They are all big cities' correctly describes the listed items. Suggestion: Use 'they are' for describing previously mentioned plural nouns.

× I think I like the mixture of nature and the big city.

✓ I think I like the mixture of nature and big-city life.

'the big city' as a noun phrase is a bit awkward after 'mixture of'. Using 'big-city life' or 'urban elements' is more natural. Also hyphenating 'big-city' when used as a compound adjective clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Use noun phrases like 'big-city life' or 'urban areas' for clarity.

× Unfortunately, I prefer views in other countries.

✓ Unfortunately, I prefer views in other countries.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no change needed. It matches question context. Suggestion: None.

× Maybe it is because I am too familiar with the scenery, my daily scenery and that's why I more into umm enjoying the other country's sceneries.

✓ Maybe it is because I am too familiar with my daily scenery, and that's why I am more into enjoying other countries' scenery.

Several errors: word order and repetition ('the scenery, my daily scenery'); missing verb 'am' before 'more into'; incorrect possessive 'other country's sceneries' should be plural possessive 'other countries' scenery' or 'other countries' scenery'. Use 'scenery' as uncountable, so 'other countries' scenery' or 'scenery in other countries' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'scenery' as uncountable and correct possessive: 'other countries' scenery' or 'scenery in other countries', and include required verbs: 'I am more into enjoying...'.