Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 자연스럽고 의도가 분명하지만 문법과 표현에 몇 가지 오류가 있으며 반복과 어색한 표현을 줄여야 합니다. 구체적으로는 관사 사용(“the sunset of beach” → “the sunset at the beach” 또는 “sunsets on the beach”), 단수/복수 및 형태(“refresh” → “refreshed”)를 고치고, 문장을 2–3개로 나누어 더 명확한 구조를 만들면 좋습니다. 또한 linking word(예: “especially”) 사용 후 구체적 예시를 간결하게 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of beautiful views. I especially like sunsets at the beach and scenes in the forest, because they make me feel calm and refreshed.

Sugerencia: 의견을 명확히 제시한 점은 좋지만 문장이 길고 쉼표 사용으로 연결된 복문에서 문법 오류가 있습니다(주어-동사 일치: “they makes” → “they make”). 중복 표현(“peaceful and calm”, “really calm and refreshed”)을 줄이고 linking word(예: “because” 또는 “so”)로 이유를 연결해 구문을 깔끔하게 다듬으세요. 자연스러운 표현을 위해 ‘rural areas’ 뒤에 구체적 묘사(예: ‘open fields, forests’)를 추가하면 더 설득력있습니다.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer open fields and forests with natural landscapes. The peaceful atmosphere and lack of noise help me relax and feel refreshed.

Sugerencia: 의사를 전달하려는 의도는 분명하지만 문법과 표현 오류가 눈에 띕니다(단수/복수: “I prefer view” → “I prefer views”; 의미 오류: “I really attract the views” → “I’m really attracted to the views” 또는 “the views attracted me”). 시제 일치(“When I visited Kyoto”), 구체성(왜 일본의 경관이 매력적인지)과 linking word 사용으로 답변을 확장하세요. 또한 한두 문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries, especially places like Japan. For example, when I visited Kyoto, I was really attracted to the calm temples and beautiful gardens, which felt peaceful and unique.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of beautiful views, especially the sunset of beach or the forest.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of beautiful views, especially the sunset at the beach or in the forest.

Prepositions are used with specific nouns: we say 'sunset at the beach' and 'in the forest'. Using 'of' is incorrect here. Also include the article 'the' before 'beach' and 'forest' to refer to specific places. Suggestion: learn common preposition+noun collocations (e.g., at the beach, in the forest).

× It makes me really calm and refresh.

✓ It makes me feel really calm and refreshed.

The sentence lacks the verb 'feel' when describing an emotional effect and misuses 'refresh' (verb) instead of the adjective 'refreshed'. Use 'feel' + adjective: 'feel calm' and 'feel refreshed'. Suggestion: use 'feel' before emotional/adjective complements and use correct adjective forms.

× I really prefer views in rural areas, they have beautiful natural landscape and peaceful and calm atmosphere and they makes me really calm and refreshed.

✓ I really prefer views in rural areas; they have beautiful natural landscapes and a peaceful, calm atmosphere, and they make me really calm and refreshed.

Multiple issues: 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'views' (or use singular with an article), missing article before 'peaceful, calm atmosphere' and adjective order/commas, and subject-verb agreement: 'they make' not 'they makes'. Suggestion: ensure plural nouns agree and verbs match plural subjects; include articles where needed and separate ideas with punctuation.

× I prefer view in other countries such as Japan.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, such as Japan.

The noun 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. Also add a comma before 'such as' when giving an example. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general preferences and punctuate examples correctly.

× When I visit Kyoto in Japan, the views were really calm and peaceful and I really attract the views.

✓ When I visited Kyoto in Japan, the views were really calm and peaceful, and I was really attracted to the views.

Tense consistency: the visit happened in the past, so use past tense 'visited'. 'Attract' is the wrong form; the correct passive/adjective structure is 'was attracted to' or active 'I really liked the views'. Suggestion: keep past narration in past tense and use correct verb forms ('be attracted to' + past form) or rephrase to 'I really liked the views'.