Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 유창성에서 개선이 필요합니다. 불필요한 말더림(uh, umm)과 반복(‘I use it. I use my camera.’)을 줄이고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 또 주제문을 명확히 하고, 연결어(to talk about frequency and reason)를 사용해 세부사항을 논리적으로 제시하세요. 예: 간단한 빈도 표현과 이유, 구체적 예시(어떤 풍경을 즐기는지)를 추가하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually go out with my digital camera, and I especially like photographing landscapes because I find nature more inspiring. For example, when I travel I often capture mountain scenes and sunsets to remember the trip.

Sugerencia: 발음과 문법, 문장 구조를 정리해야 합니다. 중복 표현(‘I definitely, I definitely’)과 어법 오류(‘urban view it fails me bit boring’)를 고치고, 이유를 명확하고 조직적으로 제시하세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 적절히 사용해 논리 흐름을 개선하세요.

Ejemplo: I definitely prefer rural views to urban ones because city scenery seems less interesting to me; I see it every day. Therefore, I enjoy going out to the countryside to experience different landscapes and fresh air.

Sugerencia: 문법(‘I leave my country whole of my life’ → ‘I’ve lived in my country all my life’)과 어휘(‘on board’ → ‘abroad’) 오류를 수정하세요. 말더림을 줄이고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 다른 문화나 풍경에 대한 호기심). 또한 문장을 자연스럽게 연결해 말의 흐름을 개선하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I’ve lived in my country all my life, so foreign landscapes feel fresh and exciting to me. For instance, I enjoy exploring coastal towns abroad because their architecture and atmosphere are very different from what I usually see.

× Yes, I love taking a picture.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural after 'taking' when speaking generally about a hobby. Use the gerund 'taking' with the plural noun 'pictures' for general activities. Suggestion: say 'I love taking pictures.'

× I usually go out to take a picture, uh, with my digital camera and yeah, especially I love uh, landscapes.

✓ I usually go out to take pictures with my digital camera, and I especially love landscapes.

Use plural 'pictures' for a habitual activity and streamline word order: 'I especially love landscapes.' Remove unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: 'I usually go out to take pictures with my digital camera, and I especially love landscapes.'

× So yeah, when I travel, I use it. I use my camera.

✓ So yeah, when I travel, I use my camera.

Combine repetitive sentences into one coherent sentence. Repeating 'I use it. I use my camera.' is redundant. Suggestion: 'When I travel, I use my camera.'

× MMM I definitely, I definitely prefer uh rural views because urban view it fails me bit boring because I live in a city.

✓ I definitely prefer rural views because urban views feel a bit boring to me since I live in a city.

Use plural 'views' when comparing types of views. 'Fail me' is incorrect; use 'feel' and include 'to me' for opinion. Add 'a' before 'bit boring' and correct word order. Suggestion: 'I definitely prefer rural views because urban views feel a bit boring to me since I live in a city.'

× So yeah, it is not very interesting for me.

✓ So yeah, they are not very interesting to me.

Refer back to 'views' (plural), so use plural subject 'they' and 'are'. Also prefer 'interesting to me' rather than 'for me' in this context. Suggestion: 'They are not very interesting to me.'

× So I love go out.

✓ So I love going out.

After 'love', use the gerund 'going' rather than the base verb 'go'. Suggestion: 'I love going out.'

× I definitely prefer umm other countries view yeah, because I leave my country whole of my life.

✓ I definitely prefer views in other countries because I have lived in my country all my life.

Use 'views in other countries' for natural phrasing. 'Leave' is wrong form; use present perfect 'have lived' to indicate an action continuing up to now. 'Whole of my life' should be 'all my life'. Suggestion: 'I definitely prefer views in other countries because I have lived in my country all my life.'

× So yeah it it feels quite boring for me.

✓ So yeah, it feels quite boring to me.

Remove duplicate 'it it'. Use 'to me' after 'boring' for opinion. If referring to 'my country' or 'the views', ensure pronoun agrees (it/they). Suggestion: 'It feels quite boring to me.' or 'They feel quite boring to me.' depending on reference.

× So I prefer go out on board.

✓ So I prefer to go abroad.

Use the infinitive 'to go' after 'prefer' when followed by a verb. 'On board' is incorrect; use 'abroad' to mean 'in other countries.' Suggestion: 'I prefer to go abroad.'