Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity, vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), correct wrong words (use 'places' or 'views' instead of 'pills'), and make one or two concise supporting sentences using linking words (because, so, therefore). Keep responses within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember beautiful places. For example, when I visit a mountain or a shrine, I take photos so I can recall the details later. Therefore, photography preserves memories of places that are important to me.

Sugerencia: Fix vocabulary and phrasing, use accurate nouns and connectors, reduce repetition, and organize into a topic sentence plus two clear supporting reasons. Use linking words such as 'first' and 'second' correctly, and replace vague phrases ('remember out of my childhood') with specific expressions ('remind me of my childhood'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes. First, rural places have forests and open fields that feel peaceful and visually appealing. Second, they remind me of my hometown and childhood memories, so they are personally meaningful to me.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary (use 'views' or 'buildings' not 'bills'), correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, plural forms), avoid repeating linkers ('first of all' and 'secondly' together), and give more specific examples. Structure as a direct answer followed by two concise reasons with examples. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because they reflect our traditional culture. For example, festivals and Kabuki theatre create colorful streetscapes, and many historic buildings such as wooden shrines and temples offer unique scenery. These features make Japanese views especially memorable to me.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different pills.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The student used the word 'pills' instead of 'views', which is a wrong word choice rather than grammar; however it creates a singular/plural confusion and meaning error. Replace 'pills' with 'views' to match the question and intended plural noun. Suggestion: listen for similar sounding words and choose vocabulary that fits context.

× That's because without the pictures, uh, we can't remember a lot of views or scenery, uh, which is beautiful or important for me, but if the picture gives me to a lot of uh, remembering views.

✓ That's because without pictures we can't remember many views or scenery that are beautiful or important to me, but a picture helps me remember them.

The original sentence has awkward structure, incorrect preposition use ('gives me to'), and redundancy. 'A lot of' with countable 'views' should be 'many views'. 'Which is beautiful or important for me' should be 'that are beautiful or important to me'. 'Gives me to a lot of remembering views' is ungrammatical; replace with 'helps me remember them'. Suggestion: simplify complex clauses, use correct relative pronoun 'that', and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× I prefer building rural areas for two reasons.

✓ I prefer rural areas for two reasons.

The phrase 'building rural areas' is incorrect. Possibly 'preferring buildings in rural areas' was intended, but the simple and natural expression is 'I prefer rural areas'. 'Building' erroneously modifies 'rural areas' and creates a grammar/word choice error. Suggestion: remove incorrect modifier and use concise noun phrase.

× First, I like natures in rural areas.

✓ First, I like nature in rural areas.

'Natures' is not used in English; 'nature' is an uncountable noun. Use the singular uncountable form 'nature'. Suggestion: memorize which nouns are uncountable and avoid adding plural -s.

× There's a lot of nature and I can I can see other beautiful beautiful cities in rural areas.

✓ There is a lot of natural scenery and I can see many beautiful places in rural areas.

The original repeats words ('I can I can', 'beautiful beautiful') and uses 'cities' incorrectly for rural areas. 'A lot of nature' is better as 'a lot of natural scenery' or 'many natural sights'. Use 'many' with countable 'places' or 'sights'. Remove repetition. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and choose accurate nouns for context.

× Secondary my hometown is in rural areas so I can remember out of my childhood.

✓ Secondly, my hometown is in a rural area, so I can remember my childhood there.

Use 'Secondly' (adverb) as the connector. 'Rural areas' should be singular 'a rural area' for 'my hometown'. 'Remember out of my childhood' is incorrect; say 'remember my childhood there' or 'it reminds me of my childhood'. Suggestion: use connectors correctly and choose proper prepositions ('there') for location reference.

× I like the bills in my country Japan for two reasons.

✓ I like the buildings in my country, Japan, for two reasons.

'Bills' is the wrong word; 'buildings' fits the context. Also add commas around 'Japan' as an appositive. This is a word choice error leading to wrong singular/plural sense. Suggestion: check similar-sounding words and pick the accurate noun.

× First of all, there's a lot of traditional cultures in Japan like Kabuki or festival, so the scenery reflect out of traditional culture of those.

✓ First of all, there are many traditional cultural practices in Japan, like Kabuki and festivals, so the scenery reflects that traditional culture.

Use 'there are' with plural 'practices' (there be issue/subject-verb agreement). 'A lot of traditional cultures' is unnatural; say 'many traditional cultural practices' or 'many traditions'. 'Festival' should be plural 'festivals'. 'Scenery reflect out of traditional culture of those' is ungrammatical—use 'the scenery reflects that traditional culture'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, pluralize appropriately, and use clear relative clauses.

× Second, secondly, there's a lot of important buildings like shrines.

✓ Secondly, there are many important buildings, such as shrines.

Avoid repeating 'Second' and 'secondly'. Use 'there are' with plural 'buildings' for subject-verb agreement. 'A lot of important buildings' is colloquial; 'many important buildings' is better. Use 'such as' to give examples. Suggestion: choose one ordinal connector and ensure verb matches plural noun.