Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is natural and relevant but a bit long and contains minor repetition. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., "beautiful scenes" and "beautiful moments") and reduce filler phrases. Also mention a brief reason or example to make it more specific.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I recently bought a phone with an excellent camera, so I often photograph the parks and green areas when I walk around UMM. For example, last week I captured a colorful sunrise over the trees, which reminded me why I enjoy preserving memories through photos.

Sugerencia: Good clear preference, but speech is hesitant and slightly repetitive. To improve, state your preference directly, then use one or two linked reasons with concrete examples. Reduce hesitations and unnecessary repetition of contrasts.

Ejemplo: I prefer countryside views because the open fields and unobstructed horizons make sunrises and sunsets more dramatic. For instance, last summer I watched the sky turn vivid orange over a rice field, which felt more peaceful than any city skyline.

Sugerencia: Your answer communicates a balanced view but is vague and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Improve by giving a concise topic sentence (no preference), then provide one clear contrasting example for each (domestic and foreign) using linking words like "for example" or "for instance". Eliminate fillers and repeated words.

Ejemplo: I don't have a strong preference. At home I enjoy photographing wide rivers and rolling hills—for example, the lake near my village—whereas abroad I like coastal scenes, such as photographing waves and rocky shores when I travel to the seaside.

× Definitely, I recently bought a new phone and it comes with an awesome camera that captures beautiful scenes and greenery areas where I mostly take walks at UMM.

✓ Definitely, I recently bought a new phone and it comes with an awesome camera that captures beautiful scenes and green areas where I mostly take walks at UMM.

'greenery areas' is awkward and uncountable; use 'green areas' or 'greenery'. Also 'an awesome camera' is fine. Suggestion: use 'green areas' to sound natural.

× I believe that taking pictures really help capture the beautiful moments.

✓ I believe that taking pictures really helps capture beautiful moments.

'taking pictures' is a singular gerund phrase functioning as subject, so the verb should be 'helps' (subject-verb agreement). Also omit 'the' before 'beautiful moments' unless referring to specific moments.

× I definitely prefer views in the countryside, uh, in the city, uh, there are some quite, uh, beautiful scenes such as tall buildings and landscapes, but uh, the beautiful views of the sunrise and sunsets in the countryside outweigh the city.

✓ I definitely prefer views in the countryside. In the city there are some beautiful scenes such as tall buildings and landscapes, but the beautiful sunrises and sunsets in the countryside outweigh those in the city.

Run-on sentence and unclear comparison. Separate into two sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel comparison. Use plural 'sunrises and sunsets' and compare them to 'those in the city' for clarity. 'Outweigh the city' is incorrect; you need to specify what is outweighed.

× I don't really have a preference, uh, in my country there, there there are beautiful views, uh, such as the vast, uh, lands and rivers and lakes, while up in foreign countries there are beautiful oceans and seas that I can take pictures at of.

✓ I don't really have a preference. In my country there are beautiful views such as vast lands, rivers, and lakes, while in foreign countries there are beautiful oceans and seas where I can take pictures.

Avoid ending sentences with prepositions like 'at of'; use 'where' instead. Remove redundant words 'there, there' and 'up'. Use parallel structure: 'lands, rivers, and lakes'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.