Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence, correct repetition and grammar, and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and finish the thought. Also reduce sentence length and use linking words if needed.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. Photography is my hobby and I collect images of beautiful scenes, such as sunsets over the sea and misty mountain valleys, because each place has a unique atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitation sounds and organize your answer: start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Use varied vocabulary (e.g. 'crowded' instead of repeating 'population').

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and less crowded. For example, villages have open fields and lots of greenery, and there is much less traffic, which makes them better for landscape photography.

Sugerencia: Complete your sentences and avoid vague endings. Give a clear topic sentence and then provide two specific examples of landscapes, using linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'. Correct grammar mistakes (e.g. 'it is very beautiful and has' not 'and has').

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it offers diverse landscapes. For example, in the north there are high mountains, in the central region wide plains, and in the south you can find attractive coastal areas.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm photographer photographer and it's my hobby to collect the pictures of beautiful scenes and as I like to enjoy in a different kind of scene, so I definitely.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm a photographer and it's my hobby to collect pictures of beautiful scenes, and since I enjoy different kinds of scenery, I definitely do.

Errors: missing article 'a' before photographer and accidental repetition 'photographer photographer'; awkward phrasing 'collect the pictures' and 'in a different kind of scene'; sentence fragment ending 'so I definitely.' Corrections: add the indefinite article 'a' for singular countable noun (article error, ID 22), remove duplicate word and unnecessary definite article before 'pictures' (article/usage), change 'in a different kind of scene' to 'different kinds of scenery' for natural noun choice (sentence structure, ID 26), and complete the final clause with 'do' to form a full clause. Suggestion: read aloud to spot repetitions, ensure countable nouns have articles, and simplify long clauses into clear phrases.

× I prefer, uh, views of, uh, rural areas because, uh, uh, in urban areas there is a lot of population and, uh, very, uh, huge traffic.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because urban areas have a large population and heavy traffic.

Errors: 'there is a lot of population' is unidiomatic; 'population' as a mass noun can be used, but typical phrasing is 'a large population' or 'many people' (singular/plural and article issues, IDs 1 and 22). 'Huge traffic' is incorrect collocation; use 'heavy traffic' (word choice/adjective use, ID 13). Also unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: use 'have' with plural noun 'urban areas' for agreement and choose common collocations like 'large population' and 'heavy traffic.'

× So, uh, in, but in rural areas, people are living in a very peaceful environment and there are a lot of fields and greenery, umm, inside, uh, the village.

✓ In contrast, people in rural areas live in a very peaceful environment, and there are many fields and much greenery in the villages.

Errors: awkward conjunctions 'So, ... but' (incorrect conjunction use, ID 16) and unnecessary 'are living' continuous form when describing a general state (present tense issue, ID 6). 'a lot of fields and greenery' is acceptable but 'many fields and much greenery' is more precise (quantifier/adjective use, IDs 14 and 13). 'inside the village' is awkward; 'in the villages' or 'in the village' depending on meaning (preposition/article, IDs 11 and 22). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/general facts, choose correct conjunction ('in contrast' or 'but'), and use appropriate quantifiers.

× I prefer views in my own country because it is a very beautiful and has a rich diversity of landforms and as there are in north there are mountains and after that a plain area is there and in the South there is a coastal area.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is very beautiful and has a rich diversity of landforms: in the north there are mountains, then plains, and in the south there is a coastal area.

Errors: incorrect use of 'it is a very beautiful' — missing noun after 'beautiful' or remove 'a' (article/adjective error, IDs 22 and 13). Redundant and awkward word order 'as there are in north there are' (sentence structure, ID 26) and repetition 'a plain area is there' (article and word choice, IDs 22 and 13). Correction: remove unnecessary articles, reorder clauses for clarity, use 'plains' for plural landforms, and normalize compass directions with articles 'the north/the south' (article/preposition use, IDs 11 and 22). Suggestion: plan sentence before speaking, use simpler clause order, and remember 'the north/south' and plural nouns for ranges.

× So according to me in my country there is a lot of.

✓ So, according to me, there is a lot to see in my country.

Error: sentence fragment ending with 'there is a lot of.' without completing the noun (sentence without a verb/structure error, IDs 23 and 26). Correction completes the idea with 'a lot to see.' Suggestion: always finish phrases like 'a lot of' with a noun (a lot of scenery/places) or rephrase to 'a lot to see' to avoid fragments.