Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần rút gọn câu, sửa ngữ pháp và tránh tiếng lấp đầy (uh, like). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng thì đúng và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ rõ ràng bằng liên từ hợp lý. Ví dụ: nêu lý do ngắn gọn và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về một khoảnh khắc bạn giữ trong trí nhớ thay vì chụp ảnh.

Ejemplo: No, I prefer to enjoy scenic views with my own eyes because I find that photos often miss the atmosphere. For example, when I visited Ha Long Bay last year, I wanted to remember the changing light and sound of the water, so I focused on experiencing it rather than taking many pictures.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement), loại bỏ từ thừa và dùng từ chính xác (không dùng 'foam filled'). Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo là lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ so sánh ngắn gọn với linking words như 'because' hoặc 'whereas'.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural landscapes and fresh air, whereas cities often feel crowded and dominated by buildings. For instance, countryside roads lined with rice fields are much more relaxing than urban streets full of traffic.

Sugerencia: Tránh tiếng lấp đầy và nói lặp. Sửa ngữ pháp (possessive, verb agreement) và nêu lý do cụ thể (ví dụ địa điểm, đặc điểm cảnh quan) thay vì chỉ nói 'patriot'. Dùng một câu chủ đề và một hoặc hai chi tiết minh họa với linking word như 'because' hoặc 'for example'.

Ejemplo: I prefer the views in Vietnam because the country offers diverse and picturesque scenery, from dramatic mountains to peaceful beaches. For example, the terraced rice fields in Sapa and the coastline in Phu Quoc are uniquely beautiful and memorable to me.

× Well, I would say no because I am a person who enjoy seeing and enjoying the views by eyes.

✓ Well, I would say no because I am a person who enjoys seeing and enjoying the views with my eyes.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'a person who' is singular, so the verb should be 'enjoys' not 'enjoy'. Also 'by eyes' is unnatural; use 'with my eyes' to indicate seeing. Suggestion: match verb to singular subject and use natural prepositional phrase for seeing. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× Like I want to uh, remember all the breathtaking scenery by seeing them.

✓ I want to remember all the breathtaking scenery by seeing it.

Pronoun and noun agreement: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (singular), so use 'it' not 'them'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'it' for uncountable 'scenery' and keep verb form 'seeing' if describing the method. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× Definitely rural areas because in urban areas there are a lot of skyscrapers where so the views, the view there are just concrete jungles.

✓ Definitely rural areas, because in urban areas there are a lot of skyscrapers, so the views there are just concrete jungles.

Awkward clause order and redundancy: 'where so' is incorrect and 'the views, the view there are' has number disagreement. Correction removes 'where' and redundant phrase and makes subject-verb agreement ('views... are'). Suggestion: simplify clauses and ensure subject and verb agree. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× By contrast, rural areas is uh, foam filled with a lot of breathtaking scenery.

✓ By contrast, rural areas are, uh, full of a lot of breathtaking scenery.

Subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Word choice error: 'foam filled' is incorrect; use 'full of' to indicate abundance. Suggestion: ensure plural subject takes plural verb and choose correct collocation ('full of'). (Explanation in English as requested.)

× I prefer views in, uh, Vietnam, my old country, because, uh, I think the first reason is that I'm a patriot and the views here in my country is really beautiful and yeah, I really, really love it.

✓ I prefer views in Vietnam, my home country, because I think the first reason is that I'm a patriot and the views here in my country are really beautiful, and I really, really love them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the views' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Word choice: 'old country' is odd; 'home country' is more natural. Pronoun agreement: use 'them' to refer back to plural 'views' rather than 'it'. Suggestion: match verb and pronoun number and use natural phrases. (Explanation in English as requested.)