Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition; add a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and a linking phrase. Reduce fillers and general statements and give a concrete example or reason for why photography matters to you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes when I travel because they capture unique moments and help me remember places. For example, last year I took photos of a mountain sunrise and sharing them on social media allowed friends to see the view and ask about the trip.

Sugerencia: Correct vocabulary and remove hesitations; start with a clear preference, give two specific reasons using linking words, and include a concrete example. Avoid repetition of 'connected' and fix word choices (e.g., 'urban', not 'arbour').

Ejemplo: I prefer rural areas because they feel more peaceful and offer natural scenery that’s great for photos. For instance, I like photographing sunsets over fields since the open space and soft light make it easier to capture dramatic colours.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer with a clear main idea and specific supporting reasons; avoid repetition and filler words. State preference, then give two distinct reasons (e.g., cultural connection and convenience), linking them with words like 'because' and 'also'. Provide a brief example to illustrate.

Ejemplo: I prefer photographing scenes in my own country because they reflect my culture and are easier to access. For example, I often photograph traditional markets nearby, which helps me document local life without the cost and time of international travel.

× I love taking pictures of different views whenever I travel or I go to any place.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views whenever I travel or go to any place.

The sentence repeats the subject and auxiliary unnecessarily: 'I travel or I go' is redundant. In coordinated verbs with the same subject, omit the second subject 'I' and use the base form 'go' after 'or'. This keeps parallel structure and correct present tense usage.

× It creates memories.

✓ They create memories.

The plural noun 'pictures' is the subject of the sentence, so the plural pronoun 'they' must be used instead of the singular 'it'. Use matching pronoun number to maintain agreement.

× It holds different memories and I love to recall it over and over again.

✓ They hold different memories and I love to recall them over and over again.

Again, 'pictures' is plural, so use 'they' and 'them' instead of 'it'. Pronouns must agree in number with their antecedent.

× Whenever I take pictures, I post it on social media.

✓ Whenever I take pictures, I post them on social media.

'Pictures' is plural, so the object pronoun must be plural 'them' not singular 'it'. Ensure pronoun number agreement with the noun it replaces.

× Personally, I prefer rural areas more than arbour areas.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

The comparative preference typically uses 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A more than B'. Also 'arbour' is a misspelling of 'urban'. Use 'to' for preferences and correct spelling.

× It feels like more connected with the uh environment and more relaxing to take uh pictures uh from different angles.

✓ It feels more connected to the environment and more relaxing to take pictures from different angles.

'Feels like more connected with' is ungrammatical. Use 'feels more connected to' to describe connection to something. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate prepositions; use 'to' after 'connected'.

× Also, whenever I'm taking a shot of UMM sunsets in rural areas, it feels like more connected and I can enjoy the moment.

✓ Also, whenever I'm taking shots of sunsets in rural areas, I feel more connected and can enjoy the moment.

'Taking a shot of UMM sunsets' is unclear and possibly contains an extra abbreviation; 'shots of sunsets' is clearer. Use 'I feel' rather than 'it feels' when the speaker describes their own feeling. Maintain subject-verb agreement and remove unnecessary words.

× Personally, I prefer, uh, taking shots or views from my own country because, uh, I think it represents my country.

✓ Personally, I prefer taking shots or views in my own country because I think they represent it.

Avoid filler 'uh'. 'Shots or views from my own country' is acceptable, but pronouns must agree: 'they represent it' refers to plural 'shots or views' and 'my country'. This clarifies reference and improves cohesion.

× I want to represent my country.

✓ I want to represent my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep as is.

× Also going to different places to take good shots.

✓ Also, going to different places to take good shots is enjoyable for me.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Add a main clause (for example 'is enjoyable for me') or combine with the previous sentence to complete the thought.

× It's cheaper and more available for me to go to any place.

✓ It's cheaper and more convenient for me to go to many places.

'More available' is not idiomatic for people; use 'more convenient'. 'Any place' is vague; 'many places' or 'different places' fits the intended meaning. Ensure adjective choice matches meaning.

× Uh, also it connects me with my country.

✓ Also, it connects me with my country.

Remove filler 'uh'. The sentence is otherwise correct; keeping concise spoken style improves clarity.