Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, like), and use linking words to add one or two specific details. Keep under five sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘sunsets over the lake’).

Ejemplo: Yes. I enjoy photographing different landscapes, especially mountains and lakes. For example, I like capturing sunsets over the lake because the colours reflect beautifully on the water, creating a peaceful atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, fix grammar and avoid repetition. Use a topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Be careful with vocabulary (e.g., ‘old cottages’ not ‘Cates house’).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they have more natural scenery such as mountains, rivers and lakes. Also, rural villages often have charming old cottages with unique architecture, which makes them great subjects for photography.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more grammatical: begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Avoid vague phrases like 'represent to the foreign countries' and use precise expressions (e.g., 'showcase our traditions').

Ejemplo: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has many historical and religious sites that showcase our cultural traditions. Also, the diverse landscapes, such as temples set against mountain backdrops, provide uniquely local scenes that tourists might not find elsewhere.

× Yes, I would love to take the pictures of different views, especially the mountains and the lake, for example, like because of the lake uh, the pictures of the sunset.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views, especially of the mountains and the lake; for example, pictures of the sunset over the lake look so nice.

Original uses unnecessary definite article with 'pictures' and awkward phrasing 'for example, like because of the lake uh, the pictures of the sunset.' Remove filler words and use 'take pictures' (no 'the') and 'especially of' for correct prepositional use. Combine clauses for clarity and use present simple to describe general preference.

× It looks so nice, so I would love to take the pictures.

✓ They look so nice, so I would love to take pictures.

Mismatch between plural 'pictures' and singular verb 'looks'; also unnecessary definite article 'the'. Change verb to plural 'look' and drop 'the' to make the phrase general: 'take pictures.'

× Hmm, I prefer views in the rural areas, uh, because uh, there are so many mountains, lakes, rivers in the rural areas and also the old Cates house, they uh design differently than the rural areas houses.

✓ Hmm, I prefer views in rural areas, because there are so many mountains, lakes, and rivers there, and also the old Cates houses are designed differently from rural houses.

Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas'; use 'in rural areas' not 'in the rural areas.' Add commas and 'and' for list. Use 'there' to avoid repetition. The phrase 'they uh design differently than the rural areas houses' has subject-verb and comparison errors: use passive or 'are designed' and 'differently from' (or 'than') and correct noun phrase 'rural houses.'

× So I would love to take the photography of rural areas.

✓ So I would love to take photographs of rural areas.

'Photography' refers to the activity; when referring to individual images use 'photographs' or 'photos.' Also drop 'the' before 'photography' and use plural 'photographs' to match general preference.

× Uh, I prefer taking the photography in my own country because there are so many historical and the religious places which represents my own cultural old traditions.

✓ I prefer taking photographs in my own country because there are many historical and religious places that represent my cultural traditions.

Use 'photographs' not 'the photography.' Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'religious places.' 'Which represents' is incorrect because 'places' is plural; use 'that represent.' 'My own cultural old traditions' is awkward—use 'my cultural traditions.'

× And also we do have so many temples and also so many mountains which can represent to the foreign countries.

✓ We also have many temples and mountains that can represent our country to foreigners.

'Represent to the foreign countries' is incorrect. Use 'represent our country to foreigners' or 'be representative to foreign visitors.' Also avoid redundant 'also' and 'do have' unless for emphasis. Use 'that' for defining relative clause.

× So I would love to views in my own.

✓ So I would love to view them in my own country.

Original lacks correct verb and object: 'love to views' is ungrammatical. Use 'love to view them' or 'love to take photos of them' and include 'country' to complete phrase. Maintain consistency with earlier statements.