Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and reduce hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., "deep, deep") and filler sounds like "umm."

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel into the mountains and jungles I capture wide landscapes and close-up shots of plants because the light and textures there are very striking.

Sugerencia: Open with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer both") then add a clear contrast using linking words (e.g., "however", "for example"). Remove fillers and be specific about what you like in each setting.

Ejemplo: I prefer both urban and rural views for different reasons. For example, urban views like the night skyline of Tehran are impressive because of the lights and architecture, while rural views offer peaceful landscapes and natural colors.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and simply. Admit limited travel experience briefly, then say what you like about local views with a specific example. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting sentence and avoid unclear phrases.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad much. For instance, I enjoy watching the contrast between Tehran's skyline and the calm, green hills of my hometown because both offer very different photo opportunities.

× I am very fond of the spectacular views that I get to see when we travel far deep into the nature, especially when we get very, umm, deep, deep into the jungles and the mountains.

✓ I am very fond of the spectacular views that I get to see when we travel deep into nature, especially when we go deep into the jungles and the mountains.

The phrase 'travel far deep into the nature' has unnecessary words and incorrect collocation. Use 'travel deep into nature' or 'go deep into the jungles'. Also 'get to see' is acceptable but 'go deep into' fits parallel structure. Remove redundant repetitions like 'far' and duplicated 'deep'. Suggestion: simplify phrases and use natural collocations: 'travel deep into nature' or 'go deep into the jungle(s)'.

× Both have their own dramatic scenes for the urban areas.

✓ Both have their own dramatic scenes; this is also true for urban areas.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Both have their own dramatic scenes for the urban areas' incorrectly attaches 'for the urban areas' to 'both'. Rephrase to make the contrast clear. Suggestion: use a clearer connector and correct clause order: 'Both have their own dramatic scenes; urban areas are no exception.'

× I specifically love the times in Tehran when we get to go up into Umm, a far up, uh, like Mountain View, and you get to see the city at night.

✓ I specifically love the times in Tehran when we go up to a viewpoint on the mountain and see the city at night.

The original contains filler words and faulty phrasing 'go up into Umm, a far up, uh, like Mountain View'. Use 'go up to a viewpoint on the mountain' or 'go up the mountain' for clarity. Also use consistent subject: 'we go' and 'see' rather than switching to 'you get to see'. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use concise, consistent phrasing.

× Rural areas have that natural dramatic feeling, but urban areas are also beautiful.

✓ Rural areas have a natural, dramatic feeling, but urban areas are also beautiful.

Minor punctuation and article issue: use 'a natural, dramatic feeling' (comma between adjectives) and include the article 'a'. Suggestion: place adjectives in correct order and include articles when needed.

× To be honest, I haven't really been to other countries for traveling so I usually have traveled inside my country and to give slightly more views.

✓ To be honest, I haven't really traveled to other countries for tourism, so I usually travel within my own country and have seen more places here.

Tense and verb choice problems: 'haven't really been to other countries for traveling' is awkward; use 'haven't really traveled to other countries for tourism'. 'I usually have traveled inside my country' mixes present perfect with 'usually' which prefers simple present: 'I usually travel within my own country'. 'to give slightly more views' is unclear and unnecessary. Suggestion: use consistent tense and clear vocabulary: 'travel for tourism', 'travel within my country'.

× I haven't said that I would love both views in Tehran and my hometown guide and share, which is a rural area compared to urban city.

✓ I mean that I would love views both in Tehran and in my hometown, which is a rural area compared to the city.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'I haven't said that' contradicts intent; 'guide and share' is irrelevant and unclear. The structure 'which is a rural area compared to urban city' needs article and clearer reference: 'compared to the city'. Suggestion: simplify to a clear statement: 'I would love views both in Tehran and in my hometown, which is rural compared to the city.'