Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar and article errors (e.g., “the car or plane,” “farmland,” “nature” once).

Ejemplo: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by car or plane. For example, I enjoy watching rivers, rolling hills and farmland because the scenery helps me relax and appreciate nature.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, direct response and add a specific reason or brief example. Avoid overly religious phrasing unless relevant; correct grammar (e.g., “appreciating God’s creations” → fine but keep concise; “see all of that nature” is better).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I want to remember beautiful scenes. For instance, I recently photographed a bright sunset over a river, which made me feel very happy.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Avoid repetition and fix phrasing (e.g., “scent of the mountains,” “features of the landscape”). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and panoramic views from the summit. For example, when I reach the top I can see valleys and forests spread out below, and the clean mountain scent helps me feel calm.

× Yes, definitely. I like to see it by the window and or car or plane because I can.

✓ Yes, definitely. I like to look out of the window in a car or plane because I can.

The student used incorrect prepositions and awkward word order. Use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and 'in a car or plane' rather than 'by the window' and 'or car or plane'. Also 'see it' is vague; 'look out of the window' is more natural.

× I can enjoy landscape, rivers, hills and farm lands and it helps me relax and the the view helps me relax and appreciate those those nature.

✓ I can enjoy the landscape, rivers, hills, and farmland, and the view helps me relax and appreciate nature.

Errors include pluralization and article use ('landscape' should be 'the landscape' or 'landscapes'), 'farm lands' should be 'farmland', duplicated words 'the the' and 'those those', and 'those nature' is incorrect; use 'nature'. The corrected sentence fixes articles, plurals, and removes repetitions for clarity.

× Yes, every time. I love to take pictures outside the window appreciating God's creations and also it makes me happy inside that I can see all of those nature.

✓ Yes, every time. I love to take pictures out of the window, appreciating God's creations, and it makes me happy to see all of nature.

Use 'take pictures out of the window' or 'through the window' instead of 'outside the window'. 'All of those nature' is incorrect; use 'all of nature'. 'Makes me happy inside' is unnatural; change to 'makes me happy' and use an infinitive 'to see'.

× For me, I prefer mountains because I want to be.

✓ For me, I prefer mountains because I want to be there.

The verb phrase 'want to be' is incomplete without an adverb or location. Add 'there' to indicate being on the mountain. Present tense 'prefer' is correct.

× I want to see everything when I am on the top of the mountain and I can.

✓ I want to see everything when I am at the top of the mountain, and I can.

Use 'at the top of the mountain' rather than 'on the top'. The clause 'and I can' is acceptable colloquially but better with a comma before it. Clarify by adding a comma.

× I love this. I love the scent or the mount.

✓ I love this. I love the scent of the mountain.

Use 'scent of the mountain' not 'scent or the mount'. 'Mount' as a noun is incorrect here; use 'mountain'. 'Or' is a typo for 'of'.

× I love the smell of the mountain.

✓ I love the smell of the mountain.

Sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. It is retained as-is.

× I love to see all the features in the mountain.

✓ I love to see all the features of the mountain.

Use 'features of the mountain' rather than 'in the mountain' when referring to visible features. 'Of' indicates possession or belonging, which is appropriate here.

× I don't I love to be on the top of the mountain.

✓ I don't know; I love to be at the top of the mountain.

The original contains a fragment 'I don't' followed immediately by another clause, causing confusion. Likely the student intended 'I don't know' or to remove 'I don't'. Also use 'at the top' rather than 'on the top'. The correction provides a coherent sentence.