Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating the general habit, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, kinda) and repetition. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., ‘when I’m driving I prefer to talk with passengers’).

Ejemplo: Usually I do look out of the window, but it depends on whether I’m a passenger or the driver. When I’m a passenger, I often listen to music and daydream while watching the scenery; however, when I’m driving I prefer to talk with the people in the car or focus on the road.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear direct answer first, then give two specific reasons in coherent order. Replace informal phrases and hesitations, and correct word choice errors (e.g., ‘I usually depend on my friends’ rather than ‘dressed on’).

Ejemplo: No, I don’t usually take photos from the car. I prefer to enjoy the moment and the view, and I also rely on my friends to take pictures for me, which they then share with me afterwards.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with your preference or say you like both, then give balanced specific reasons and a linking phrase for contrast. Avoid awkward phrasing (‘I love to say I'm trying to get in the ocean every day’) and incorrect words (‘the Mountaineers’). Use varied vocabulary for activities and sensations.

Ejemplo: I find it hard to choose because I like both, but if I must pick I prefer the sea for water sports like surfing and diving; however, I also enjoy the mountains for hiking and the fresh, crisp air they offer.

× If it's by bus it's nice to listen to music and look out of the window and kinda Daydream.

✓ If it's by bus, it's nice to listen to music, look out of the window, and kind of daydream.

The original used inconsistent capitalization and informal 'kinda' and 'Daydream'. 'Kind of' is preferable in semi-formal speech and 'daydream' should be lowercase; 'listen', 'look', and 'daydream' form a parallel list with verbs in base or -ing forms; here 'listen to', 'look out', and 'daydream' are correct. Add commas for clarity.

× But if I'm driving uh I like having a com like a conversation with the people in the car.

✓ But if I'm driving, I like having a conversation with the people in the car.

Original contained filler words and a fragmented phrase 'having a com like a conversation'. Remove the filler and redundant words to ensure clear subject-verb structure: 'I like having a conversation' correctly matches singular subject 'I' with the verb 'like' and the gerund phrase 'having a conversation'.

× I'm on my phone or more listening to the music and not so much.

✓ I'm on my phone or mostly listening to music and not paying much attention to the scenery.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear ('more listening to the music and not so much'). Rephrase to a complete structure: 'mostly listening to music' uses correct adverb placement and 'not paying much attention to the scenery' clarifies the contrast.

× No I don't, but to be honest I'm really bad with taking pictures.

✓ No, I don't, but to be honest I'm really bad at taking pictures.

Use the preposition 'bad at' rather than 'bad with' when referring to a skill. Also add a comma after 'No' for natural speech punctuation.

× I always kinda dressed on my friends that they are taking pictures and then in the end I'll ask them to AirDrop them to me.

✓ I always kind of depend on my friends to take pictures, and then in the end I'll ask them to AirDrop the photos to me.

Original 'dressed on' is incorrect; likely meant 'depend on'. 'They are taking pictures' is awkward in this context; use infinitive 'to take pictures'. Also clarify 'them' (use 'the photos') to avoid pronoun ambiguity. Replace 'kinda' with 'kind of' for clearer speech.

× Umm 'cause I like enjoying the moment.

✓ Um, 'cause I like enjoying the moment.

This sentence is acceptable but informal. Keep 'enjoying the moment' as gerund phrase; add comma after 'Um' and consistent punctuation. Alternatively, use 'because' in formal speech: 'Because I like enjoying the moment.'

× I love to say I'm trying to get in the ocean every day.

✓ I love to say that I try to get in the ocean every day.

Mixing 'love to say' with 'I'm trying' creates tense mismatch. Use simple present 'I try' to express habitual action. Add 'that' for clarity: 'I love to say that I try to get in the ocean every day.'

× I love surfing and swimming and diving.

✓ I love surfing, swimming, and diving.

List items should be parallel and separated by commas. Use commas to clarify the three activities and maintain parallel gerund forms.

× But on the other hand, I also really enjoy hiking and being in the mountains and the Mountaineers.

✓ But on the other hand, I also really enjoy hiking and being in the mountains and the mountain air.

'The Mountaineers' is incorrect here (it refers to people). Context suggests 'mountain air' or 'mountains' atmosphere. Use 'mountain air' as a noun phrase and maintain parallel structure with 'hiking' and 'being in the mountains.'

× Just the best air there is.

✓ It just has the best air.

Original is a sentence fragment and awkward. Rephrase with correct verb and preposition to form a complete sentence: 'It just has the best air.' This clarifies the subject ('it' meaning the mountains/area) and uses natural English word order.