Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Fix verb agreement and word choice (e.g., "tall buildings" plural, "to minimize space taken", "because the area is small"). Use a linking word to connect reason.

Ejemplo: Yes. I live in the city centre of Vietnam, so there are many tall buildings nearby. Because the area is small, developers build upwards to save space, which is why skyscrapers are common in my neighbourhood.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and tighten sentences. Give one clear reason and a contrasting preference with a linking word (e.g., "however" or "instead"). Be specific about what you like photographing and why.

Ejemplo: Not really. I see tall buildings every day, so I don't find them interesting to photograph. Instead, I prefer photographing small cottages because their peaceful setting and traditional details feel tranquil and mentally refreshing.

Sugerencia: Be precise and reduce redundancy. Start with the building name, give a specific reason, and mention what you hope to see or learn. Correct phrasing: "discover the meaning behind each piece" rather than "find out the moral under each art piece."

Ejemplo: I'd like to visit the Duval Museum in Paris. As an art lover, I'm eager to see its modern collection and discover the meaning behind each piece, which I find intellectually satisfying.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct grammar. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons. Fix collocations: say "my family live" (or "my family is living"), "on the outskirts", "custom-made house", and explain "maximum interior" more clearly (e.g., "spacious interior").

Ejemplo: Not really. My family currently live in an apartment in a tall building, so when I'm settled I would prefer a custom-made cottage on the outskirts of the city because I want a quieter neighbourhood and a spacious interior.

× So I live in the city center of Vietnam, so there's a lot of skyscrapers and tall building to minimum the place taken because they handle it's a really small place.

✓ I live in the city center of Vietnam, so there are a lot of skyscrapers and tall buildings to minimize the space taken because it is a really small area.

Errors: incorrect use of there be (plural) and article/number agreement. Use 'there are' for plural nouns (skyscrapers, tall buildings). 'Tall building' should be plural ('tall buildings'). 'To minimum' is incorrect verb form; use 'to minimize'. 'Place' should be 'space' or 'area' here, and 'they handle it's a really small place' is unclear and ungrammatical; change to 'because it is a really small area'. Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement with 'there is/are', make nouns plural when referring to multiple items, use correct infinitive verbs ('to minimize'), and choose appropriate noun ('space/area').

× Not really because I'm not really into taking photos and especially I see tall buildings like every day everywhere so I don't have interest in taking photos of them.

✓ Not really, because I'm not really into taking photos and I see tall buildings every day everywhere, so I'm not interested in taking photos of them.

Errors: 'I see tall buildings like every day everywhere' is colloquial and awkward; remove 'like'. 'I don't have interest' is incorrect collocation—use 'I'm not interested' or 'I don't have an interest'. Suggestion: use 'I'm not interested in' for expressing lack of interest and simplify adverb placement: 'every day' after the verb or 'everywhere' at end.

× I really want to take photos of small cottage house instead.

✓ I really want to take photos of small cottage houses instead.

Error: noun number agreement—'small cottage house' is awkward and likely plural if referring to that type; use 'cottages' or 'a small cottage'. Also 'cottage house' is redundant; 'cottage' or 'small cottage' is sufficient. Suggestion: match adjective+noun number and prefer 'small cottage' or 'small cottages' depending on meaning.

× It's really tranquil and mentally refreshing.

✓ They are really tranquil and mentally refreshing.

Error: pronoun mismatch—original sentence follows 'small cottage houses' (plural) so descriptor should use plural pronoun 'they'. If referring to 'a small cottage' (singular) original 'It's' would be correct. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun being described.

× I'd say the Duvall Museum, which is located in Paris.

✓ I'd say the Duvall Museum, which is located in Paris.

No change needed for grammar here; sentence is correct. Included for completeness. Suggestion: none.

× It's an Art Museum and I'm really into art, so I really love to go to that museum one day and find out the moral under each art piece, which is really satisfying.

✓ It's an art museum and I'm really into art, so I would love to go to that museum one day and discover the meaning behind each art piece, which would be really satisfying.

Errors: use of 'love to go' with future aspiration is better as 'would love to go' for a wish. 'Find out the moral under each art piece' is unnatural; use 'discover the meaning behind each art piece'. Capitalization: 'art museum' need not be capitalized. Suggestion: use conditional 'would' for desires about the future and choose natural collocations ('discover the meaning').

× Not really, because currently my family are living in an apartment in a tall building, so in the future when I'm settled down, I really want to live in a cottage house located in the outskirts of the city.

✓ Not really, because currently my family is living in an apartment in a tall building, so in the future when I'm settled down, I really want to live in a cottage on the outskirts of the city.

Errors: collective noun 'family' is treated as singular in American English, so use 'is living'. 'Cottage house' is redundant—use 'cottage'. Use 'on the outskirts' not 'in the outskirts'. Suggestion: treat collective nouns correctly and use correct preposition 'on' with 'outskirts'.

× My home must be a bespoke house and it has maximum interior.

✓ My home must be a bespoke house with maximum interior space.

Errors: 'it has maximum interior' is ungrammatical; use 'with maximum interior space' or 'with a spacious interior'. 'Bespoke house' is acceptable but 'bespoke home' sounds more natural. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'spacious interior' or 'maximum interior space' and attach modifiers properly.