Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make minor grammar corrections and tighten wording. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy ("quite a few" + "now a common sight").

Ejemplo: Yes — there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, many of them are modern apartment complexes and glass-fronted office towers, and in the past few years new high-rises have replaced older low-rise blocks, making the skyline much denser.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and concise. To improve further, link sentences more smoothly and add a brief specific example to make it more vivid. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, occasionally. I usually photograph buildings that have unusual facades or historical details — for instance, I took several pictures of a colorful Art Deco cinema while on holiday last year — but I don't consider architectural photography my main hobby.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and remove hesitation. Combine ideas into 2–3 coherent sentences using linking words. Be specific about what you like there and avoid unclear phrases ("the right way").

Ejemplo: Yes — I would like to visit Anmum Tumfoe Celadon more often because it is very close to my house and has a wide range of shops and restaurants. Moreover, it offers a cinema and indoor play areas, so it's a good place to relax on rainy weekends.

Sugerencia: Fix word choice errors and streamline sentences. Start with a clear stance, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Replace incorrect words ("grow friends") with accurate vocabulary.

Ejemplo: Not really — I would prefer to live in a house with a garden. For example, having outdoor space would let me grow vegetables and flowers, enjoy fresh air, and give my family more room to relax, which feels more peaceful than apartment living.

× Over the past few years the area has become much more developed and a high rise building are now a common sight.

✓ Over the past few years the area has become much more developed and high-rise buildings are now a common sight.

The phrase 'a high rise building are' has a subject-verb agreement error and article misuse. 'A' with singular 'building' requires 'is', but the intended meaning is plural (many tall buildings), so use plural noun 'high-rise buildings' with plural verb 'are'. Also use a hyphen in 'high-rise' as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and match the verb and article accordingly; for plural, remove 'a' and use plural verb 'are'.

× However, I wouldn't say architecture photography is a major hobby of mine.

✓ However, I wouldn't say architectural photography is a major hobby of mine.

The noun phrase should use the adjective form 'architectural' to modify 'photography', not 'architecture' (a noun). This is a word form error where an adjective is required. Suggestion: use adjective forms to modify nouns (architectural photography).

× It's a large shopping mall with plenty of stores, restaurants and, uh, entertainment facilities, so it's the right way. A place to relax during the wet weekend.

✓ It's a large shopping mall with plenty of stores, restaurants and entertainment facilities, so it's the right place to relax during the wet weekend.

The original contains a fragmented sentence ('A place to relax during the wet weekend') and an incorrect phrase 'the right way.' The intended meaning is 'the right place.' Combine fragments into one grammatically complete sentence and use 'place' instead of 'way.' Also remove filler 'uh' in writing. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure clauses connect to form a complete sentence and choose the correct noun ('place').

× Not really. Although living in a high rise apartment can be convenient, I would prefer to live in a house with a garden.

✓ Not really. Although living in a high-rise apartment can be convenient, I would prefer to live in a house with a garden.

This sentence mainly needs hyphenation for the compound adjective 'high-rise' before 'apartment.' The original 'high rise' as two words is acceptable in some contexts but hyphenated form is standard when used as an adjective. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns ('high-rise apartment').

× I love having some outdoor space where I can grow friends, enjoy fresh air and spend time with my family.

✓ I love having some outdoor space where I can grow plants, enjoy fresh air and spend time with my family.

The phrase 'grow friends' is incorrect word choice; one does not 'grow' friends. Likely the speaker meant 'grow plants' or 'grow flowers/vegetables.' This is a lexical error. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs and objects (e.g., 'grow plants') to convey intended meaning.