Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more accurate and natural with word choice, avoid repetition, and give one clear supporting detail. Use a topic sentence, then a specific example. Also limit to maximum five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a famous high-rise in Kokapet is one of the tallest towers in southern India, and it stands out because of its glass facade and modern design.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and natural by using correct collocations and linking words. Provide a specific reason and a short example of what you photograph.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph large buildings because I admire their unique designs and colours. For instance, I like capturing ornate facades and unusual shapes that look striking in early morning light.

Sugerencia: Structure the response with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and use linking words for clarity. Correct grammar for questions and reduce hesitations.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a 58-floor tower in Kokapet. I am curious about the views from the top and how residents arrange their apartments, so I hope to see the panoramic skyline and the building's interior layout.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and filler words, use a clear topic sentence, and give specific benefits of living in a tall building. Keep it within five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers panoramic views and more natural light. For example, from a high-floor apartment I could watch the sunrise, see clouds drift by, and enjoy a quieter environment away from street noise.

× Yes, there are many high resources near my home.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.

The student used the wrong noun 'resources' and adjective 'high' with an incorrect collocation. Use the preposition 'near' correctly here, but change the noun to 'buildings' and adjective to 'tall' to match meaning. Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary that collocates with 'buildings', e.g. 'tall buildings'.

× One of the most famous high rise is at Kokapet.

✓ One of the most famous high-rises is in Kokapet.

The phrase 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a noun compound and should be pluralized when preceded by 'one of the'. Also use preposition 'in' for a place/area rather than 'at'. Suggestion: use 'One of the most famous high-rises is in Kokapet.'

× So basically it is one of the tallest building in southern India.

✓ So basically it is one of the tallest buildings in southern India.

When using 'one of the', the noun should be plural ('buildings'). The verb 'is' is correct with the singular subject 'it', but the noun following 'one of the' must be plural. Suggestion: ensure plural noun after 'one of the'.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of buildings which are really huge and tall.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of buildings that are really huge and tall.

Use 'that' rather than 'which' in restrictive relative clauses in this context. The gerund 'taking' is correct. Suggestion: use 'that' for essential information about the buildings.

× So the uniqueness or the design or the paints that attracts me to take the photo of the building.

✓ So the uniqueness, the design, or the paint attracts me to take photos of the building.

Use commas for list items and correct noun 'paint' (uncountable) or 'paints' if referring to multiple types, but 'paint' is more natural. Verb must agree with singular subject 'uniqueness, the design, or the paint' so use 'attracts'. Also use plural 'photos' for general action and remove extra 'the' before 'uniqueness'. Suggestion: simplify: 'The uniqueness, design, or paint attracts me to take photos of the building.'

× Yes, there's this building in Kokapet which is really tall, which consists of 58 floors.

✓ Yes, there's a building in Kokapet which is really tall and has 58 floors.

Use 'a building' rather than 'this building' when introducing it, and 'has 58 floors' is more natural than 'consists of 58 floors'. Also combine clauses with 'and' to avoid repetitive 'which'. Suggestion: use 'has' for possession of floors.

× So I really want to visit and want to know what would it be, what would it look like up from there?

✓ So I really want to visit and know what it would be like and what it would look like from up there.

Indirect question word order should be used (subject before verb): 'what it would be like' not 'what would it be'. Also combine and reorder phrases for natural flow and use 'from up there' rather than 'up from there'. Suggestion: practice forming indirect questions: 'I want to know what it would be like.'

× So I really want to know how people, how people will stay there.

✓ So I really want to know how people will live there.

Repetition 'how people, how people' is redundant. Use 'live' instead of 'stay' for permanent or long-term residence. Maintain future/modal consistency: 'will live' is acceptable but present 'live' can also be used for general ability. Suggestion: remove redundancy and choose appropriate verb.

× Yes, I want to experience living in a living on a tall building because I would, I would love to experience the panoramic view up from there.

✓ Yes, I want to experience living in a tall building because I would love to see the panoramic view from up there.

Remove duplicated phrase 'living in a living on a'. Use 'see' instead of repeating 'experience' and use 'from up there' rather than 'up from there'. Also avoid repeating 'I would'. Suggestion: simplify and avoid repetition: 'I want to experience living in a tall building to see the panoramic view from up there.'

× Also, I would see clouds moving, uh, vehicles moving.

✓ Also, I would see clouds moving and vehicles moving.

Replace filler 'uh' and use conjunction 'and' for listing observable things. Articles are fine here; issue is informal filler. Suggestion: remove fillers in formal speech and connect items properly.

× So yeah, I would love to stay on high rises.

✓ So yeah, I would love to live in a high-rise.

Use 'live in' rather than 'stay on' for residency. Use singular 'a high-rise' or plural 'high-rises' consistently; 'live in a high-rise' is more natural. Suggestion: choose correct verb for residence and correct noun form.