Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix errors (e.g., "I live in public housing that goes up to the 43rd floor" and "my house is surrounded"). Use a linking word if you add another detail (e.g., "Additionally").

Ejemplo: Yes. I live in public housing that reaches the 43rd floor. Additionally, my flat is surrounded by several similar towers, so the area has many relatively tall buildings.

Sugerencia: Complete your answer and avoid unfinished sentences. Give a clear condition and a reason, using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Replace vague phrases ("a New York") with correct forms. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: It depends on the building. If I'm visiting Europe, I often take photos because the architecture is unique and different from home. However, if I'm in a city like New York, I usually don't photograph every building because I'm more interested in the neighbourhood atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers ("uh") and repeat words. Begin with a clear statement, then give specific reasons and use linking words like "because" or "so". Be more precise: "the top deck" could be "the observation deck" and say what you expect to see.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building because it has a famous observation deck. From the top, I hope to enjoy panoramic views of New York and take photos of the skyline.

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid repeating the same idea. Use plural/singular agreement correctly ("tall buildings mean" or "a tall building means").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. I like tall buildings because they house many people, so there are more opportunities to meet neighbours and make friends. I enjoy the social atmosphere in a large residential tower.

× Yes, I live in a public housing which goes up to 43rd floor and I would my house was surrounded by multiple public housing as well so they are relatively tall compared to any other buildings.

✓ Yes, I live in public housing that goes up to the 43rd floor, and my house is surrounded by several other public housing blocks, so they are relatively tall compared to other buildings.

The phrase 'a public housing' is incorrect; 'public housing' is uncountable or refer to 'public housing blocks' as countable. 'Which' should be 'that' for a defining clause. 'Goes up to 43rd floor' needs the article 'the' before '43rd floor'. 'I would my house was surrounded' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is present 'my house is surrounded'. 'Multiple public housing' should be 'several other public housing blocks' to be grammatical and clear. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× It depends on what kind of building.

✓ It depends on what kind of building it is.

The original sentence omits the verb clause and sounds incomplete in conversational context. Adding 'it is' completes the sentence structure and clearly links the subject to the condition.

× If I'm traveling to a foreign country, for example Europe, I may take photos because it's a unique design for the buildings in Europe.

✓ If I'm traveling to a foreign country, for example Europe, I may take photos because the buildings in Europe have unique designs.

'It's a unique design for the buildings in Europe' uses 'it' and singular 'a unique design' awkwardly. Better to refer to 'the buildings' and use plural 'have unique designs'. Also keep definite article 'the' with 'buildings in Europe'.

× But if it's a New York, I would not take pictures because I.

✓ But if I'm in New York, I would not take pictures because I prefer to experience the place rather than photograph it.

'It's a New York' is incorrect; use 'in New York' to indicate location. The original sentence is also incomplete ('because I.'). Provide a complete reason; here we suggest a plausible completion that fits the context and tense.

× Uh, yes, I would like to see the Empire State Building and I heard that Empire State Building is very tall and I can see the entire New York, uh, visiting the top deck and I wish to take photos of the overview of the New York.

✓ Yes, I would like to see the Empire State Building. I have heard that the Empire State Building is very tall and from the top deck you can see all of New York, so I would like to take photos of the overview.

Use 'the Empire State Building' consistently with the definite article. 'I heard that Empire State Building' needs 'the'. 'I can see the entire New York' is unnatural; use 'you can see all of New York' or 'you can see the whole of New York'. Break into sentences for clarity and correct tense consistency.

× Yes, I do want to live in the tall building because tall buildings means the building itself houses a lot of people and I could have a lot of neighbors and I could meet a lot of amazing people who live there and I wish to socialize with them.

✓ Yes, I do want to live in a tall building because tall buildings mean the building itself houses a lot of people, so I could have many neighbors and meet a lot of amazing people who live there, and I would like to socialize with them.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'tall buildings means' should be 'tall buildings mean' because the subject 'buildings' is plural. Also adjust 'the tall building' to 'a tall building' to match general desire. Replace repeated 'I could' with smoother conjunctions and use 'would like' instead of 'wish' for natural spoken English.