Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use linking words and correct articles and number expressions. Mention specifics (e.g., exact number of floors) in one clear sentence and then add one supporting detail with a linking word.

Ejemplo: Yes. I live in a 20‑storey condominium in Ratchayothin, and there are many tall buildings nearby. For example, the area also has shopping malls and a cineplex, so the neighbourhood feels very urban.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and fluently. Remove hesitation and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain why and give a specific example of what you photograph (e.g., particular building types or times of day).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph cityscapes, especially skyscrapers and historic facades. For instance, I like taking pictures at sunset because the light highlights the buildings' shapes and colours.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with two precise reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'also'). Correct grammar (it has / it is an example of). Avoid vague phrases like 'historical evidence.'

Ejemplo: I would like to visit Taipei 101 because it is an iconic landmark and a symbol of Taiwan's modern architecture. Also, I am interested in its cultural significance and the views from the observatory.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main point in a direct sentence and fix grammar and word choice ('live' not 'leave', 'concern' not 'concerns', 'height' vs 'security'). Use a linking word to explain why and give a specific example of a security concern.

Ejemplo: I don't mind living in a tall building provided it is secure. For example, I would only move in if the building had 24‑hour security, secure access to floors and reliable emergency procedures.

× Absolutely, nowadays I live in the one of the condominiums in Rashiyotin.

✓ Absolutely, nowadays I live in one of the condominiums in Rashiyotin.

The phrase 'the one of the condominiums' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' before 'one of'. When referring to a single item from a group, use 'one of the condominiums' (no 'the' before 'one'). Replace 'the one of' with 'one of the' to form the correct article expression.

× It is a tall, It is also a tall building with a 20 floors uh.

✓ It is a tall building with 20 floors.

This sentence is repetitive and contains an incorrect article and number phrase. Remove the repeated clause and use '20 floors' without the article 'a' before a number. Also combine into one concise sentence: 'It is a tall building with 20 floors.'

× Moreover, the surrounded areas also consist of shopping malls, Cineplex and other condominiums.

✓ Moreover, the surrounding areas also consist of shopping malls, a cineplex and other condominiums.

'Surrounded areas' is incorrect; use the adjective 'surrounding'. Also, 'Cineplex' as a common noun should be preceded by an article 'a' unless it is a specific brand name; use lowercase unless proper noun. These changes correct noun form and article usage.

× So there are many various tall buildings near my home.

✓ So there are many tall buildings near my home.

'Many' and 'various' together are redundant. Choose one quantifier: 'many tall buildings' or 'various tall buildings'. Removing 'various' makes the sentence more natural.

× I often take a photo of city landscapes.

✓ I often take photos of city landscapes.

'Photo' should be plural ('photos') when speaking generally about repeated actions. Use plural to match 'often' and the general activity.

× Does it include the buildings, Umm, whether the raw rise or the skyscrapers?

✓ Does that include buildings, whether low-rise or skyscrapers?

The sentence uses 'Does it include the buildings' awkwardly and contains typos: 'raw rise' should be 'low-rise'. Replace 'it' with 'that' to refer to 'city landscapes' and correct the noun phrase 'low-rise or skyscrapers' for clarity.

× I also capture it because umm, I prefer umm, take a photo of landscape.

✓ I also capture them because I prefer to take photos of landscapes.

Pronoun agreement: refer to 'photos' or 'buildings' with 'them'. The verb 'prefer' needs the infinitive 'to take' after it. Use plural 'photos' and 'landscapes' for general preference.

× If I have to choose now, I would umm, rather visit the Taipei 101 building not only because it's historical evidence, uh, but also it have a cultural heritage of people in Taiwan.

✓ If I had to choose now, I would rather visit the Taipei 101 building not only because it's historically significant, but also because it has cultural importance for the people of Taiwan.

Conditional form: when imagining a hypothetical choice now, use 'If I had to choose' with 'would'. 'Historical evidence' is wrong collocation; use 'historically significant' or 'of historical importance'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it have' should be 'it has'. Clarify 'cultural heritage of people' to 'cultural importance for the people'.

× Thus I want to visit once in my lifetime.

✓ Thus I want to visit it once in my lifetime.

The sentence misses the object 'it' referring to the building. Adding 'it' makes the sentence complete. 'Once in my lifetime' is acceptable present/future desire; no past tense change needed.

× I can't leave a rather tall or short booty due to if if it had some security issues.

✓ I can't live in a very tall or very short building if it has security issues.

Multiple problems: 'leave' should be 'live', 'booty' is incorrect for 'building', and the conditional is confused. Use 'I can't live in a very tall or very short building if it has security issues.' This fixes verb choice, vocabulary, and conditional logic.

× I can leave any in any building.

✓ I can live in any building.

'Leave' is incorrect; 'live' is intended. Also 'any in any building' is redundant. Use 'I can live in any building' to express flexibility.

× My concerns is not in the height but for the security aspect.

✓ My concern is not the height but the security aspect.

Subject-verb agreement: 'concerns is' should be 'concern is' (singular). Preposition use: say 'not the height but the security aspect' rather than 'in' or 'for'. This yields a clearer, grammatical sentence.