Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two precise supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., “I live country”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Also correct grammar: say “I live in the city” or “in an urban area of Tokyo,” and “they are taller than buildings in rural areas.”

Ejemplo: Yes. I live in an urban area of Tokyo, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several apartment towers and office blocks within a ten-minute walk, which makes the neighborhood feel densely built-up.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give a reason and an example. Fix word order and prepositions: say “I take photos with my smartphone” and “buildings I visit.” Use a linking phrase like “for example” to give specifics.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings with my smartphone because I enjoy architectural details. For example, when I travel abroad I photograph façades and interesting rooftops to remember the places I visited.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly: if you have a specific building, name it and explain why; if not, say you don’t have a particular one but mention a memorable example. Correct the name (Sagrada Família) and use linking words like “however” appropriately. Provide one or two specific reasons why it was impressive.

Ejemplo: I don't have a specific building I must visit, but I was very impressed by the Sagrada Família in Spain when I visited. Its intricate façades and towering spires fascinated me because of the detailed stonework and unique design by Gaudí.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and a concise reason plus a preference. Improve grammar: use “Honestly, no” or “I wouldn't, because I'm afraid of heights.” Use linking words like “so” to connect reason and preference, and say “middle floors, such as the fifth floor.”

Ejemplo: Honestly, no — I wouldn't want to live in a very tall building because I'm afraid of heights. So I prefer a middle floor, for example the fifth floor, which feels safer and is more convenient for daily living.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live country.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live in the countryside.

The original sentence 'I live country' is missing preposition and correct noun form. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) because the phrase lacks required words. Use 'in the countryside' to indicate living in a rural area; 'countryside' is the correct noun and requires the preposition 'in' and the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: Learn common location phrases: 'in the countryside', 'in the city', 'in a town'.

× I live in an urban area in Tokyo, so I don't know my home, including my home.

✓ I live in an urban area in Tokyo, so I don't know much about rural homes.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear ('I don't know my home, including my home') which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). The student likely intended to contrast urban and rural homes. Rephrase to 'I don't know much about rural homes' to convey meaning clearly. Suggestion: Keep contrasting ideas concise: 'I live in an urban area, so I don't know much about rural life or rural homes.'

× Uh, very taller than other rural areas.

✓ They are much taller than buildings in rural areas.

The phrase 'very taller' is incorrect; 'taller' (comparative adjective) cannot be modified by 'very' in that form. This falls under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13). Use 'much taller' or 'considerably taller' before the comparative, and clarify the subject. Also 'other rural areas' should be 'buildings in rural areas' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'much taller' with comparatives and specify the noun being compared.

× Yes, I'm fond of taking photos of my smartphone and especially I travel abroad.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of taking photos with my smartphone, and especially when I travel abroad.

The original uses the wrong preposition 'of' with 'smartphone' and has a run-on that lacks a linking word. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Use 'with' to indicate the instrument used to take photos. Also add 'when' to link the clause about traveling abroad. Suggestion: Use 'take photos with my smartphone' and connect ideas with 'when' or 'especially when'.

× I always take photos about, uh, buildings where I visited.

✓ I always take photos of the buildings I visit or visited.

The phrase 'take photos about' and 'where I visited' are incorrect structures (ID 26). Use 'take photos of' to indicate the object of photography, and use 'the buildings I visited' (past) or 'I visit' (present) to match tense. Since talking about habitual action, 'I visit' or 'I have visited' would be appropriate. Suggestion: Say 'I always take photos of the buildings I visit' for habitual actions.

× Well, I don't have any particular buildings that I want to visit or take photos.

✓ Well, I don't have any particular buildings that I want to visit or photograph.

The sentence is missing the object after 'take photos' and has awkward verb choice; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'photograph' or complete the phrase as 'take photos of'. Suggestion: Use 'photograph' as a verb or 'take photos of' followed by the object.

× However, when I visited, uh, Sakurada Familia in Spain, that was amazing.

✓ However, when I visited Sagrada Familia in Spain, it was amazing.

This sentence has a misnamed landmark and awkward structure (ID 26). The correct name is 'Sagrada Familia' and 'that was amazing' is better as 'it was amazing' referring to the building. Also remove the unnecessary comma after 'visited'. Suggestion: Use correct proper nouns and simple pronoun reference: 'it was amazing.'

× Honestly not, I'm afraid of height so I never want to live in the tall buildings so I prefer living in middle stages such as fifth floor.

✓ Honestly, no. I'm afraid of heights, so I would never want to live in a tall building; I prefer living on a middle floor, such as the fifth floor.

Several issues: 'Honestly not' is unnatural; 'afraid of height' should be 'afraid of heights'; 'never want' with general preference is better as 'would never want' (modal verb nuance) — this touches modal verb usage (ID 4). Also plural/singular and article errors: 'the tall buildings' should be 'a tall building' or 'tall buildings', and 'middle stages such as fifth floor' is incorrect — use 'middle floor' and include 'the' before ordinal (ID 22 Article errors and ID 1 plural/singular). The main targeted error per instructions is modal verb usage (ID 4). Suggestion: Use 'would never want' for hypothetical preference, 'afraid of heights', and 'the fifth floor' or 'a middle floor'.