Food— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct word choices, simplify sentences, and add a clear topic sentence. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'also').

Ejemplo: My favourite food is traditional Vietnamese cuisine, especially pho and bánh cuốn. I like them because they have fresh herbs and varied textures that are very satisfying. Also, eating these dishes helps me preserve my cultural identity and enjoy familiar flavours daily.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar (past tense and plural forms), make the topic sentence explicit, and add a brief reason using a linking word ('because' or 'so'). Keep it concise and natural.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I liked crispy snacks such as crisps and chips. However, because I later developed an immune problem, I had to change my diet. Now I prefer vegetables and healthier meals.

Sugerencia: Use precise vocabulary ('seasons' not 'sessions'), make the first sentence a clear topic sentence, and tighten the example. Use linking words ('for example', 'so') appropriately.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do change my diet with the seasons because of my health problems. For example, in winter I drink warm water and eat hot meals rather than cold foods like ice cream, since my weakened immune system makes me sensitive to the cold.

Sugerencia: Correct vocabulary mistakes ('crisps' not 'scripts'), fix grammar and awkward phrasing, give one clear contrast sentence using linking words ('however' or 'but'), and be specific about what you like now.

Ejemplo: Yes, it has changed. I used to enjoy crisps and other salty snacks, but after I developed immune and respiratory problems I had to change my diet. Now I prefer vegetables and simple, healthy meals.

× I love Vietnamese traditional food, especially pho and moontian, because the rich brought fresh herbs and textures are incredibly satisfying.

✓ I love traditional Vietnamese food, especially pho and moontian, because the rich broth, fresh herbs, and diverse textures are incredibly satisfying.

The original has word order issues and incorrect word choice: 'Vietnamese traditional' should be 'traditional Vietnamese' (adjective order). 'rich brought' is a typo; likely 'rich broth'. Also list items need correct nouns and commas: 'fresh herbs and textures' is vague, so 'fresh herbs, and diverse textures' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Follow adjective order (opinion-size-age-shape-color-origin-material-purpose noun) and proofread for typos; use commas to separate items in a list.

× Eating the dishes helps me preserve my cultural identity and keeps the traditional flavors alive in my daily life.

✓ Eating these dishes helps me preserve my cultural identity and keeps traditional flavors alive in my daily life.

Use 'these dishes' to refer back clearly; 'the traditional flavors' can be generalized to 'traditional flavors'. This fixes article use and reference clarity. Suggestion: Use demonstrative pronouns for clarity and omit unnecessary definite articles when speaking generally.

× When I was young I used to likes crispy snacks such as crisps and chips.

✓ When I was young I used to like crispy snacks such as crisps and chips.

After 'used to' the verb should be in base form 'like'; 'likes' is third-person singular present, which is incorrect here. Suggestion: After 'used to' always use the base verb form.

× After I developed a problem with my immune system, I had to change my diet and now I prefer vegetables and healthier meals.

✓ After I developed a problem with my immune system, I had to change my diet, and now I prefer vegetables and healthier meals.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'and now' to join clauses smoothly. Tenses are consistent: past for event, present for current preference. Suggestion: Use commas to separate coordinated clauses for readability.

× I have some health problems so I change my diet according to the sessions.

✓ I have some health problems, so I change my diet according to the seasons.

'Sessions' is the wrong word; the correct word is 'seasons' when referring to times of the year. Also add a comma before 'so' when joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Choose correct vocabulary for context and punctuate compound sentences with a comma before coordinating conjunctions.

× For example, in winter I drink warm water and eat hot meals instead of cold foods like ice cream because my weak immune system makes me more sensitive to cold.

✓ For example, in winter I drink warm water and eat hot meals instead of cold foods like ice cream, because my weak immune system makes me more sensitive to cold.

Sentence is grammatically correct but needs a comma before 'because' when the clause explains the whole preceding clause; also 'weak immune system' is acceptable but could be 'a weak immune system' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use articles where appropriate and add commas to improve readability.

× Oh yes, surely. In the past I used to like scripts and snacks, which is really flavor and feature booming flavor.

✓ Oh yes, certainly. In the past I used to like crisps and snacks, which had strong flavors and were very tasty.

Multiple errors: 'surely' is unnatural here — 'certainly' fits better. 'scripts' is a typo for 'crisps'. The relative clause 'which is really flavor and feature booming flavor' is ungrammatical; it should describe the snacks using proper adjectives and verb agreement: 'which had strong flavors and were very tasty.' Suggestion: Use appropriate adverbs ('certainly'), correct typos, ensure relative clauses agree in number and use natural descriptive phrases.

× However, after experiencing some problems with my immune system and my respiratory system, I have to change my diet and now I am more into vegetable.

✓ However, after experiencing problems with my immune and respiratory systems, I had to change my diet, and now I prefer vegetables.

Tense consistency: 'after experiencing' followed by 'I have to change' is awkward; use past 'had to' because the change happened after the problems. 'My immune system and my respiratory system' is wordy; 'my immune and respiratory systems' is concise. 'More into vegetable' is incorrect; use 'prefer vegetables.' Suggestion: Maintain consistent tenses when describing past events, use plural nouns for countable items like 'vegetables,' and simplify repetitive phrases.